Dec. 8, 2021
December 8th, 2021
There is a businessman and wealthy man in Japan named Yusaku Maezawa. He presented one million yen per person to 100 people in 2019. Then he presented one million yen per person to 1,000 people in 2020. He went to space with a Soyuz rocket today. He will stay in the ISS for 12 days and will be the first Japanese civilian to stay on the ISS.
<p>日本に前澤友作さんという実業家で大富豪がいます。彼は2019年に100人に1人あたり100万円をプレゼントしました。2020年には1000人に1人あたり100万円のプレゼントをしました。今日、彼はソユーズロケットで宇宙に行きました。彼はISSに12日間滞在する予定で、初めてISSに滞在する日本人の民間人になります。</p>
There is a businessman and wealthy businessman in Japan named Yusaku Maezawa.
If you say "a businessman and a wealthy man" it sounds like two people.
He presentedgave one million yen per person to 100 people in 2019.
"Presented" is also correct, and suggests a big ceremony. If there was no ceremony or you want to use simpler language, "gave" is the more obvious choice.
He went to space within a Soyuz rocket today.
"With" can also be correct, but "in" is more specific.
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Sounds like an interesting person!
Dec. 8, 2021
Thank you!
December 8th, 2021
There is a businessman and wealthy manwealthy entrepreneur in Japan named Yusaku Maezawa.
Alt: 「wealthy businessman」でもOK
Then he presendonated one million yen per person to 1,000 people in 2020.
He went to space with a Soyuz rocket today.
He will stay in the ISS for 12 days, and will be the first Japanese civilian to stay on the ISS.
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Nice job! Most of the corrections were stylistic
Dec. 8, 2021
Thank you!
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There is a businessman and wealthy man in Japan named Yusaku Maezawa. There is a Alt: 「wealthy businessman」でもOK There is a If you say "a businessman and a wealthy man" it sounds like two people. |
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He presented one million yen per person to 100 people in 2019. He "Presented" is also correct, and suggests a big ceremony. If there was no ceremony or you want to use simpler language, "gave" is the more obvious choice. |
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Then he presented one million yen per person to 1,000 people in 2020. Then he |
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He went to space with a Soyuz rocket today. This sentence has been marked as perfect! He went to space "With" can also be correct, but "in" is more specific. |
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He will stay in the ISS for 12 days and will be the first Japanese civilian to stay on the ISS. He will stay in the ISS for 12 days, and will be the first Japanese civilian to stay on the ISS. |
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