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It's 8pm, and the moon emerge from the clouds, t. The lights from apartments surround me. It's 8pm, and the moon emerge from the clouds. The lights from apartments surround me.

It's 8pm, t. The moon emerges from the clouds, the lights from apartments surround me. It's 8pm. The moon emerges from the clouds, the lights from apartments surround me.

There's a comma splice (technically ungrammatical) I didn't correct because it sounds natural, especially in creative literature

It's 8pm, t. The moon emerges from the clouds, t. The lights from other apartments surround me. It's 8pm. The moon emerges from the clouds. The lights from other apartments surround me.

-'the moon' is singular, so the verb needs an 's' -'The moon emerges' and 'the lights surround' are new subjects and verbs so they need a new sentence. -Something is need to clarify what the apartments are. You can say 'the apartments' but 'other apartments' or 'nearby apartments' or 'apartments around me' is better.

Sitting alone, and jotting down my thought,s seems boring but so facinatit's so engaging tofor me. Sitting alone and jotting down my thoughts seems boring but it's so engaging for me.

Sitting alone, jotting down my thought,s. It seems boring buand yet so fascinating to me. Sitting alone, jotting down my thoughts. It seems boring and yet so fascinating to me.

"but" is okay, "and yet" sounds better

Sitting alone, jotting down my thought, seems boring but also so fascinating to me. Sitting alone, jotting down my thought, seems boring but also so fascinating to me.

'but so fascinating' is ok, but clarifying the relationship between 'boring' and 'fascinating' makes it clearer.

I'm not feeling lonely at all,; it's the time that I always enjoy the most. I'm not feeling lonely at all; it's the time that I always enjoy the most.

I'm no don't feeling lonely at all, it'. This is the time that I always enjoy the most. I don't feel lonely at all. This is the time that I always enjoy the most.

I'm not feeling lonely at all, it's the time that. I always enjoy this time the most. I'm not feeling lonely at all. I always enjoy this time the most.

-'I enjoy' is a new subject and verb so it needs a new sentence. -'this' is often used to refer to something you introduced in a previous sentence. It also is clearer to make 'I' the main subject of the sentence, with 'this time' as a description of what you enjoy.

That's all I want, no. I don't have a car, nor a lot of money. That's all I want. I don't have a car, nor a lot of money.

That's all I want, n - not to have a car, or a lot of money. That's all I want - not to have a car, or a lot of money.

or "nor a lot of money" but the above sounds more natural to me I think the other correctors are misunderstanding what you wanted to say, but I'm not sure why... maybe you could add something like "Just these quiet moments." after it.

That's aAll I want, n is to have ano car, and a lot of money. All I want is to have no car and a lot of money.

-Because you're introducing a new idea (no car and a lot of money), it does not make sense to say 'that' because 'that' would refer to something you've already told us. So you can just say 'All I want.' -A verb is needed, 'is' here -'no' is often used before a noun -> 'There's no fruit. I have no cat.' You can also say 'to not have a car.'

Life is still a strugglinge, but when I sitting down to do what I love, I have nothing but sereneity, the fulfill I know thatment that this is enough (for me). Life is still a struggle, but when I sit down to do what I love, I have nothing but serenity, the fulfillment that this is enough (for me).

Life is still a strugglinge, but when I sitting down to do what I love, I havefeel nothing but sereneity, the fulfillment of it, and I know that is enough. Life is still a struggle, but when I sit down to do what I love, I feel nothing but serenity, the fulfillment of it, and I know that is enough.

Life is stilla strugglinge, but when I sitting down to do what I love, I have nothing but serene, the fulfillam serene. I know that is enough. Life is a struggle, but when I sit down to do what I love, I am serene. I know that is enough.

'is a struggle' is a informal, common phrase. You can also say "I am still struggling in life." -You are describing the action of sitting down, instead of sitting down for a period of time, so the simple past is better. -The last part of the sentence is pretty complicated. You can also say "I feel nothing but serene" and "it is fulfilling" or "I am fulfilled."