Aug. 9, 2025
Do you think technology improves our lives? Why or why not?
My goal is to write 150 - 200 word essay.
I think technology improves our lives because there are many positive benefits from it. Technology helps us improve our education access thereby improving your life. Advanced technology makes international education possible, no matter where you live. There are many courses, available online and you can attend the class by having only computer and online at home. Online education helps us reduce financial burden by addressing visa challenges if you have to study abroad, saving transportation costs required to go back and forth from home to school, reducing costs for physical books and learning materials, and more. Moreover, technology such as communication platforms like zoom helps you expand your personal and professional network through joining seminars, workshops, and webinars. Needless to mention that the platform like LangCorrect helps you improve your language skills required for advancing your education and career. Therefore, I believe technology improves our lives in many ways.
However, I appreciate that there may be some challenges like lack of access to internet and technology devices in some part of the world that limit certain groups from benefiting the power of technology in advancing their lives.
My goal is to write a 150 - 200 word essay.
I think technology improves our lives because there are many positive benefits from it. Technology helps us improve our education access thereby improving your life. Advanced technology makes international education possible, no matter where you live. There are many courses-available online and you can attend these classes by having only computer and internet access at home. Online education helps us reduce the financial burden by addressing the visa challenges that may arise if you have to study abroad, saving transportation costs required to go back and forth from home to school, reducing costs for physical books and learning materials, and more. Moreover, technology such as communication platforms such as Zoom help you expand your personal and professional networks through joining seminars, workshops, and webinars. Moreover, the platform like LangCorrect helps you improve your language skills required for advancing your education and career. Therefore, I believe technology improves our lives in many ways.
However, I appreciate that there may be some challenges such as lack of access to internet and technology devices in some parts of the world that limit certain groups from benefiting from the power of technology in advancing their lives.
Do you think technology improves our lives? Why or why not?
My goal is to write a 150 - -200 word essay.
I think technology improves our lives because there are many positive benefits from it.
Technology helps us improve our education access thereby improving your life.
Advanced technology makes international education possible, no matter where you live.
There are many courses, available online and you can attend these classes by having only a computer and onlineinternet access at home.
"these classes" is better because you already talking about them in the first part of the sentence.
Online education helps us reduce the financial burden by addressing the visa challenges that may arise if you have to study abroad, saving transportation costs required to go back and forth from home to school, reducing costs for physical books and learning materials, and more.
I added "that may arise", it flows a lot better with it.
Moreover, technology such as communication platforms like zsuch as Zoom helps you expand your personal and professional networks through joining seminars, workshops, and webinars.
-Nothing incorrect with like here just that you are trying to write a semi-formal piece and "such as" fits much better, "like" is very informal when used in that way.
-Proper nouns (eg. Zoom) are always capitalized.
-platforms is the subject here not Zoom hence "help"
-"networks" you have listed multiple.
Needless to mentionsay that the platform like LangCorrect helps you improve your language skills required for advancing your education and career.
Usually the phrase is "Needless to say" I've never really heard of anyone saying "Needless to mention", you may be combining it with "Not to mention".
Not sure what you were going for with the start of the sentence but it can be written in 2 ways:
"Needless to say that the platform LangCorrect helps you improve your language skills required for advancing your education and career." or
"Needless to say that platforms like LangCorrect help you improve your language skills required for advancing your education and career."
However, I appreciate that there may be some challenges likesuch as lack of access to internet and technology devices in some parts of the world that limit certain groups from benefiting from the power of technology in advancing their lives.
same as before
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Very well written just a few small errors with missing prepositions and word choice in parts, Keep it up!
Aug. 9, 2025
Thank you so much for your suggestions and corrections. I just wanted to explain why I mentioned LangCorrect in my essay that I wanted to add another supporting sentence to highlight the benefits of technology in our lives. Thank you.
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Do you think technology improves our lives? Why or why not? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My goal is to write 150 - 200 word essay. My goal is to write a 150 |
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I think technology improves our lives because there are many positive benefits from it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Technology helps us improve our education access thereby improving your life. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Advanced technology makes international education possible, no matter where you live. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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There are many courses, available online and you can attend the class by having only computer and online at home. There are many courses "these classes" is better because you already talking about them in the first part of the sentence. |
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Online education helps us reduce financial burden by addressing visa challenges if you have to study abroad, saving transportation costs required to go back and forth from home to school, reducing costs for physical books and learning materials, and more. Online education helps us reduce the financial burden by addressing the visa challenges that may arise if you have to study abroad, saving transportation costs required to go back and forth from home to school, reducing costs for physical books and learning materials, and more. I added "that may arise", it flows a lot better with it. |
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Moreover, technology such as communication platforms like zoom helps you expand your personal and professional network through joining seminars, workshops, and webinars. Moreover, technology such as communication platforms -Nothing incorrect with like here just that you are trying to write a semi-formal piece and "such as" fits much better, "like" is very informal when used in that way. -Proper nouns (eg. Zoom) are always capitalized. -platforms is the subject here not Zoom hence "help" -"networks" you have listed multiple. |
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Needless to mention that the platform like LangCorrect helps you improve your language skills required for advancing your education and career. Needless to Usually the phrase is "Needless to say" I've never really heard of anyone saying "Needless to mention", you may be combining it with "Not to mention". Not sure what you were going for with the start of the sentence but it can be written in 2 ways: "Needless to say that the platform LangCorrect helps you improve your language skills required for advancing your education and career." or "Needless to say that platforms like LangCorrect help you improve your language skills required for advancing your education and career." |
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Therefore, I believe technology improves our lives in many ways. |
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However, I appreciate that there may be some challenges like lack of access to internet and technology devices in some part of the world that limit certain groups from benefiting the power of technology in advancing their lives. However, I appreciate that there may be some challenges same as before |
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