May 12, 2020
Draw with my sister
Earlier today, I taught to my younger sister how to drew. First, I took a paper and a pencil. Second, I drew a big circle at the middle of the paper then I asked her, “let draw again what I drew”. In 30s later, she done. I was surprise, I did think she can’t even do it, but just 30s she draw a beautiful circle. Her circle was more beautiful than mine. I was happy about that. She just three years old and she can draw a circle in 30s. She must be a artist.
Đầu ngày hôm nay, tôi đã dạy cho em gái tôi cách vẽ. Đầu tiên, tôi lấy một tờ giấy và một cây bút chì. Thứ hai, tôi vẽ một vòng tròn lớn ở giữa tờ giấy sau đó yêu cầu em ấy, "hãy vẽ lại những gì tôi đã vẽ". Trong 30 giây sau, cô ấy đã làm xong. Tôi đã rất ngạc nhiên, tôi đã nghĩ là em ấy không thể nào vẽ được, nhưng chỉ cần 30 giây cô ấy đã vẽ được một vòng tròn rất đẹp. Vòng tròn của em ấy còn đẹp hơn của tôi. Tôi rất vui về điều đó. Em ấy chỉ mới ba tuổi và em ấy có thể vẽ một vòng tròn trong 30s. Em ấy có thể trở thành một họa sĩ.
SecondThen, I drew a big circle at the middle of the paper thenand I asked her, “let us draw again what I drew”.
You can use "then" if you use first initially. For eg first, then, thereafter
I was surprised, I didn't think she can’t even do it, but justwithin 30s, she draw a beautiful circle.
She is just three years old and she can draw a circle in 30 seconds.
May 13, 2020
thanks for your help
Second, I drew a big circle at the middle of the paper, then I asked her, “let draw again what I drew”."
You should have a comma before the "then", and the period should be inside of the quotations.
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I agreed with the rest of the corrections from the other corrector! You did a great job :)
First, I took a paper and a pencil.
Her circle was more beautiful than mine.
I was happy about that.
She mustwill be a artist.
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Draw with my sister |
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Earlier today, I taught to my younger sister how to drew. |
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First, I took a paper and a pencil. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Second, I drew a big circle at the middle of the paper then I asked her, “let draw again what I drew”. Second, I drew a big circle at the middle of the paper, then I asked her, “let draw again what I drew You should have a comma before the "then", and the period should be inside of the quotations.
You can use "then" if you use first initially. For eg first, then, thereafter |
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In 30s later, she done. |
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I was surprise, I did think she can’t even do it, but just 30s she draw a beautiful circle. I was surprised, I didn't think she can |
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Her circle was more beautiful than mine. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I was happy about that. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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She just three years old and she can draw a circle in 30s. She is just three years old and she can draw a circle in 30 seconds. |
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She must be a artist. She |
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