July 25, 2021
Irrationality (pt.1)
Today I read an article in memory of Isaac Singer. The end of the article was interesting. Why do we still read Singer's crazy, evil, weird stories today? The reason is irrationality. Today's world is already too rational and too ordered compared to Singer's world. Algorithms are collecting information about us all the time, using data to learn everyone. This sense of security that comes with total reliance on machines that think they are always accurate has also robbed people of the ability to tolerate the irrational aspects of life that technology cannot answer. So much so that we feel helpless in the face of these problems, such as why do I work harder than others but don't get higher grades or get paid less than others. I'm on health management and dieting, why can't I get in shape, etc... In short, I am obviously a good person, but why do I have a bad time? The answer is actually very simple, because life is not exactly in accordance with rational science, cause and effect linear relationship development.
Irrationality (pt.1)
Today I read an article in memory of Isaac Singer.
Algorithms are collecting information about us all the time, using data to learn about everyone.
So much so that we feel helpless in the face of these problems, such as 'why do I work harder than others but don't get higher grades?' or 'why do I get paid less than others?'.
I think it sounds better putting the questions here in quotation marks.
'I'm on health management and dieting, so why can't I get into shape?', etc...
'Health management' sounds very formal here - it implies that you work in a hospital or in a government health ministry, for instance.
In short, 'I am obviously a good person, butso why do I have a bad time?'
'So' makes more sense then 'but' here.
If you were just saying 'I am obviously a good person, but I have a bad time', 'but' is fine, since there's a sharp contrast between those two facts.
But when you're asking why, 'so' makes more sense.
The answer is actually very simple, because life is not exactly in accordance with rational science, or the law of cause and effect linear relationship development.
'rational science, cause and effect linear relationship development.' - this whole section sounds long and awkward, like you've just put a bunch of random words in a row.
'Linear relationship development' especially sounds over complicated and confusing. I'm not sure what better word to use, but I think just leaving it at 'cause and effect' is OK.
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July 27, 2021
Thank you very much for the corrections!
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Write it on tm morning. |
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Irrationality (pt.1) This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Today I read an article in memory of Isaac Singer. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The end of the article was interesting. |
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Why do we still read Singer's crazy, evil, weird stories today? |
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The reason is irrationality. |
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Today's world is already too rational and too ordered compared to Singer's world. |
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Algorithms are collecting information about us all the time, using data to learn everyone. Algorithms are collecting information about us all the time, using data to learn about everyone. |
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This sense of security that comes with total reliance on machines that think they are always accurate has also robbed people of the ability to tolerate the irrational aspects of life that technology cannot answer. |
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So much so that we feel helpless in the face of these problems, such as why do I work harder than others but don't get higher grades or get paid less than others. So much so that we feel helpless in the face of these problems, such as 'why do I work harder than others but don't get higher grades?' or 'why do I get paid less than others?'. I think it sounds better putting the questions here in quotation marks. |
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I'm on health management and dieting, why can't I get in shape, etc... 'I'm 'Health management' sounds very formal here - it implies that you work in a hospital or in a government health ministry, for instance. |
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In short, I am obviously a good person, but why do I have a bad time? In short, 'I am obviously a good person, 'So' makes more sense then 'but' here. If you were just saying 'I am obviously a good person, but I have a bad time', 'but' is fine, since there's a sharp contrast between those two facts. But when you're asking why, 'so' makes more sense. |
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The answer is actually very simple, because life is not exactly in accordance with rational science, cause and effect linear relationship development. The answer is actually very simple, because life is not exactly in accordance with rational science 'rational science, cause and effect linear relationship development.' - this whole section sounds long and awkward, like you've just put a bunch of random words in a row. 'Linear relationship development' especially sounds over complicated and confusing. I'm not sure what better word to use, but I think just leaving it at 'cause and effect' is OK. |
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