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iskander

Oct. 27, 2020

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Doomers' stuff.

Things fall apart and then they return, and this cycle keeps repeating itself till the universe vanishes to an end, you are part of it now and after you die. There, where there is no longer a friend or a spouse, is the place when you achieve oneness with heavens and Earth, but it is sorrowful to die while knowing the universe will end sometime, and when it does, it will no longer come again, and we won't enjoy our chemistry with heavens and Earth anymore. Is the solution living your life at its fullest? or to feel remorse and sorry of how this wonderful life will eventually cease to exist?
It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that is humbling and I appreciate it since it reminds me of the winds when they blew Maple's leaves in Autumn to the ground, that is humbling and sad.

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DGloomers'y stuff.

Things fall apart and then they return, and t. This cycle keeps repeatings itself untill the universe vanishes to an end, you are part of it now and after you die.

There, where there is no longer a friend or a spouse, is the place when you achieve oneness with heavens and Earth, but it is sorrowful to die while knowing the universe will end sometime, and when it does, it will no longer come again, and we won't enjoy our chemistry with heavens and Earth anymore.

I assume “there” means some intangible place in the afterlife.. but this sentence still confuses me a little.

Is the solution living your life ato its fullest?,

or to feel remorseful and sorry ofor how this wonderful life will eventually cease to exist?

It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that is humbling and I appreciate it since it reminds me of the winds when they blew Mmaple's leaves in Autumn to the ground in autumn, that is humbling and sad.

or “which is both humbling and sad”

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Poetically written, my corrections are mainly suggestions to make it more natural. Good work!

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iskander

Oct. 28, 2020

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Thank you!

Doomers' stuff.

This is technically grammatically correct though I'm not sure it's what you want it to mean.

Doomers' stuff = Doomers (Name) and his stuff or Doomers (plural) and their stuff.

Things fall apart and then they return, and this cycle keeps repeating itself till the universe vanishes to and end, ys. You are part of it now and after you die.

"You are" is commonly written as "You're".

There, where there is no longer a friend nor a spouse, is the place whenre you achieve oneness with the heavens and the Earth, but it is sorrowful to die while knowing the universe will end sometime, and when it does, it will no longeron't come againback, and we won't be able to enjoy our chemistry with the heavens and the Earth anymore.

"It is" is commonly written as "It's".

Is the solution living your life ato its fullest?

oOr to feel rumours and sorry of howsorrow that this wonderful life will eventually cease to exist?

I didn't really understand the beginning, but I tried to correct is as best as I could.

It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that i. It's humbling and I appreciate that, since it reminds me of the winds when they blew Mthe maple's leaves on Autumnautumn leaves to the ground,. That is both humbling and sad.

"It is" is commonly written as "It's".

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Great Job! Just a few corrections!

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iskander

Oct. 27, 2020

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Doomers' stuff.

I meant the latter.

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iskander

Oct. 27, 2020

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Thank you Oceandrive76 for your remarks!

Doomers' stuff.


Doomers' stuff.

This is technically grammatically correct though I'm not sure it's what you want it to mean. Doomers' stuff = Doomers (Name) and his stuff or Doomers (plural) and their stuff.

DGloomers'y stuff.

Things fall apart and then they return, and this cycle keeps repeating itself till the universe vanishes to an end, you are part of it now and after you die.


Things fall apart and then they return, and this cycle keeps repeating itself till the universe vanishes to and end, ys. You are part of it now and after you die.

"You are" is commonly written as "You're".

Things fall apart and then they return, and t. This cycle keeps repeatings itself untill the universe vanishes to an end, you are part of it now and after you die.

There, where there is no longer a friend or a spouse, is the place when you achieve oneness with heavens and Earth, but it is sorrowful to die while knowing the universe will end sometime, and when it does, it will no longer come again, and we won't enjoy our chemistry with heavens and Earth anymore.


There, where there is no longer a friend nor a spouse, is the place whenre you achieve oneness with the heavens and the Earth, but it is sorrowful to die while knowing the universe will end sometime, and when it does, it will no longeron't come againback, and we won't be able to enjoy our chemistry with the heavens and the Earth anymore.

"It is" is commonly written as "It's".

There, where there is no longer a friend or a spouse, is the place when you achieve oneness with heavens and Earth, but it is sorrowful to die while knowing the universe will end sometime, and when it does, it will no longer come again, and we won't enjoy our chemistry with heavens and Earth anymore.

I assume “there” means some intangible place in the afterlife.. but this sentence still confuses me a little.

Is the solution living your life at its fullest?


Is the solution living your life ato its fullest?

Is the solution living your life ato its fullest?,

or to feel rumours and sorry of how this wonderful life will eventually cease to exist?


oOr to feel rumours and sorry of howsorrow that this wonderful life will eventually cease to exist?

I didn't really understand the beginning, but I tried to correct is as best as I could.

It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that is humbling and I appreciate that since it reminds me of winds when they blew Maple's leaves on Autumn to the ground, That is humbling and sad.


It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that i. It's humbling and I appreciate that, since it reminds me of the winds when they blew Mthe maple's leaves on Autumnautumn leaves to the ground,. That is both humbling and sad.

"It is" is commonly written as "It's".

It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that is humbling and I appreciate that since it reminds me of winds when they blew Maple's leaves in Autumn to the ground, That is humbling and sad.


It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that is humbling and I appreciate that since it reminds me of winds when they blew Maple's leaves in Autumn to the ground, that is humbling and sad.


or to feel remorse and sorry of how this wonderful life will eventually cease to exist?


or to feel remorseful and sorry ofor how this wonderful life will eventually cease to exist?

It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that is humbling and I appreciate it since it reminds me of winds when they blew Maple's leaves in Autumn to the ground, that is humbling and sad.


It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that is humbling and I appreciate it since it reminds me of the winds when they blew Maple's leaves in Autumn to the ground, that is humbling and sad.


It is said that there is a beauty behind death, for things come to exist to serve a purpose and then they go, that is humbling and I appreciate it since it reminds me of the winds when they blew Mmaple's leaves in Autumn to the ground in autumn, that is humbling and sad.

or “which is both humbling and sad”

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