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May 30, 2023

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Distance Education

With the development of the Internet, especially after the pandemic, a growing number of schools have implemented distance education program or remote teaching methods. To a great extent technologies of telecommuting has brought revolutions on education, which changed the styles people live their life and complete work. Even though distance education is different from traditional university education, traditional university education still has some advantages.

Distance education is more flexible when you consider the limits on places and time for classes. Students and educators don’t have to commute every class day, which saves their time and money on commuting. Also it is unnecessary to live near the campus where the rents are usually too expensive to afford. The classes are available 24 hours a day and 7 days a week, which is suitable for those who need to work to cover life expenses, as long as they are convenient. Thereby distance education is offering opportunities to more learners.

The advanced technologies in distance education has made it possible for students to review a particular section of those lesson videos when they can not get understand. They can replay any time they want until they exactly make sense.

The main disadvantage of distance education is that the atmosphere of the class has diminished. Students tend to be distracted during class, playing games outside the screen, and they are easily interrupted by other things such household chores. Communications are not as frequent as before that students usually complete their group works independently after a short group discussing. The interactions between tutors and students are also not effective as expected that they can only leave comments by typing words or send emails instead of face to face communication which usually will not get reply immediately.

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Distance Education

With the development of the Internet, especially after the pandemic, a growing number of schools have implemented distance education program or remote teaching methods.

To a great extent technologies of telecommuting hasve brought revolutions on education, which changed the styles people live their life and complete work.

Even though distance education is different from traditional university education, traditional university education still has some advantages.

Distance education is more flexible when you consider the limits on places and time for classes.

Students and educators don’t have to commute every class day, which saves their time and money on commuting.

Also it is unnecessary to live near the campus where the rents are usually too expensive to afford.

The classes are available 24 hours a day and 7 days a week, which is suitable for those who need to work to cover life expenses, as long as they are convenient.

Thereby distance education is offering opportunities to more learners.

The advanced technologies in distance education has made it possible for students to review a particular section of those lesson videos when they can not get understand.

They can replay any time they want until they exactly make sense.

The main disadvantachallenge of distance education is that the atmosphere of the class has diminished.

Students tend to be distracted during class, playing games outside the screen, and they are easily interrupted by other things such household chores.

Communications are not as frequent as before that students usually complete their group works independently after a short group discussing.

The interactions between tutors and students are also not effective as expected that they can only leave comments by typing words or send emails instead of face to face communication which usually will not get reply immediately.

Distance Education

With the development of the Iinternet, especially after the pandemic, a growing number of schools have implemented distance education programs or remote teaching methods.

I believe programs is meant to be plural here.

To a great extent technologies of, telecommutingnication has brought rdevolutions onelopments to education, which has changed the stylesways in which people live their lifeves and complete work.

Even though distance education is different from a traditional university education, traditional university education still has some advantages.

The use of "still" here isn't wrong, but I don't personally think it is 100% necessary. It is good with and without. The "a" helps the sentence flow better in my opinion.

Distance education is more flexible when you consider the limits on the places and time ofor classes.

In English the phrase "time and place" is relatively frequent, so for whatever reason the use of "place and time" seems wonky to me. There is nothing wrong with it, but for native english speakers (or maybe just me) "time and place" sounds very natural. Feel free to change it or keep what is already there, both are great.

Students and educators don’t have to commute everyto class every day, which saves theirm time and money on commuting.

The "commuting" used at the very end isn't necessary, and sounds repetitive.

Also it isIt is also unnecessary to live near the campus where the rents are usually too expensive to afford. is often too high.

I personally think using "it is" at the beginning of the sentence sounds much better, but that is a personal preference and I'm pretty sure that your way is also right. This sentence is clear and understandable, but slightly wordy and I think some of the words at the end could be cut out to simply say that "rent is often too high".

The cClasses are available 24 hours a day and 7 days a week/7, which is suitable for those who need to work to cover life's expenses, as long as they are convenient.

Feel free to use "the" at the beginning, but I don't think it is necessary. I also think simply using 24/7 for this is more effective. I'm not sure what is meant by "as long as they are convenient".

TherebyBecause of this, distance education is offering greater opportunities to more learners.

Once again, your original sentence is clear, but I think it sounds more natural this way. I understand that my correction has very slightly changed the meaning of the sentence, which I think is what is ultimately meant, but use your judgement :)

The advanced technologies used in distance education hasve made it possible for students to review a particular section of those lessons or videos when they can not gedo not understand.

They can replay any timepart they want until ithey exactly makes sense.

The main disadvantage of distance education is that the classroom atmosphere of the class has diminished.

Students tend to be distracted during class, playing games outside the screen, and theyof class, and are easily interrupted by other things such as household chores.

Communications are is not as frequent as it was before thatbecause students usually complete their group works independently after a short group discussiong.

Group work is singular :)

The iInteractions between tutors and students are also not as effective as expected thatbecause they can only leave comments by typing words or sending emails, instead of face to face communication which usually will not get reply immediately.

