Oct. 12, 2020
Effect of Modern Equipment on Language Skills
Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in
communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skills. To
what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no shortage of opinion on using technological devices leaves negative effects on language skills or has positive benefits besides their disadvantages. In my opinion, utilizing modern equipment can give rise to productive results. I feel this way for several reasons.
First of all, these devices, as their names suggest, are a means to achieve some goals in the first place. This leads to the conclusion that the overall assessment of them depends on how and for what aims they are used. You see, the internet at the hands of evil people might result in catastrophes, or dignifying people can make the world a better place to live by making use of it. My personal experience is a great example of this. I have an enthusiastic desire to read. My house is rather small and does not have much space to keep books. The problem was solved easily by buying a laptop. Now I have hundreds of books inside my laptop. As a result, the range of my studies has increased significantly and my reading skills have improved tremendously. The possibility of reading these numbers of books became possible just by utilizing a modern-day device.
Secondly, there are some programs that correct your written documents, say, by identifying misspelled words. Although this may lead to the thought that these programs tempt people to do not attempt to improve their writing skills, on the contrary, it can help to achieve a higher skill easier by showing their mistakes on the spot. Moreover, people who have bad handwriting can gain benefit from writing programs. Drawing from my own experience, my handwriting is barely legible despite having tried hard to improve it. People had trouble reading my writing and were always complaining about my handwriting. Considering that using electronic devices has become the most important way to communicate in individuals’ lives, my problem has almost resolved by embracing new technological equipment. It's certainly clear to see why I believe the growing use of new technologies can help people improve the quality of their writing.
In conclusion, computers and mobile phones can lend themselves to improving language skills. This is because depending on how we use them they can be quite useful and they have options like correcting writing.
EThe effect of Modern Equipment on Language Skills
Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in
communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skills.
To
what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no shortage of opinion onthat using technological devices leavehas negative effects on language skills or has positive benefits besides their disadvantages.
In my opinion, utilizing modern equipment can give rise to productive results.
I feel this way for several reasons.
First of all, these devices, as their names suggest, are a means to achieve some goals in the first place.
This leads to the conclusion that the overall assessment of them depends on how and for what aims they are used.
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"You see" is a very conversational phrase and this looks like a formal essay.
My personal experience is a great example of this.
I have an enthusiastic keen desire to read.
"enthusiastic" is normally only used of a person
My house is rather small and does not have much space to keep books.
The problem was solved easily by buying a laptop.
Now I have hundreds of books insideon my laptop.
As a result, the range of my studies has increased significantly and my reading skills have improved tremendously.
The possibility of reading theseat numbers of books became possible just by utilizing a modern-day device.
Secondly, there are some programs that correct your written documents, say, by identifying misspelled words, for example.
"say" is more conversational style
Although this may lead to the thought that these programs tempt people to do not to attempt to improve their writing skills, on the contrary, it can help to achieve a higher skill easiermake it easier to improve those skills by showing their writer's mistakes on the spotimmediately.
Moreover, people who have bad handwriting can gain benefit from writing programs.
Drawing from myIn own experience, my handwriting is barely legible despite having tried hard to improve it.
"drawing" would only be possible if both clauses have the same subject, e.g. "Drawing on my own experience, I would like to point out that..."
People had trouble reading my writing and were always complaining about my handwriting.
Considering that using electronic devices has become the most important way to communicate in individuals’people's lives, my problem has almost been resolved by embracing new technological equipment.
"has been resolved": you need the passive here.
It' is certainly clear to see why I believe the growing use of new technologies can help people improve the quality of their writing.
"It's" (an other contractions such as "won't" or "doesn't") are only used in informal writing, e.g. in a letter to a friend. As this is a formal essay, we write it out in full, e.g. "it is", "it will not" and "it does not".
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An excellent essay, Alisiah. I'm an English teacher and would definitely give you a good grade for that!
Oct. 20, 2020
That's nice of you to say that. Thank you so much for the correction.
The Effects of Modern Equipment on Language Skills
Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in
communication has negative effects on young people's reading and writing skills.
To
what extent do you agree or disagree?
There is no shortage of opinion ons that using technological devices leaves negative effects on language skills or that it has positive benefits besides their disadvantages.
In my opinion, utilizing modern equipment can give rise to productive results.
I feel this way for several reasons.
First of all, these devices, as their names suggest, are a means to achieve some goals in the first place.
This leads to the conclusion that the overall assessment of them depends on how and for what aims they are used.
You see, the internet at the hands of evil people might result in catastrophes, or dignifyingwell-intentioned people can make the world a better place to live by making use of it.
My personal experience is a great example of this.
I have an enthusiastic desire to read.
My house is rather small and does not have much space to keep books.
Theis problem was solved easily by buying a laptop.
Now I have hundreds of books inside my laptop.
As a result, the range of my studies has increased significantly and my reading skills have improved tremendously.
The possibility of reading these numbers ofso many books became possible just by utilizing a modern-day device.
Yours is correct. THis is just another option.
Secondly, there are some programs that correct your written documents, say, by identifying misspelled words.
Although this may lead to the thought that these programs tempt people to do not attempt to improve their writing skills, on the contrary, it can help to achieve a higher skill level easier by instead showing their mistakes on the spot.
Moreover, people who have bad handwriting can gain benefit from writing programs.
Drawing from my own experience, my handwriting is barely legible despite having tried hard to improve it.
People had trouble reading my writing and were always complaining about my handwriting.
Considering that using electronic devices has become the most important way to communicate in individuals’ lives, my problem has almost rebeen completely solved by embracing new technological equipment.
the use of resolved sounds a bit awkward here.
Also, I don't think we would ever say technological equipment like this. I would just say technology.
It's certainly clear to see why I believe the growing use of new technologies can help people improve the quality of their writing.
In conclusion, computers and mobile phones can lend themselves to improving language skills.
This is because depending on how we use them they can be quite useful and they have options like correcting writing.
Oct. 12, 2020
Honestly, I would totally believe this is written by a fluent speaker. Nice job.
I will mention you use the word utilizing a lot. It's a valid word, but a more common alternative in english would be using.
Oct. 20, 2020
That's nice of you to say that. Thank you so much for the correction.
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