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b230tri

March 27, 2022

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Eating out

I had to cross a crosswalk twice to go to a cafe.
I spent morning there studying.

I wanted to have a Gimbap for lunch. But the diner that I wanted to go was closed. Two of the diner near the library was closed. I gave up my lunch. There was two hours left befor my girl friend come. We would have noodles for dinner. We would eat dinner early because I was hungry. We went to the diner that I had been expecting until then. But it was breaktime when we got there. So we went to the lake in town. We decided to walk until five.

It was pleasure. It was a bit windy but we were excited. Tiny buds clung on every tree branches. I ran when I reach an uphill. I like uphills. I can feel my heart thumping after sprint. I like that feeling. I can feel I'm alive.

We came back to the diner and ordered two noodles. The one fried and the other with broth. But It was a shame that foods are disapointing. We couldn't eat much of them. I've been looking forward but the foods fell short of my expectation.

To me, eating out is getting more disapointing. And I spend more time to cook. I think I'm becoming a good cook.

Corrections

I spent my morning there studying.

it sounds more native to say "my morning" in this context, or alternatively "the morning"

I wanted to have a Gimbap for lunch.

when we talk about dishes, we don't to specify a number or use "a", example; "I wanted to have pizza/ sushi/ fried chicken"
or you can put "some"

But the diner that I wanted to go to was closed.

Two of the diners near the library wasere closed.

I gave up my lunch.

when you say "gave up my lunch" it sounds like you had it in your hands then gave it up for something or someone, as in you used to have it but no longer do. In this context what you can say is "i gave up on having lunch"

There wasere two hours left before my girl friend come.

Tiny buds clung on every tree branches.

I can feel my heart thumping after sprints.

The one was fried and the other was with broth.

But It was a shame that foods are disapointing.

see explanation below for food

We couldn't eat much of them.

it's more coherent to just say

I've been looking forward to it but the foods fell short of my expectation.

food can't be made into plural, it already implies a quantity of some sort

To me, eating out is getting more disapointing.

truer words were never spoken

And I spend more time ton cooking.

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good job! you had some mistakes but the meaning was still clear and understandable. Keep practicing

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b230tri

March 28, 2022

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To me, eating out is getting more disapointing.

What this mean?

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b230tri

March 28, 2022

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Thank you so much :D you are a living angel.

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corawhite__rw

April 17, 2022

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What this mean?

first, sorry for the super late reply. second, this means I strongly agree that "eating out is getting more disappointing."

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b230tri

April 18, 2022

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first, sorry for the super late reply. second, this means I strongly agree that "eating out is getting more disappointing."

Oh, I see. Thank you :D

Eating out


I had to cross a crosswalk twice to go to a cafe.


I spent morning there studying.


I spent my morning there studying.

it sounds more native to say "my morning" in this context, or alternatively "the morning"

I wanted to have a Gimbap for lunch.


I wanted to have a Gimbap for lunch.

when we talk about dishes, we don't to specify a number or use "a", example; "I wanted to have pizza/ sushi/ fried chicken" or you can put "some"

But the diner that I wanted to go was closed.


But the diner that I wanted to go to was closed.

Two of the diner near the library was closed.


Two of the diners near the library wasere closed.

I gave up my lunch.


I gave up my lunch.

when you say "gave up my lunch" it sounds like you had it in your hands then gave it up for something or someone, as in you used to have it but no longer do. In this context what you can say is "i gave up on having lunch"

There was two hours left befor my girl friend come.


There wasere two hours left before my girl friend come.

We would have noodles for dinner.


We would eat dinner early because I was hungry.


We went to the diner that I had been expecting until then.


But it was breaktime when we got there.


So we went to the lake in town.


We decided to walk until five.


It was pleasure.


It was a bit windy but we were excited.


Tiny buds clung on every tree branches.


Tiny buds clung on every tree branches.

I ran when I reach an uphill.


I like uphills.


I can feel my heart thumping after sprint.


I can feel my heart thumping after sprints.

I like that feeling.


I can feel I'm alive.


We came back to the diner and ordered two noodles.


The one fried and the other with broth.


The one was fried and the other was with broth.

But It was a shame that foods are disapointing.


But It was a shame that foods are disapointing.

see explanation below for food

We couldn't eat much of them.


We couldn't eat much of them.

it's more coherent to just say

I've been looking forward but the foods fell short of my expectation.


I've been looking forward to it but the foods fell short of my expectation.

food can't be made into plural, it already implies a quantity of some sort

To me, eating out is getting more disapointing.


To me, eating out is getting more disapointing.

truer words were never spoken

And I spend more time to cook.


And I spend more time ton cooking.

I think I'm becoming a good cook.


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