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my oldest memories 3/3

3. I never wished to hurt you, Mickey

This is not really my oldest memory, but I like it. I was maybe six or seven years old and I was used to enjoy the regular carousel of my town once a week.

But one day, my parents brought me to a different one, a bigger and faster one. The children here were not babies like me. They looked definitively older and they came here as groups. They were all messing around by trying to reach a Mickey Mouse puppet that an adult was waving at the tip of a fishing rod ahead of us.

I playfully imitated them and suddenly reached the tail of the puppet. To my big confusion, I realised that the Mickey's tail now stood into my hands, detached from the rest of its body. I started to panic and cry. At this moment, I was sure that I would (/will?) be grounded because I apparently broke Mickey Mouse.

After the carousel stopped, my parents explained to me that all of this was on purpose, that the tail was supposed undo that way, and that I actually won the game. They were even sure that the "puppetwaver" made it easier for me to reach it, because I was the tiniest little girl there and I deserved a chance to win a free round of carousel. But I was too shook to realise how lucky I was: I rejected the opportunity and the only thing I won is this remarkable memory.

P.S. Apparently, this funny game is nowadays is fortunately forbidden. First of all, for security reasons : Children could hurt themselves trying to catch the Mickey! Also, I am sure that the "funfair" (stalholder?) owner of the Carrousel did not pay any royalties to WB and would be fined for this terrible crime. So he cannot traumatise more little children, and I am just born a bit too early to be spared this terrible experience.

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This is not really my oldest memory, but I like it.

But one day, my parents brought me to a different one, a bigger and faster one.

The children here were not babies like me.

They were all messing around by trying to reach a Mickey Mouse puppet that an adult was waving at the tip of a fishing rod ahead of us.

I playfully imitated them and suddenly reached the tail of the puppet.

I started to panic and cry.

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Uhu

Feb. 15, 2023

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Uhu

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This is not really my oldest memory, but I like it.

But one day, my parents brought me to a different one, a bigger and faster one.

The children here were not babies like me.

They were all messing around by trying to reach a Mickey Mouse puppet that an adult was waving at the tip of a fishing rod ahead of us.

I playfully imitated them and suddenly reached the tail of the puppet.

I started to panic and cry.

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Uhu

Feb. 15, 2023

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my oldest memories 3/3


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We capitalize the first letters of important words in titles.

3. I never wished to hurt you, Mickey


3. I never wished to hurt you, Mickey. 3. I never wished to hurt you, Mickey.

This is not really my oldest memory, but I like it.


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I was maybe six or seven years old and I was used to enjoy the regular carousel of my town once a week.


I was maybe six or seven years old and I was used to enjoy the regular carousel ofin my town once a week. I was maybe six or seven years old and I used to enjoy the regular carousel in my town once a week.

I was maybe six or seven years old and I was used to enjoy the regular carousel of/in my town once a week. I was maybe six or seven years old and I used to enjoy the regular carousel of/in my town once a week.

"I'm used to" in the present but "I used to" in the past

I was maybe six or seven years old and I was used to enjoying the regular carousel ofin my town once a week. I was maybe six or seven years old and was used to enjoying the regular carousel in my town once a week.

But one day, my parents brought me to a different one, a bigger and faster one.


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But one day, my parents brought me to a different one, a bigger and faster one. But one day, my parents brought me to a different one, a bigger and faster one.

It is grammatical correct, but you can do better for the "flow": "[...] me to a bigger and faster one"

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The children here were not babies like me.


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They looked definitively older and they came here as groups.


They looked definitively older and they came here asin groups. They looked definitively older and they came here in groups.

They looked definitively older and they came here asin groups. They looked definitively older and they came here in groups.

"come as" I think is mainly used for "identity" or something like that.

They looked definitively looked older and they came here asin groups. They definitively looked older and they came here in groups.

They were all messing around by trying to reach a Mickey Mouse puppet that an adult was waving at the tip of a fishing rod ahead of us.


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They were all messing around by trying to reach a Mickey Mouse puppet that an adult was waving at the tip of a fishing rod ahead of us. They were all messing around by trying to reach a Mickey Mouse puppet that an adult was waving at the tip of a fishing rod ahead of us.

Maybe you should use "above our heads" instead of "ahead of us"; but maybe I base my idea on hazy memories.

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I playfully imitated them and suddenly reached the tail of the puppet.


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To my big confusion, I realised that the Mickey's tail now stood into my hands, detached from the rest of its body.


To my bigI was very confusion, Ied to realised that the Mickey's tail now stood intowas now in my hands, detached from the rest of hits body. I was very confused to realise that the Mickey's tail was now in my hands, detached from the rest of his body.

"Big confusion" is not natural in English.

To my big confusion/surprise, I realised that the Mickey's tail now stood intowas now in my hands, detached from the rest of hits body. To my big confusion/surprise, I realised that Mickey's tail was now in my hands, detached from the rest of his body.

"into" is used for non-static actions

To my big confusion, I realiszed that the Mickey's tail now stoodwas now into my hands, detached from the rest of its body. To my big confusion, I realized that Mickey's tail was now in my hands, detached from the rest of its body.

We spell it "realize" in the US.

I started to panic and cry.


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At this moment, I was sure that I would (/will?) be grounded because I apparently broke Mickey Mouse.


At thisat moment, I was sure that I would (/will?) be grounded because I apparently broke Mickey Mouse. At that moment, I was sure that I would be grounded because I apparently broke Mickey Mouse.

"Would" is correct.

At thisat moment, I was sure that I would (/will?) be grounded because I apparently broke Mickey Mouse. At that moment, I was sure that I would be grounded because I apparently broke Mickey Mouse.

