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alexwong2164

Oct. 5, 2020

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Don’t try to be your own doctor!



Today I go to see a doctor.

I told him that my back is so itching for some time.

To stop that I try to put some cream which I buy from local drugstore.

When he heard my answer, he become a kind of angry.

And said to me “why everyone try to be their own doctor?”

If you got any health problem, you should come to see me immediately.

If that happen 10 years ago.

I will said to him “I am the customer, who pay you the money, you better watch!”

But now I just said “I am sorry, no next time.”

Corrections

Today I'm going to see a doctor.

I told him that my back is sohas been itching a lot for some time.

To stop thatit, I tryied to put on some cream which I buythat I bought from a local drugstore.

When he heard my answer, he become a kind ofgot a little angry.

AndHe said to me,wWhy does everyone try to be their own doctor?”

"If you gothave any health problems, you should come to see me immediately."

If that happen 10 years ago.

I'm not quite sure what you mean by this? If you leave a comment explaining further, I'm happy to help you figure out a better way to say it.

I will said to him “I am the customer,should have said, “Hey, I'm the one who's pay you the money, you better watching for this!”

I think by "you better watch" you mean "you'd better watch your mouth," but that phrase sounds too aggressive in this context.

But for now I just said, “I a'm sorry, no. I won't do that next time.”

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Good work! I hope my corrections were helpful.

Don’t try to be your own doctor!

Today I gowent to see a doctor.

I told him that my back ishas been so itching for some time.

To stop that I try to pute itching, I tried some cream which I buyought from a local drugstore.

When he heard my answer, he become a kind of angrygot a little upset.

"If you gothave any health problemissues, you should come to see me immediately."

If thatis had happened 10 years ago.

I willould have said to him “I a'm the customer,one who's pay you the money, you better watching for this!”

But for now I just said, “I am sorry, no next timeI won't do it again.”

Don’t try to be your own doctor!

Today I gowent to see a doctor.

I told him that my back is sohas been itching for some time.

To stop thait I try to putied some cream which I buyought from the local drugstore.

When he heard my answer, he become a kind of angry.

And said to me,wWhy does everyone try to be their own doctor?”

I thinking joining the 2 previous sentences is most natural:
When he heard my answer, he become kind of angry and said to me, “Why does everyone try to be their own doctor?”

If you gothave any health problems, you should come to see me immediately.

If thatis happened 10 years ago.

I willould saidy to him, “I am the customer, who pay you the moneya paying customer, you better watchbe careful!”

Again, let's join the 2 sentences together:
If this happened 10 years ago I would say to him, “I am a paying customer, you better be careful!”

But nowtoday I just said “I am sorry, no next timeI won't do it again.”

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alexwong2164

Oct. 5, 2020

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if you got time please do take a look of my previous post "quqri"

Don’t try to be your own doctor!


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Today I go to see a doctor.


Today I gowent to see a doctor.

Today I gowent to see a doctor.

Today I'm going to see a doctor.

I told him that my back is so itching for some time.


I told him that my back is sohas been itching for some time.

I told him that my back ishas been so itching for some time.

I told him that my back is sohas been itching a lot for some time.

To stop that I try to put some cream which I buy from local drugstore.


To stop thait I try to putied some cream which I buyought from the local drugstore.

To stop that I try to pute itching, I tried some cream which I buyought from a local drugstore.

To stop thatit, I tryied to put on some cream which I buythat I bought from a local drugstore.

When he heard my answer, he become a kind of angry.


When he heard my answer, he become a kind of angry.

When he heard my answer, he become a kind of angrygot a little upset.

When he heard my answer, he become a kind ofgot a little angry.

And said to me “why everyone try to be their own doctor?”


And said to me,wWhy does everyone try to be their own doctor?”

I thinking joining the 2 previous sentences is most natural: When he heard my answer, he become kind of angry and said to me, “Why does everyone try to be their own doctor?”

AndHe said to me,wWhy does everyone try to be their own doctor?”

If you got any health problem, you should come to see me immediately.


If you gothave any health problems, you should come to see me immediately.

"If you gothave any health problemissues, you should come to see me immediately."

"If you gothave any health problems, you should come to see me immediately."

If that happen 10 years ago.


If thatis happened 10 years ago.

If thatis had happened 10 years ago.

If that happen 10 years ago.

I'm not quite sure what you mean by this? If you leave a comment explaining further, I'm happy to help you figure out a better way to say it.

I will said to him “I am the customer, who pay you the money, you better watch!”


I willould saidy to him, “I am the customer, who pay you the moneya paying customer, you better watchbe careful!”

Again, let's join the 2 sentences together: If this happened 10 years ago I would say to him, “I am a paying customer, you better be careful!”

I willould have said to him “I a'm the customer,one who's pay you the money, you better watching for this!”

I will said to him “I am the customer,should have said, “Hey, I'm the one who's pay you the money, you better watching for this!”

I think by "you better watch" you mean "you'd better watch your mouth," but that phrase sounds too aggressive in this context.

But now I just said “I am sorry, no next time.”


But nowtoday I just said “I am sorry, no next timeI won't do it again.”

But for now I just said, “I am sorry, no next timeI won't do it again.”

But for now I just said, “I a'm sorry, no. I won't do that next time.”

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