Oct. 5, 2021
Do you agree with this statement?
Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions. To what extent do you agree?
In society people enjoy playing and watching any kinds of sports. But nowadays, they are a little concerned on what sort of program are broadcasted by TV channels. I totally disagree that programs or sports involving violence are banned from internet or TV because parents can supervise the channels that children are watching, many sports have physical contact, and people who play these sports are only athletes.
First off, adults have the decision to watch boxing or martial arts, but if the person is a child, parents should control them. To be more specific, parents can explain to kids what the athletes are doing, in these rude sports. Then, children can understand that even though these sports seem too dangerous, they are not generating violence and may be practiced as a recreational activity. I have a friend who is practicing boxing, he is very friendly and kind. Therefore, I extremely think that boxing or other rude sport is not generating violence in society.
Secondly, most of the sports are physical, it means that usually have physical contact between players or athletes. For instance, football and hockey always have friction during the match, however, it does not mean that these sports are violent and should be banned or forbidden. I am a compelling illustration of this. I really like playing football, when I was a kid, I used to play during the break time at high-school with my friends. Right now, I only watch football matches, but my point is that the physical contact always is in sports with many players and should be accepted by some people.
Finally, I would like to discuss more about martial arts. I do not believe that martial arts provoke violence in the audience. In fact, martial arts is kind of physical activity defined to personal defense. I remember when I was eight-year-olds, I used to practice Taek-Wan-Do. At the beginning, I didn’t like too much, but after that, I really enjoyed practicing it. Until these days, this activity is nothing about violence, instead, it makes me to have peace in my mind.
To sum up, I do not agree that boxing or martial arts should be forbidden in TV or international competitions because some people may avoid watching them, some sports are physical ones, and some people enjoy practicing them.
Do you agree with this statement?
Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions.
To what extent do you agree?
In society people enjoy playing and watching many kinds of sports.
"any" doesn't work here, I think you meant this.
But nowadays, they are a little concerned onabout what sorts of programs are broadcasted by TV channels.
I totally disagree that programs or sports involving violence arshould be banned from internet or TV, because parents can supervise the channels that children are watching, many sports have physical contact, and people who play these sports are only athletes.
You use continuous tense, "are watching", in many places here. Mostly it's not *wrong* but wherever simple present is more natural I'll change it.
First off, adults have the decisionchoice to watch boxing or martial arts, but if the person is a child, their parents should control them.
Difficult to explain why, but "decision" feels a bit odd here.
To be more specific, parents can explain to kids what the athletes are doing, in these rudeough sports.
Rude is being impolite, or sometimes "made crudely, simplistically, without refinement".
Then, children can understand that even though these sports seem too dangerous, they are nodon't generatinge violence and may be practiced as a recreational activity.
I have a friend who is practicinges boxing, he is very friendly and kind.
Therefore, I extremely thinkstrongly believe that boxing orand other rudeough sport is nos don't generatinge violence in society.
Don't say "extremely think" or "very think".
Secondly, most of the sports are physical, ithis means that they usually have physical contact between players or athletes.
For instance, football and hockey always have friction during the match, however, it does not mean that these sports are violent and should be banned or forbidden.
I am a compelling illustration of this.
I really like playing football, when I was a kid, I used to play during the break time at high-school with my friends.
Right now, I only watch football matches, but my point is that the physical contact is always ispresent in sports with many players and should be accepted by some people.
Finally, I would like to discuss more about martial arts.
I do not believe that martial arts provoke violence in the audience.
In fact, martial arts is a kind of physical activity defined tobuilt around personal defense.
Not sure exactly what you wanted "defined" to express.
I remember when I was eight- year-s olds, I used to practice Taek-Wan- Kwon Do.
At the beginning, I didn’t like it too much, but after that, I really enjoyed practicing it.
Until theseTo this days, this activity is nothing about violence, instead, it makes me to have peace in my mindere's nothing violent about this activity for me, instead, it makes my mind peaceful.
Grammatically "it makes me have peace in my mind", not "to have", but that's very awkward.
To sum up, I do not agree that boxing or martial arts should be forbidden ion TV or in international competitions because some people may avoid watching them, some sports are physical ones, and some people enjoy practicing them.
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Do you agree with this statement? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Some people think that sports involving violence, such as boxing and martial arts, should be banned from TV as well as from international sporting competitions. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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To what extent do you agree? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In society people enjoy playing and watching any kinds of sports. In society people enjoy playing and watching many kinds of sports. "any" doesn't work here, I think you meant this. |
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But nowadays, they are a little concerned on what sort of program are broadcasted by TV channels. But nowadays, they are a little concerned |
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I totally disagree that programs or sports involving violence are banned from internet or TV because parents can supervise the channels that children are watching, many sports have physical contact, and people who play these sports are only athletes. I totally disagree that programs or sports involving violence You use continuous tense, "are watching", in many places here. Mostly it's not *wrong* but wherever simple present is more natural I'll change it. |
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First off, adults have the decision to watch boxing or martial arts, but if the person is a child, parents should control them. First off, adults have the Difficult to explain why, but "decision" feels a bit odd here. |
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To be more specific, parents can explain to kids what the athletes are doing, in these rude sports. To be more specific, parents can explain to kids what the athletes are doing, in these r Rude is being impolite, or sometimes "made crudely, simplistically, without refinement". |
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Then, children can understand that even though these sports seem too dangerous, they are not generating violence and may be practiced as a recreational activity. Then, children can understand that even though these sports seem too dangerous, they |
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I have a friend who is practicing boxing, he is very friendly and kind. I have a friend who |
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Therefore, I extremely think that boxing or other rude sport is not generating violence in society. Therefore, I Don't say "extremely think" or "very think". |
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Secondly, most of the sports are physical, it means that usually have physical contact between players or athletes. Secondly, most of the sports are physical, |
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For instance, football and hockey always have friction during the match, however, it does not mean that these sports are violent and should be banned or forbidden. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I am a compelling illustration of this. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I really like playing football, when I was a kid, I used to play during the break time at high-school with my friends. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Right now, I only watch football matches, but my point is that the physical contact always is in sports with many players and should be accepted by some people. Right now, I only watch football matches, but my point is that |
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Finally, I would like to discuss more about martial arts. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I do not believe that martial arts provoke violence in the audience. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In fact, martial arts is kind of physical activity defined to personal defense. In fact, martial arts is a kind of physical activity Not sure exactly what you wanted "defined" to express. |
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I remember when I was eight-year-olds, I used to practice Taek-Wan-Do. I remember when I was eight |
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At the beginning, I didn’t like too much, but after that, I really enjoyed practicing it. At the beginning, I didn’t like it too much, but after that, I really enjoyed practicing it. |
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Until these days, this activity is nothing about violence, instead, it makes me to have peace in my mind.
Grammatically "it makes me have peace in my mind", not "to have", but that's very awkward. |
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To sum up, I do not agree that boxing or martial arts should be forbidden in TV or international competitions because some people may avoid watching them, some sports are physical ones, and some people enjoy practicing them. To sum up, I do not agree that boxing or martial arts should be forbidden |
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