"would" is correct because it indicated a future in the past. I suggest "kill" instead of "break" to indicate that you really thought you killed him, but that's up to you.

At this moment, I was sure that I would (/will?) be grounded because I apparently broke Mickey Mouse. At this moment, I was sure that I would be grounded because I apparently broke Mickey Mouse.

It's "would" because you're hypothesizing which makes the sentence subjunctive tense.

After the carousel stopped, my parents explained to me that all of this was on purpose, that the tail was supposed undo that way, and that I actually won the game.


After the carousel stopped, my parents explained to me that all of this was on purpose, that the tail was supposed undoto detach that way, and that I actually won the game. After the carousel stopped, my parents explained to me that all of this was on purpose, that the tail was supposed to detach that way, and that I actually won the game.

After the carousel stopped, my parents explained to me that all of this was on purpose, that the tail was supposed undoto come off that way, and that I actually won the game. After the carousel stopped, my parents explained to me that all of this was on purpose, that the tail was supposed to come off that way, and that I actually won the game.

"undo" is used when you've performed an action and you "undo" it, that means you cancel it, you do something so that it's like you've never did the first action.

After the carousel stopped, my parents explained to me that all of this was on purpose, that the tail was supposed to come undone that way, and that I actually won the game. After the carousel stopped, my parents explained to me that all of this was on purpose, that the tail was supposed to come undone that way, and that I actually won the game.

They were even sure that the "puppetwaver" made it easier for me to reach it, because I was the tiniest little girl there and I deserved a chance to win a free round of carousel.


They were even sure that the "puppetwaver" made it easier for me to reach it, because I was the tiniest little girl there and I deserved a chance to win a free round ofn the carousel. They were even sure that the "puppetwaver" made it easier for me to reach it, because I was the tiniest little girl there and I deserved a chance to win a free round on the carousel.

They were even sure that the "puppetwaver" made it easier for me to reach it, because I was the tiniest little girl there andso I deserved a chance to win a free round of carousel ride. They were even sure that the "puppetwaver" made it easier for me to reach it, because I was the tiniest little girl there so I deserved a chance to win a free carousel ride.

But I was too shook to realise how lucky I was: I rejected the opportunity and the only thing I won is this remarkable memory.


But I was too shookcked to realise how lucky I was: I rejected the opportunity and the only thing I won is this remarkable memory. But I was too shocked to realise how lucky I was: I rejected the opportunity and the only thing I won is this remarkable memory.

But I was too shookcked to realise how lucky I was: I rejected the opportunity and the only thing I won is this remarkable memory. But I was too shocked to realise how lucky I was: I rejected the opportunity and the only thing I won is this remarkable memory.

But I was too shookaken, however, to realisze how lucky I was: I rejected the opportunity andso the only thing I won is this remarkable memory. I was too shaken, however, to realize how lucky I was: I rejected the opportunity so the only thing I won is this remarkable memory.

Very cute.

P.S. Apparently, this funny game is nowadays is fortunately forbidden.


P.S. Apparently, this funny game is forbidden nowadays is, fortunately forbidden. P.S. Apparently, this funny game is forbidden nowadays, fortunately.

P.S. Apparently, this funny game is nowadays is fortunately forbidden. P.S. Apparently, this funny game is nowadays fortunately forbidden.

P.S. Apparently, this funny game is nowadays is fortunately forbidden nowadays. P.S. Apparently, this funny game is fortunately forbidden nowadays.

First of all, for security reasons : Children could hurt themselves trying to catch the Mickey!


First of all, for security reasons : Children could hurt themselves trying to catch the Mickey! First of all, for security reasons : Children could hurt themselves trying to catch Mickey!

First of all, for security reasons : Cchildren could hurt themselves trying to catch the Mickey! First of all, for security reasons : children could hurt themselves trying to catch Mickey!

First of all, it's for security reasons : Children could hurt themselves trying to catch the Mickey! First of all, it's for security reasons: Children could hurt themselves trying to catch Mickey!

Also, I am sure that the "funfair" (stalholder?) owner of the Carrousel did not pay any royalties to WB and would be fined for this terrible crime.


Also, I am sure that the "funfair" (stalholder?) owner of the Ccarrousel did not pay any royalties to WB and would be fined for this terrible crime. Also, I am sure that the owner of the carrousel did not pay any royalties to WB and would be fined for this terrible crime.

Also, I am sure that the "funfair" (stalholder?) owner of the Ccarrousel did not pay any royalties to WB and he would be fined for this terrible crime. Also, I am sure that the owner of the carrousel did not pay any royalties to WB and he would be fined for this terrible crime.

Also, I am sure that the "funfair" (stalholder?) owner of the Carrouselcarousel owner did not pay any royalties to WB and would be fined for this terrible crime. Also, I am sure that the carousel owner did not pay any royalties to WB and would be fined for this terrible crime.

So he cannot traumatise more little children, and I am just born a bit too early to be spared this terrible experience.


So he cannot traumatise more little children, and I amymore, but I was just born a bit too early to be spared this terrible experience. So he cannot traumatise little children anymore, but I was just born a bit too early to be spared this terrible experience.

So he cannot traumatise more little children no more, and I am just born a bit too early to be spared this terrible experience. So he cannot traumatise little children no more, and I am just born a bit too early to be spared this terrible experience.

So now he cannot traumatisze any more little children, and I amwas just born a bit too early to be spared this terrible experience. So now he cannot traumatize any more little children and I was just born a bit too early to be spared this terrible experience.

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