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Plural agreement

Initially, in spite of my resentment to him, when I reflected on this problem that who led me to losewhich led to me losing sleep at night, I found that the blame is not entirely contribute to him.

"Problem" is not a person, so you wouldn't use "who". You could technically also just use "that" so it would be "when I reflected on this problem that led to me losing sleep at night...".
I don't know if this is actually a grammatical error or just a personal preference, but I would say that "to me losing sleep" sounds more natural than "me to lose sleep".

DPeople from different area's people have different habits, and it's unimpractical to completely change it.

I think that saying "People from different areas" makes your meaning a bit clearer.
I added the "and" to connect the clauses in the sentence a little better.
I tend to hear and gravitate towards "impractical" more often than "unpractical".

I realized the Ddormitories isare the source of problem.

Plural agreement (is for singular, are for plural). "Dormitories" is not a proper noun, or a word that should be capitalised. As a note there, I used "is" instead of "are" because I was referring to the word "dormitories", which is indicated by the quotation marks, and not the actual concept of dormitories themselves.

As far as I know, Almost all of Dormitories existed the contradictionthis contradiction exists in almost all dormitories.

"Almost" is another word that doesn't need to be capitalised.
The original choice of wording and word order was a little confusing, so I changed the word order a little while trying to keep the words more or less the same.

iIt's inevitable!

Someone suffered from depression, someone died fromwas killed by their roommate. “Thanking my roommate for not killing me” is a popular Chinese phrase.

It would sound better to say "their" in front of "roommate". As a very general rule, I think that you would say "died from" with causes of death not involving a person, or for unknown causes. For example, "someone died from food poisoning", "someone died from an illness" or "someone died from unknown causes". However, with some causes of death such as murder at the hands of another person, you would say how they were killed in the verb. For example "someone was murdered/killed", "someone was poisoned to death", "someone was strangled to death" or "someone drowned".

As a completely unrelated side note, I was not expecting to go on here today and start thinking of ways people can die. Life is funny sometimes.

Of course, it's overstated because most of students all quietly tolerate quietly thisthese circumstances just like me.

You would say "most of the students" if you wanted to use "of", but this would be for more of a specific group of students, opposed to students in general like you're talking about here.
"all" becomes a little redundant since you already said "most".
"quietly tolerate" sounds a little more natural.

Plural agreement:
"this" for a singular word (e.g. circumstance)
"these" for a plural word (e.g. circumstances)

Since there are multiple circumstances involved in this, I thought that "these circumstances" would be a better fit.

They often comfort themselves by thinking about their graduation. How tocan we make a good dormitory?

I wasn't entirely sure what the first sentence meant, but if you mean that they motivated themselves to continue living in these conditions by thinking about their graduation, then it would be better to add "thinking about" like I did above.

"How to make a good dormitory?" is technically right, but I think it sounds better in casual and/or spoken situations. "How can we make a good dormitory?" might be a good alternative.

itWe needs us to consciously sacrificed our freedom to the dormitory collective constantly though we don't know where is the dormitory collective is.

"We need" is a little more concise and natural.
"our" is a bit more optional, but I think it sounds better with it.
"Where is..." would be used more often at the start of a sentence, whereas "where... is" would be used in statements like this.

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Initially, in spite of my initial resentment towards him, when I reflected on this problem that who led me tomade me lose sleep at night, I found the blame is not entirely contribute to hims.

DPeople from different area's people have different habits,; it's unimpractical to completely change ithat.

apparently 'unpractical' is also a word, but I believe 'impractical' is more standard
If you write 'change that', 'that' refers to the fact before the semicolon. If you write 'change them', 'them' can refer to the habits or the people.

I realized the Ddormitories isare the source of problem.

As far as I know, Aalmost all of Ddormitories existed the contradiction.

I don't know what this means.

iIt's inevitable!

Someone suffered from depression, someone died fromwas killed by their roommate. “Thanking my roommate for not killing me” is a popular Chinese phrase.

Of course, it's overstated because most of students all tolerate quietly thisthese circumstances quietly just like me.

They often comfort themselves by their graduation. How to make a good dormitory?

I don't know what the first sentence means.

it needs us toWe must consciously sacrificed our freedom to the dormitory collective constantly though we don't know where is the dormitory collective is.

Initially, in spite of my resentment towards him, when I reflected on this problem thatof who led me to lose sleep at night, I found the blame isdid not entirely contribute tofall on him.

Use 'towards' or 'of' instead of 'to' when talking about your emotions or feelings towards someone or something.
Eg. (My anger towards him / My love towards him / My indifference of him)

Blame is not an active thing so it in itself cannot 'contribute' to someone - blame falls on someone/something.
Eg. (The blame falls on the dog)

DPeople from different area's people have different habits, it's unpracticalineffective to completely change ithem.

By addressing the people, from different areas and with their different habits in relation to their areas - it makes the sentence far easier to read and understand.

I don't think 'unpractical' is a fitting word but I don't know what the story is getting at but 'ineffective' is a better fit.

I realized the Ddormitories isare the source of the problem.

No need to capitalise the 'D' in the middle of a sentence.

'Dormitories' is plural so use 'are' instead of 'is'.

As far as I know, Aalmost all of Ddormitories existeddisplay the is contradiction.

No need to capitalise the 'A' and the 'D' as they are in the middle of the sentence.

Im guessing the 'contradiction' is between the purpose of dormitories to sleep and not being able to sleep. They show or display the contradiction.
To say 'exist' would suggest it is the only purpose of their existence, you could say, 'almost all dormitories existed to display this contradiction' to emphasis the contradiction but it is more complicated.

iIt's inevitable!

Someone suffered from depression, someone died fromwas killed by their roommate. “Thanking my roommate for not killing me” is a popular Chinese phrase.

The person did 'die' but they died because of their roommate meaning that their roommate killed them.

Of course, it's overstated because most of students all quietly tolerate quietly thisthese circumstances just like me.

You can say 'most of the students ' but saying ' most students ' is easier.

'circumstances' is plural so use 'these' instead of 'this'.

They often comfort themselves by the thought of their graduation. How to make a good dormitory?

I don't know if you meant they comfort themselves at the event of their graduation or the thought of it but the thought of their graduation as a motive makes more sense.

iIt needs us to consciously sacrificed our freedom to the dormitory collectivensensus constantly, though we don't know where is the dormitory collective.nsensus is

'sacrificed' needs to be in present tense, so, 'sacrifice'.

'collective' refers to a collection of physical , non-abstract things like 'a collective of people', while 'consensus' refers to a collection of abstract nouns such as feelings or emotions. Even though it's more complicated, it's fits better into your point.

Later, I learned that the collectivensensus actually existed in our hearts.

Putting 'actually' emphasises the point.

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DPeople sleeping in different area's peoples have different habits, and it's completely unpractical to completelyexpect them to change ithem.

I realized the Ddormitories isthemselves were the source of problem.

As far as I know, Aalmost all of Ddormitories existed the contradictionhave some sort of problem.

Someone suffered from depression, someone died from roommate.and some were even killed by their roommates. In fact, “Thanking my roommate for not killing me” is a popular Chinese phrase.

Of course, it's overstated because most of students all tolerate quietly thistheir circumstances quietly, just like me.

They often comfort themselves by theirinking of graduation.How to The question is, how can we make a good dormitory?

itDormitories needs us to consciously sacrificed personal freedom to the dormitory collective constantly, even though we don't quite know where is the dormitory collectiveor what it is.