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Nov. 21, 2020

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I've offered to receive donations at my house for a school project. This project is annually organized by a professor and carried out by students of the fifth year of high school.
There's a place near a deprived neighborhood which makes education more accessible for the children who live there. it also gives them a place to stay in order for them to keep them away from the streets. We help them by donating backpacks with school supplies and textbooks.
People have been bringing home stuff they didn't need anymore for months now. We expect used stuff in good conditions (or new if someone wants to buy something, but it doesn't happen very often). However, many people donate things in poor conditions. I can't understand why they would do that when it's obvious there's a kid who's going to use them. I believe those kids deserve better than other people's trash. It's also sad to see that most of my classmates don't even care about the project. Apart from that, I was able to collect and fill twenty five backpacks so far.
We also have a project called "Nochebuena para todos", in which the students of every classroom have to fill two boxes with nonperishable food and gifts for deprived families.
These projects are what I like best about my school. It's so heartwarming to help people in need.

Do you say teacher or professor in high school?

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Donations

I've offered to receivtemporarily store donations at my house for a school project.

What you've written is correct, but I think the main point of what you're saying is that you're just holding onto these donations for now. Receive generally implies that you're keeping whatever object you're getting, whether it's mail, a package, or a message.

This project is annually organized by a professor and carried out by students of the fifth year of high school.Each year a high school teacher organizes this project and fifth year students participate.

Usually, we are taught in school to avoid passive voice. That's why I have changed the sentence structure to subject + verb. I'm not sure I captured the essence of what you mean, though, by changing carry out to participate.

There's a place near a n underprivileged neighborhood which makes education more accessible for the children who live there.

Deprived is not wrong. I just think it sounds more polite to say underprivileged, or even under resourced.

it also gives them a place to stay in order for them to keep them away from the streets.

We help them by donating backpacks with school supplies and textbooks.

People have been bringing home stuff they didon't need anymore for months now.

When you say "have been" it implies that the action is still ongoing. Therefore, didn't --> don't helps with being consistent in your verb tenses.

We expect used stuff to be in good conditions (or new if someone wants to buy something, but it doesn't happen very often).

However, many people donate things in poor conditions.

You only need the singular form of condition, since there is only one condition being described (i.e. poor).

I can't understand why they would do that when it's obvious there's a kid who's going to use them.

I believe those kids deserve better than other people's trash.

It's also sad to see that most of my classmates don't even care about the project.

Apart fromDespite thatis, I was able to collect and fill twenty five backpacks so far.

We also have a project called "Nochebuena para todos", in which the students of every classroom have to fill two boxes with nonperishable food and gifts for underprivileged families.

These projects are what I like best about my school.

It's so heartwarming to help people in need.

Do you say teacher or professor in high school?

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Great job! Also, you'd use teacher for high school. Professor is for college or university, at least in the US.

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Flan_girl

Nov. 21, 2020

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I've offered to receive donations at my house for a school project.


I've offered to receivtemporarily store donations at my house for a school project.

What you've written is correct, but I think the main point of what you're saying is that you're just holding onto these donations for now. Receive generally implies that you're keeping whatever object you're getting, whether it's mail, a package, or a message.

This project is annually organized by a professor and carried out by students of the fifth year of high school.


This project is annually organized by a professor and carried out by students of the fifth year of high school.Each year a high school teacher organizes this project and fifth year students participate.

Usually, we are taught in school to avoid passive voice. That's why I have changed the sentence structure to subject + verb. I'm not sure I captured the essence of what you mean, though, by changing carry out to participate.

There's a place near a deprived neighborhood which makes education more accessible for the children who live there.


There's a place near a n underprivileged neighborhood which makes education more accessible for the children who live there.

Deprived is not wrong. I just think it sounds more polite to say underprivileged, or even under resourced.

it also gives them a place to stay in order for them to keep them away from the streets.


it also gives them a place to stay in order for them to keep them away from the streets.

We help them by donating backpacks with school supplies and textbooks.


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People have been bringing home stuff they didn't need anymore for months now.


People have been bringing home stuff they didon't need anymore for months now.

When you say "have been" it implies that the action is still ongoing. Therefore, didn't --> don't helps with being consistent in your verb tenses.

We expect used stuff in good conditions (or new if someone wants to buy something, but it doesn't happen very often).


We expect used stuff to be in good conditions (or new if someone wants to buy something, but it doesn't happen very often).

However, many people donate things in poor conditions.


However, many people donate things in poor conditions.

You only need the singular form of condition, since there is only one condition being described (i.e. poor).

I can't understand why they would do that when it's obvious there's a kid who's going to use them.


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I believe those kids deserve better than other people's trash.


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It's also sad to see that most of my classmates don't even care about the project.


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Apart from that, I was able to collect and fill twenty five backpacks so far.


Apart fromDespite thatis, I was able to collect and fill twenty five backpacks so far.

We also have a project called "Nochebuena para todos", in which the students of every classroom have to fill two boxes with nonperishable food and gifts for deprived families.


We also have a project called "Nochebuena para todos", in which the students of every classroom have to fill two boxes with nonperishable food and gifts for underprivileged families.

These projects are what I like best about my school.


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It's so heartwarming to help people in need.


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Do you say teacher or professor in high school?


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