March 31, 2022
Eating a cup noodle instead of a waffle
I wanted to eat a waffle. I visited the waffle store that I had been paying attention. It was near library.
"Do you want waffles?" the owner said, when I entered.
'Of course, why do you think I'm here?' I thought.
"Yes" I said.
"We ran out of ingredients." he said lethargically.
"Oh... Okay..." I came out the store.
I wandered around. I had no idea what I wanted to eat then. The air was chill. The wind was blowing. I ended up entering the convenience store and found a cup noddle I had enjoyed.
"Can I eat the cup noddle inside?" I asked.
"No, sorry. I am worrying about the Covid." She said.
"Okay." I said, poured the steaming water into the cup noodle and waited 3 minutes and got out. There was two dirty outdoor tables so I started to eat standing. You know what? If it's windy when you eat a cup noodle outside, it tastes great. So I really enjoyed it. It warmed not only my stomach but also deep in my heart. Oh, I think I exaggerated too much. Actually it was not bad for a temporary.
Eating a cup noodle instead of a waffle
I wanted to eat a waffle.
I visited the waffle store that I had been paying attentionnoticed previously.
"that I had been paying attention to." would be grammatically correct but "noticed previously" sounds much more natural.
It was near the library.
Don't forget your articles! :)
"Do you want waffles?"
the owner said, when I entered.
I don't think the comma is necessary
'"Of course, why do you think I'm here?'"
Double quotes required for speech.
I thought.
"Yes" I said.
"We rahave run out of ingredients."
Present perfect tense makes more sense to me.
he said, lethargically.
Here I would use a comma, but I think that's stylistic.
"Oh...
Okay..." I camewent out the store.
I wandered around.
I had no idea what I wanted to eat then.
"then" isn't necessary
The air was chilly.
Alternatives:
The air was crisp.
The air had a chill to it.
Chill is a noun or a verb. Chilly is the adjective.
The wind was blowing.
I ended up entering the convenience store and found a cup nododle I had enjoyliked.
"I had enjoyed" implies you had eaten a bit of one, left it, and then found it again.
But I think you mean you had enjoyed the same type of pot noodle in the past, therefore you like it, and you found one in the store.
"Can I eat the cup nododle inside?"
Noodle, not noddle.
I asked.
"No, sorry.
I am worryingied about the Covid."
Covid doesn't need a definite article.
"I am worried" feels more natural than "I am worrying".
She said.
"Okay."
I said, as I poured the steaming hot water into the cup noodle and. After waiteding 3 minutes and, I got out.
There wasere two dirty outdoor tables, so I started to eat standing.
You know what?
If it's windy when you eat a cup noodle outside, it tastes great.
So I really enjoyed it.
It warmed not only my stomach but also deep in my heart.
Oh, I think I exaggerated too much.
Actually it was not bad for a temporaryquick snack.
Temporary is an adjective, and you don't really describe food as temporary. All food is temporary :P
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Really impressive and I very much enjoyed the story.
April 1, 2022
Thank you so much :D
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I visited the waffle store that I had been paying attention. I visited the waffle store that I had "that I had been paying attention to." would be grammatically correct but "noticed previously" sounds much more natural. |
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It was near library. It was near the library. Don't forget your articles! :) |
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the owner said, when I entered. the owner said I don't think the comma is necessary |
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'Of course, why do you think I'm here?'
Double quotes required for speech. |
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"We ran out of ingredients." "We Present perfect tense makes more sense to me. |
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he said lethargically. he said, lethargically. Here I would use a comma, but I think that's stylistic. |
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Okay..." I came out the store. Okay..." I |
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I had no idea what I wanted to eat then. I had no idea what I wanted to eat "then" isn't necessary |
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The air was chill. The air was chilly. Alternatives: The air was crisp. The air had a chill to it. Chill is a noun or a verb. Chilly is the adjective. |
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The wind was blowing. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I ended up entering the convenience store and found a cup noddle I had enjoyed. I ended up entering the convenience store and found a cup no "I had enjoyed" implies you had eaten a bit of one, left it, and then found it again. But I think you mean you had enjoyed the same type of pot noodle in the past, therefore you like it, and you found one in the store. |
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I am worrying about the Covid." I am worr Covid doesn't need a definite article. "I am worried" feels more natural than "I am worrying". |
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I said, poured the steaming water into the cup noodle and waited 3 minutes and got out. I said |
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There was two dirty outdoor tables so I started to eat standing. There w |
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You know what? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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If it's windy when you eat a cup noodle outside, it tastes great. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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So I really enjoyed it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It warmed not only my stomach but also deep in my heart. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Oh, I think I exaggerated too much. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Actually it was not bad for a temporary. Actually it was not bad for a Temporary is an adjective, and you don't really describe food as temporary. All food is temporary :P |
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