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Scarlett_Father

June 29, 2023

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Earthworm

As the scorching weather approaches, more and more earthworms are being seen dead lying on the concrete yard near the garden earth. Some ants are enjoying the feast. These earthworms are unable to find their way back to their living earth, the right direction is more important than the hard work.

Earthworms are recognized as beneficial creatures for humans, because they fertilize and give breath to the soil which benefits our plants. Additionally, ants and earthworms have some interactive relationships; they are competition, parasitism and mutualism. There is another hidden living world underground, where stories unfold everywhere at very any moment.

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As the scorching weather approaches, more and more earthworms are being seen dead lying on the concrete yard near the garden earth.

These earthworms are unable to find their way back to their living earthsoil, the right direction is more important than the hard workfutile writhing in the sun.

I don't really know what you meant by "hard work", so I added my own interpretation.

Earthworms are recognized as beneficial creatures for humans, because they fertilize and give breath to the soil which benefits our plants.

I like "give breath", it's very poetic. Could also use "aerate" if you want to be more scientific.

Additionally, ants and earthworms have some interactive relationships; they are: competition, parasitism and mutualism.

Use a colon instead of a semicolon to start a list like this.

There is another hidden living world underground, where stories unfold everywhere at very anin every moment.

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Scarlett_Father

June 30, 2023

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Thank you for your corrections! :-)

As the scorching weather approaches, more and more earthworms are being seen dead lying dead on the concrete yard near the garden eadirth.

'Lie dead' is a common phrase in English.

These earthworms are unable to find their way back to their living earth, the right direction is more important than the hard workhomes in the earth. Their effort does not pay off if they don't move the in right direction.

Earthworms are recognized as creatures beneficial creatures forto humans, because they fertilize and give breath to the soil which benefits our plants.

'Beneficial to' is a common phrase.
I haven't seen the expression 'give breath to the soil' before but I assume you are using it metaphorically.

There is another hidden living world underground, where stories unfold everywhere at very any moment.

'Very moment' is a common phrase but 'very any moment' is not.

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Scarlett_Father

June 30, 2023

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I want to express my gratitude at the very moment when I see your corrections. :-)

Earthworm


As the scorching weather approaches, more and more earthworms are being seen dead lying on the concrete yard near the garden earth.


As the scorching weather approaches, more and more earthworms are being seen dead lying dead on the concrete yard near the garden eadirth.

'Lie dead' is a common phrase in English.

As the scorching weather approaches, more and more earthworms are being seen dead lying on the concrete yard near the garden earth.

Some ants are enjoying the feast.


These earthworms are unable to find their way back to their living earth, the right direction is more important than the hard work.


These earthworms are unable to find their way back to their living earth, the right direction is more important than the hard workhomes in the earth. Their effort does not pay off if they don't move the in right direction.

These earthworms are unable to find their way back to their living earthsoil, the right direction is more important than the hard workfutile writhing in the sun.

I don't really know what you meant by "hard work", so I added my own interpretation.

Earthworms are recognized as beneficial creatures for humans, because they fertilize and give breath to the soil which benefits our plants.


Earthworms are recognized as creatures beneficial creatures forto humans, because they fertilize and give breath to the soil which benefits our plants.

'Beneficial to' is a common phrase. I haven't seen the expression 'give breath to the soil' before but I assume you are using it metaphorically.

Earthworms are recognized as beneficial creatures for humans, because they fertilize and give breath to the soil which benefits our plants.

I like "give breath", it's very poetic. Could also use "aerate" if you want to be more scientific.

Additionally, ants and earthworms have some interactive relationships; they are competition, parasitism and mutualism.


Additionally, ants and earthworms have some interactive relationships; they are: competition, parasitism and mutualism.

Use a colon instead of a semicolon to start a list like this.

There is another hidden living world underground, where stories unfold everywhere at very any moment.


There is another hidden living world underground, where stories unfold everywhere at very any moment.

'Very moment' is a common phrase but 'very any moment' is not.

There is another hidden living world underground, where stories unfold everywhere at very anin every moment.

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