Feb. 22, 2021
Diary: Transgender Sports Policies
I am a terrible skater, but I enjoy watching skateboarding videos. And Leo Baker (who identifies as nonbinary) is one of my favorite skaters. It's a pity that they chose to quit the American skateboard team, not participate in the Tokyo Olymics. But I wonder how LGBTQ+, especially transgender people, participate in sports games?
Today I happened to read an article about a transgender named CeCe Telfer, won the women's national championship. It has a sound regulation in sport games. "Since 2015, the IOC has allowed biological males who have self-identified as female for a year to compete in women's sport, if they reduce their testosterone levels to 10 nmol/l (nanomoles per litre)." But some people think this is unfair to women. "Athletes who are genetically male are, on average, 40 per cent heavier, 15 per cent faster and 25-50 per cent stronger than those born female." Prior to joining the women's team, Telfer was a mediocre athlete who never came close to making it to nationals in the men's category. The fact that Telfer immediately becomes a national champion after changing her gender. Is this equality? Where is the bottom line of inclusiveness?
Reference: https://nationalpost.com/opinion/barbara-kay-transgender-sports-policies-have-thrown-fair-play-out-the-window
Diary: Transgender Sports Policies
I am a terrible skater, but I enjoy watching skateboarding videos.
And Leo Baker (who identifies as nonbinary) is one of my favorite skaters.
It's a pity that they chose to quit the American skateboard team, and not to participate in the Tokyo Olympics.
But do I wonder how LGBTQ+ people, especially transgender people, participate in sports games?.
"Do" here adds a small sense of contradiction to the sentence. As in "I'm a fan of this trans athlete, but I do wonder about trans inclusion in sports more broadly"
Sports games is overly specific. All of your questions are relevant to sports that aren't games (i.e. sports with races, matches, rounds, etc.). You're wondering about sports in general, not individual games of specific sports.
Today I happened to read an article about a transgender woman named CeCe Telfer, who won the women's national (which sport? Tennis? Skating?) championship.
Just calling someone "a transgender" is often considered a bit offensive. Say "transgender woman" for male-to-female trans people and "transgender man" for female-to-male trans people. You can also say "trans person." Some people prefer person-first language such as "a woman who is transgender" or "a person who is non-binary."
It has a sound regulation in sport gameThere are clear regulations on the participation of trans people in sports.
The way you had it written was a awkward and a bit wrong ('sound' doesn't work), and I wasn't able to fix it without changing the structure a lot. I think this sentence is a clearer way to get your point across and transition into the next sentence.
"Since 2015, the IOC has allowed biological males who have self-identified as female for a year to compete in women's sport, if they reduce their testosterone levels to 10 nmol/l (nanomoles per litre)."
But some people think this is unfair to women.
"Athletes who are genetically male are, on average, 40 per cent heavier, 15 per cent faster and 25-50 per cent stronger than those born female."
Prior to joining the women's team, Telfer was a mediocre athlete who never came close to making it to nationals in the men's category.
The fact thaBut Telfer immediately becoames a national champion after changing her genderher transition.
I often hear trans folks use the term "transition" instead of "gender change." This phrasing is more in-line with what I see written and said in more trans-inclusive spaces.
Is this equality?
Where is the bottom line ofn has inclusiveness gone too far?
This isn't something a native speaker would say. I think something like "when has inclusiveness gone too far" is more what you're aiming for.
Feedback
This is a controversial subject, and even native speakers have trouble agreeing upon and using inclusive language. But if you're going to talk about people with marginalized/historically oppressed identities, it's worth spending some time learning about current best practices for referring to them, since it can really hurt folks when people get it wrong. I recommend looking up one of the many helpful style guides out there that has advice on how to write about these groups :)
Your grammar is good overall! Just a few issues. Be careful with incomplete sentences. Great work, and interesting choice of topic!
Feb. 23, 2021
Thank you:) You are right, I should pay more attention to the usage of those words. No offense!
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I am a terrible skater, but I enjoy watching skateboarding videos. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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And Leo Baker (who identifies as nonbinary) is one of my favorite skaters. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It's a pity that they chose to quit the American skateboard team, not participate in the Tokyo Olymics. It's a pity that they chose to quit the American skateboard team |
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But I wonder how LGBTQ+, especially transgender people, participate in sports games? But do I wonder how LGBTQ+ people, especially transgender people, participate in sports "Do" here adds a small sense of contradiction to the sentence. As in "I'm a fan of this trans athlete, but I do wonder about trans inclusion in sports more broadly" Sports games is overly specific. All of your questions are relevant to sports that aren't games (i.e. sports with races, matches, rounds, etc.). You're wondering about sports in general, not individual games of specific sports. |
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Today I happened to read an article about a transgender named CeCe Telfer, won the women's national championship. Today I happened to read an article about a transgender woman named CeCe Telfer, who won the women's national (which sport? Tennis? Skating?) championship. Just calling someone "a transgender" is often considered a bit offensive. Say "transgender woman" for male-to-female trans people and "transgender man" for female-to-male trans people. You can also say "trans person." Some people prefer person-first language such as "a woman who is transgender" or "a person who is non-binary." |
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It has a sound regulation in sport games.
The way you had it written was a awkward and a bit wrong ('sound' doesn't work), and I wasn't able to fix it without changing the structure a lot. I think this sentence is a clearer way to get your point across and transition into the next sentence. |
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"Since 2015, the IOC has allowed biological males who have self-identified as female for a year to compete in women's sport, if they reduce their testosterone levels to 10 nmol/l (nanomoles per litre)." This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But some people think this is unfair to women. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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"Athletes who are genetically male are, on average, 40 per cent heavier, 15 per cent faster and 25-50 per cent stronger than those born female." This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Prior to joining the women's team, Telfer was a mediocre athlete who never came close to making it to nationals in the men's category. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The fact that Telfer immediately becomes a national champion after changing her gender.
I often hear trans folks use the term "transition" instead of "gender change." This phrasing is more in-line with what I see written and said in more trans-inclusive spaces. |
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Is this equality? This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Where is the bottom line of inclusiveness? Whe This isn't something a native speaker would say. I think something like "when has inclusiveness gone too far" is more what you're aiming for. |
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