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tommy

Feb. 25, 2023

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I went to join dodgebee game this afternoon. Dodgebee stands for dodgeball frisbee. There are more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s. Though it was third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know somebody there other than my friend. He was busy to facilitate the game, so I do nothing but watching a game. Despite of lack of exercise, I had fun playing games as much as possible. I could catch a frisbee well and survive several times until the last minute.

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Dodgebee

I went to join a dodgebee game this afternoon.

また、

I joined a dodgebee game this afternoon.

Dodgebee stands for dodgeball frisbee.

There awere more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s there.

Though it was the third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know someanybody therelse other than my friend.

He was busy to facilitateing the game, so I doid nothing but watching aplay the game.

Despite ofmy lack of exercise, I had fun playing games as much as possible.

やった!

I could catch a frisbee well and survived several times uintilo the last minute.

凄いですね。

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楽しそうです。そのうちに、友達ができるかもしれませんね。よく出来ました!

I went to join a dodgebee game this afternoon.

Dodgebee stands for dodgeball frisbee.

There are more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.

Though it was my third time for me to joining this club, I haven't gotten to know somebodyanyone there other than my friend.

He was too busy to facilitateing the game, so I doid nothing but watching a the game.

Despite ofthe lack of exercise, I had fun playing games as much as possible in the games.

I could catch athe frisbee well and survived several times until the last minute.

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I went to join a dodgebee game this afternoon.

Dodgebee stands for dodgeball frisbee.

There are more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.

Though it was the third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know somebody therI attended this club, I still don't know anyone else other thane except for my friend.

He was busy to facilitateing the game, so I didn't do noanything but watching a game.

Despite ofmy lack of exercisefitness, I had fun playing games as much as possible.

I think this might be what you mean here.

I could catch a frisbee well and survived several times until the last minute.

I went to join a dodgebee game this afternoon.

Dodgebee stands for dodgeball frisbee.

There awere more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.

If you are explaining the past afternoon, you would use 'were'. If you are explaining it while you are there, you would use 'are'.

Though it was the third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know somebody there other than my friend.

He was busy to facilitateing the game, so I doid nothing but watching a the game.

Despite ofmy lack of exercise, I hadve fun playing games as much as possible.

I could catch a frisbee well and I survived several times until the last minute.

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Great job! Only small errors.

I went to joina dodgebee game this afternoon.

There are more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.

People is plural so there is no need for the "s" at the end.

Though it was the third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know somebodyanyone there other than my friend.

You would use "anyone" in this sentence as you aren't referring to a particular person.

He was busy to facilitateing the game, so I do nothing but watching a the game.

Despite ofa lack of exercise, I had a lot of fun playing games as much as possible.

I would change "as much as possible" to "a lot of" in this sentence to make it sound more natural. "As much as possible" in this sentence makes it sound like you were trying to have fun despite not enjoying the activity.

I could catch a frisbee well and survive several timeslast until the last minute.

"Survive" would be better replaced in this sentence. "Survive several times" also doesn't really make sense as "survive" is a one-off action until it is no longer applicable.

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A nice journal, just some grammar aspects to revise. Nice job :)

Dodgebee


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I went to join dodgebee game this afternoon.


I went to joina dodgebee game this afternoon.

I went to join a dodgebee game this afternoon.

I went to join a dodgebee game this afternoon.

I went to join a dodgebee game this afternoon.

I went to join a dodgebee game this afternoon.

また、 I joined a dodgebee game this afternoon.

Dodgebee stands for dodgeball frisbee.


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

There are more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.


There are more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.

People is plural so there is no need for the "s" at the end.

There awere more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.

If you are explaining the past afternoon, you would use 'were'. If you are explaining it while you are there, you would use 'are'.

There are more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.

There are more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s.

There awere more than 40 peoples in their 20s or 30s there.

Though it was third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know somebody there other than my friend.


Though it was the third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know somebodyanyone there other than my friend.

You would use "anyone" in this sentence as you aren't referring to a particular person.

Though it was the third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know somebody there other than my friend.

Though it was the third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know somebody therI attended this club, I still don't know anyone else other thane except for my friend.

Though it was my third time for me to joining this club, I haven't gotten to know somebodyanyone there other than my friend.

Though it was the third time for me to join this club, I haven't gotten to know someanybody therelse other than my friend.

He was busy to facilitate the game, so I do nothing but watching a game.


He was busy to facilitateing the game, so I do nothing but watching a the game.

He was busy to facilitateing the game, so I doid nothing but watching a the game.

He was busy to facilitateing the game, so I didn't do noanything but watching a game.

He was too busy to facilitateing the game, so I doid nothing but watching a the game.

He was busy to facilitateing the game, so I doid nothing but watching aplay the game.

Despite of lack of exercise, I had fun playing games as much as possible.


Despite ofa lack of exercise, I had a lot of fun playing games as much as possible.

I would change "as much as possible" to "a lot of" in this sentence to make it sound more natural. "As much as possible" in this sentence makes it sound like you were trying to have fun despite not enjoying the activity.

Despite ofmy lack of exercise, I hadve fun playing games as much as possible.

Despite ofmy lack of exercisefitness, I had fun playing games as much as possible.

I think this might be what you mean here.

Despite ofthe lack of exercise, I had fun playing games as much as possible in the games.

Despite ofmy lack of exercise, I had fun playing games as much as possible.

やった!

I could catch a frisbee well and survive several times until the last minute.


I could catch a frisbee well and survive several timeslast until the last minute.

"Survive" would be better replaced in this sentence. "Survive several times" also doesn't really make sense as "survive" is a one-off action until it is no longer applicable.

I could catch a frisbee well and I survived several times until the last minute.

I could catch a frisbee well and survived several times until the last minute.

I could catch athe frisbee well and survived several times until the last minute.

I could catch a frisbee well and survived several times uintilo the last minute.

凄いですね。

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