Feb. 1, 2023
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Today I didn't go to the library because I needed to assist my parents their works. My father is an engineering technician. He needs to move the heavy machine and prepares for many steps before work. Therefore, it's necessary that other people help him. My mother is the one who assists him. When I or my siblings are on the long vacation, we will go to work with my parents. Although sometimes I'm so exhausted after going home, I still feel happy when we meet some very kind clients. Today's client gave us nine bottles of drinks and three bowls of red bean soup. Yesterday my younger sister just complained the refrigerator of our home didn't have any drinks, now the situation is totally different.
Diary 2/1
Today I didn't go to the library today because I needed to assist my parents with their works.
My father is an engineering technician.
He needs to move the heavy machines and prepares for many steps before work.
Therefore, it's necessary that other people help him.
My mother is the one who usually assists him.
When I or my siblings or I are on thea long vacation, we will go to work with myour parents.
Although sometimes I'm so exhausted after goingby the time I get home, I still feel happy when we meet some very kind clients.
Today's client gave us nine bottles of drinks and three bowls of red bean soup.
YJust yesterday my younger sister just complained the refrigerator of our home didn't have any drinks,at there weren't any drinks in the refrigerator but now the situation is totally different.
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What a nice person! Good work!
Today, I didn't go to the library because I needed to assist my parents atheir works.
My father is an engineering technician.
He needs to moves the heavy machine and prepares for many steps before starting work.
In english, to sound like a native speaker, it is sometimes better to cut out words from a sentence (depending on the context).
Therefore, it's necessary that other people help him.
My mother is the one who assists him.
When Ime and/ or my siblings are on the long vacation, we will go to work with myour parents.
Use ‘me’ instead of ‘I’ unless you are referring to someone else first; like “Harry and I” or if you are saying ‘I am’. You wouldnt say ‘I are’ or ‘I is’
Although sometimes, I'm so exhausted after going home, I still feel happy when we meet somclients who are very kind clients.
You shouldn’t use two connectives side by side, unless you are saying ‘but because’ or ‘and because’
Today's client gave us nine drink bottles of drinks and three bowls of red bean soup.
I think that ‘drink bottles’ sounds better, although ‘bottles of drink’ would be acceptable too!
Yesterday, my younger sister just complained that the refrigerator ofin our home didn't have any drinks, now the situation is totally different.
If you are talking in the past, of something that happened a while ago, you wouldn't say it ‘just’ happened.
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Very good blog! I think that you should work on perfecting your knowledge of tenses and grammar. Good job!
Today I didn't go to the library because I needed to assisthelp my parents with their works.
When I or my siblings or I are on thea long vacation, we will go to work with my parents.
AlEven though I am sometimes I'm sovery exhausted after going home, I still feel happy when we meet some very kind clients.
I think "even though" sounds better in this context.
Yesterday my younger sister justwas complaineding that the refrigerator of our home didn't have any drinks, now the situation is totally different.
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My father is an engineering technician. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He needs to move the heavy machine and prepares for many steps before work. He In english, to sound like a native speaker, it is sometimes better to cut out words from a sentence (depending on the context). He needs to move the heavy machines and prepare |
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Therefore, it's necessary that other people help him. This sentence has been marked as perfect! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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My mother is the one who assists him. This sentence has been marked as perfect! My mother is the one who usually assists him. |
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When I or my siblings are on the long vacation, we will go to work with my parents. When When Use ‘me’ instead of ‘I’ unless you are referring to someone else first; like “Harry and I” or if you are saying ‘I am’. You wouldnt say ‘I are’ or ‘I is’ When |
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Although sometimes I'm so exhausted after going home, I still feel happy when we meet some very kind clients.
I think "even though" sounds better in this context. Although You shouldn’t use two connectives side by side, unless you are saying ‘but because’ or ‘and because’ Although sometimes I'm so exhausted |
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Today's client gave us nine bottles of drinks and three bowls of red bean soup. Today's client gave us nine drink bottle I think that ‘drink bottles’ sounds better, although ‘bottles of drink’ would be acceptable too! This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Yesterday my younger sister just complained the refrigerator of our home didn't have any drinks, now the situation is totally different. Yesterday my younger sister Yesterday, my younger sister If you are talking in the past, of something that happened a while ago, you wouldn't say it ‘just’ happened.
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