Feb. 4, 2023
Diary 2/3 & 2/4
2/3
Today is my mother’s birthday! We went to a department store in order to see a movie. The theater in this department store is amazing! It is designed as an airport. The entrance of the auditorium is the boarding gate. Even the announcement of reminding the movie time is similar to an airport’s. The movie we saw is《Plane》. Everything about it is so fantastic. It never runs out of steam. My heartbeat had been beating fast from the first crisis to the end. To be honest, I’m not interested in this kind of movie, but I really recommend it after seeing it.
2/4
Today I went to the cafe near my home instead of the library. I just wanted to study at a different place and made my day a little fresher than usual. It was not quite like the library, even a little loud because of the coffee machines and the chatting voices. But I felt the degree I focused on what I studied at the cafe is the same as at the library. I thought the reason is that what I studied is the thing I’m interested in. Therefore, I didn’t feel irritable even though I was in the noisy atmosphere. On the contrary, I was energetic when studying.
Diary 2/3 & 2/4
2/3
Today is my mother’s birthday!
We went to a department store in order to see a movie.
"In order to" sounds very formal, you can just say "to".
The theater in this department store is amazing!
It is designed asto look like an airport.
The entrance of the auditorium is the boarding gate.
Even the announcement tof reminding what time the movie timestarts is similar to an airport’s.
The movie we saw is《Plane》.
Everything about it is so fantastic.
It never runs out of steam.
My heartbeat had been was beating fast from the first crisis to the end.
To be honest, I’m not interested in this kind of movie, but I really recommend it after seeing it.
2/4
Today I went to the cafe near my home instead of the library.
I just wanted to study at a different place and made my day a little fresher than usual.
It was not quite like the library, even a little loud because of the coffee machines and the chatting voices.
But I felt the degree I focused on what I studied at the cafe is the same as at the library.
I thought the reason is thatink that is because what I studied is the thing I’m interested in.
Therefore, I didn’t feel irritable even though I was in the noisy atmosphere.
On the contrary, I was energetic when studying.
Diary 2/3 & 2/4
2/3
Today is my mother’s birthday!
We went to a department store in order to see a movie.
Your sentence was correct but this sounds more natural in the US.
The theater in this department store is amazing!
It is designed as an airport.
The entrance of the auditorium is the boarding gate.
Even the announcement of reminding the movie time reminder is similar to an airport’s.
Cool!
The movie we saw is《was _Plane》_.
Everything about it is so fantastic.
It never runs out of steam.
My heartbeat had been beating fast from the first crisis to the end.
To be honest, I’m not interested in this kind of movie, but I really recommend it after seeing it.
2/4
Today I went to the cafe near my home instead of the library.
I just wanted to study at a different place and madke my day a little fresher than usual.
It was not quite like the library,. It was even a little loud because of the coffee machines and the chatting voices.
But I felt tThe degree I could focused on what I studied at the cafe is, however, felt the same as at the library.
I thoughtink the reason is that what I studied is the thing I’m interested in.
Therefore, I didn’t feel irritable even though I was in thea noisy atmosphere.
On the contrary, I was energetic when studying.
Feedback
Very good work!
To be honest, I’m not usually interested in this kind of movie, but I really recommend it after seeing it.
I just wanted to study at a different place and madke my day a little fresher than usual.
But I felt the degree to which I focused on what I studied at the cafe iwas the same as at the library.
I thought the reason is that what I studied is the ink it's because I was studying something I’m found interested in.ing.
While your sentence isn't wrong per se, it was a little choppy. I think it could be due to ending with a preposition. When you end a sentence with 'in'; 'at'; 'on'; 'of'; 'to', it sounds a little weird. I reformatted your sentence to help it flow while still conveying the same idea.
Therefore, I didn’t feel irritable even though I was in thea noisy atmosphere.
Swap out the article 'the' for 'a', and now it sounds more natural.
Feedback
Great journal entry! Just a few minor corrections and recommendations for you. I enjoyed the part about the department store theater. That sounds like a fun venue. :)
Diary 2/3 & 2/4
2/3
Today is my mother’s birthday!
We went to a department store in order to see a movie.
The theater in this department store is amazing!
It is designed as an airport.
The entrance of the auditorium is the boarding gate.
Even the announcement of reminding the movie time is similar to an airport’s.
The movie we saw is《Plane》.
Everything about it is so fantastic.
It never runs out of steam.
My heartbeat had been beating fast from the first crisis to the end.
To be honest, I’m not interested in this kind of movie, but I really recommend it after seeing it.
2/4
Today I went to the cafe near my home instead of the library.
I just wanted to study at a different place and made my day a little fresher than usual.
It was not quite like the library, even a little loud because of the coffee machines and the chatting voices.
But I felt the degree I focused on what I studied at the cafe is the same as at the library.
I thought the reason is that what I studied is the thing I’m interested in.
Therefore, I didn’t feel irritable even though I was in thea noisy atmosphere.
On the contrary, I was energetic when studying.
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