I'm not sure how the "which usually will not get reply immediately" is meant to play into the sentence so I removed it.

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Overall, this is really very good. Many of my corrections are stylistic preferences, and what you had written was definitely understandable before I changed anything. Well done, I hope this helps in some way!

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Distance education is more flexible when you consider the limits on the places and time ofor classes.

oh because I explained why place is flexible in the next sentence and then came to the time...if it is more frequently used I would explain why time is flexible first

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Students and educators don’t have to commute everyto class every day, which saves theirm time and money on commuting.

I just wanna separate the money for commuting and the money for the rent, so I put adjective here

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The cClasses are available 24 hours a day and 7 days a week/7, which is suitable for those who need to work to cover life's expenses, as long as they are convenient.

Is it suitable to write 24/7 in a exam article? is that a formal way?
as long as they are convenient means whenever they are available they can study

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With the development of the Internet, especially after the pandemic, a growing number of schools have implemented distance education program or remote teaching methods.


With the development of the Iinternet, especially after the pandemic, a growing number of schools have implemented distance education programs or remote teaching methods.

I believe programs is meant to be plural here.

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To a great extent technologies of telecommuting has brought revolutions on education, which changed the styles people live their life and complete work.


To a great extent technologies of, telecommutingnication has brought rdevolutions onelopments to education, which has changed the stylesways in which people live their lifeves and complete work.

To a great extent technologies of telecommuting hasve brought revolutions on education, which changed the styles people live their life and complete work.

Even though distance education is different from traditional university education, traditional university education still has some advantages.


Even though distance education is different from a traditional university education, traditional university education still has some advantages.

The use of "still" here isn't wrong, but I don't personally think it is 100% necessary. It is good with and without. The "a" helps the sentence flow better in my opinion.

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Distance education is more flexible when you consider the limits on places and time for classes.


Distance education is more flexible when you consider the limits on the places and time ofor classes.

In English the phrase "time and place" is relatively frequent, so for whatever reason the use of "place and time" seems wonky to me. There is nothing wrong with it, but for native english speakers (or maybe just me) "time and place" sounds very natural. Feel free to change it or keep what is already there, both are great.

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Students and educators don’t have to commute every class day, which saves their time and money on commuting.


Students and educators don’t have to commute everyto class every day, which saves theirm time and money on commuting.

The "commuting" used at the very end isn't necessary, and sounds repetitive.

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Also it is unnecessary to live near the campus where the rents are usually too expensive to afford.


Also it isIt is also unnecessary to live near the campus where the rents are usually too expensive to afford. is often too high.

I personally think using "it is" at the beginning of the sentence sounds much better, but that is a personal preference and I'm pretty sure that your way is also right. This sentence is clear and understandable, but slightly wordy and I think some of the words at the end could be cut out to simply say that "rent is often too high".

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The classes are available 24 hours a day and 7 days a week, which is suitable for those who need to work to cover life expenses, as long as they are convenient.


The cClasses are available 24 hours a day and 7 days a week/7, which is suitable for those who need to work to cover life's expenses, as long as they are convenient.

Feel free to use "the" at the beginning, but I don't think it is necessary. I also think simply using 24/7 for this is more effective. I'm not sure what is meant by "as long as they are convenient".

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Thereby distance education is offering opportunities to more learners.


TherebyBecause of this, distance education is offering greater opportunities to more learners.

Once again, your original sentence is clear, but I think it sounds more natural this way. I understand that my correction has very slightly changed the meaning of the sentence, which I think is what is ultimately meant, but use your judgement :)

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The advanced technologies in distance education has made it possible for students to review a particular section of those lesson videos when they can not get understand.


The advanced technologies used in distance education hasve made it possible for students to review a particular section of those lessons or videos when they can not gedo not understand.

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They can replay any time they want until they exactly make sense.


They can replay any timepart they want until ithey exactly makes sense.

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The main disadvantage of distance education is that the atmosphere of the class has diminished.


The main disadvantage of distance education is that the classroom atmosphere of the class has diminished.

The main disadvantachallenge of distance education is that the atmosphere of the class has diminished.

Students tend to be distracted during class, playing games outside the screen, and they are easily interrupted by other things such household chores.


Students tend to be distracted during class, playing games outside the screen, and theyof class, and are easily interrupted by other things such as household chores.

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Communications are not as frequent as before that students usually complete their group works independently after a short group discussing.


Communications are is not as frequent as it was before thatbecause students usually complete their group works independently after a short group discussiong.

Group work is singular :)

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The interactions between tutors and students are also not effective as expected that they can only leave comments by typing words or send emails instead of face to face communication which usually will not get reply immediately.


The iInteractions between tutors and students are also not as effective as expected thatbecause they can only leave comments by typing words or sending emails, instead of face to face communication which usually will not get reply immediately.

I'm not sure how the "which usually will not get reply immediately" is meant to play into the sentence so I removed it.

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