Feb. 24, 2021
Diary: Childfree (pt.3)
As mentioned earlier, filial piety to the elders will bring financial burdens to youths. In addition, the huge financial pressure on young couples also comes from housing and raising. In general, newlyweds have to buy their own house. Take Beijing, the capital of China, as an example. The average annual salary of a person is 74,000. The average annual salary of a person is ￥74000 ($11600), and the price of a house per square meter is ￥85000 ($13000). In other words, one person may not be able to buy a one-square-meter house without living for a year. Of course, the better the school district, the higher the housing prices, the lower housing prices in the more remote suburbs. Otherwise, some people estimate that it will take about 4 million yuan to raise a child to adulthood, which includes having the necessary tutoring classes. Starting from kindergarten, most children need to learn special skills (hobbies) and delve into the in-class curriculum outside of school. The lower class hopes to change their fate, but the middle and upper classes aren't so much looking upward, and they are marked by a deep fear of falling downward. We refer to this phenomenon as "involution".
More and more youths do not have time to find a partner, afraid to get married, and afraid to have a child.
Diary: Childfree (pt.3)
As mentioned earlier, filial piety to the elders will bring financial burdens to youths.
In addition, the huge financial pressure on young couples also comes from housing and raising children.
Raising on its own won't be understood as raising children, since there's many things you can raise.
In general, newlyweds have to buy their own house.
Take Beijing, the capital of China, as an example.
The average annual salary of a person is 74,000.
I would just take this sentence out completely since you repeat this information in the next sentence.
The average annual salary of a person is ￥74000 ($11600), and the price of a house per square meter is ￥85000 ($13000).
In other words, one person may not be able to buy a one-square-meter house without livwaiting for a year.
Living for a year doesn't quite make sense in this context.
Of course, the better the school district, the higher the housing prices, and the lower housing prices will be in the more remote suburbs.
Your sentence was OK, but a little unclear. This makes it clearer and easier to understand in the first reading.
Otherwise, some people estimate that it will take about 4 million yuan to raise a child to adulthood, which includes having the necessary tutoring classes.
Starting from kindergarten, most children need to learn special skills (hobbies) and delve into the in-class curriculum outside of school.
The lower class hopes to change their fate, but the middle and upper classes aren't so much looking upward, ands they are marked by a deep fear of falling downward.
It just sounds better.
We refer to this phenomenon as "involution"."
The period is almost always placed inside quotation marks even when ending a sentence outside of the quotation.
More and more youths do not have time to find a partner, are afraid to get married, and are afraid to have a child.
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Very good overall! Your grammar is quite good. I have one note: you switch between spelling out "yuan" and using the symbol "￥." Both are fine, but you should choose one and stay consistent throughout.
Feb. 25, 2021
Thanks :)
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Diary: Childfree (pt.3) This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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As mentioned earlier, filial piety to the elders will bring financial burdens to youths. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In addition, the huge financial pressure on young couples also comes from housing and raising. In addition, the huge financial pressure on young couples also comes from housing and raising children. Raising on its own won't be understood as raising children, since there's many things you can raise. |
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In general, newlyweds have to buy their own house. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Take Beijing, the capital of China, as an example. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The average annual salary of a person is 74,000.
I would just take this sentence out completely since you repeat this information in the next sentence. |
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The average annual salary of a person is ￥74000 ($11600), and the price of a house per square meter is ￥85000 ($13000). This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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In other words, one person may not be able to buy a one-square-meter house without living for a year. In other words, one person may not be able to buy a one-square-meter house without Living for a year doesn't quite make sense in this context. |
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Of course, the better the school district, the higher the housing prices, the lower housing prices in the more remote suburbs. Of course, the better the school district, the higher the housing prices, and the lower housing prices will be in the more remote suburbs. Your sentence was OK, but a little unclear. This makes it clearer and easier to understand in the first reading. |
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Otherwise, some people estimate that it will take about 4 million yuan to raise a child to adulthood, which includes having the necessary tutoring classes. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Starting from kindergarten, most children need to learn special skills (hobbies) and delve into the in-class curriculum outside of school. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The lower class hopes to change their fate, but the middle and upper classes aren't so much looking upward, and they are marked by a deep fear of falling downward. The lower class hopes to change their fate, but the middle and upper classes aren't so much looking upward, a It just sounds better. |
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We refer to this phenomenon as "involution". We refer to this phenomenon as "involution The period is almost always placed inside quotation marks even when ending a sentence outside of the quotation. |
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More and more youths do not have time to find a partner, afraid to get married, and afraid to have a child. More and more youths do not have time to find a partner, are afraid to get married, and are afraid to have a child. |
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