Dec. 6, 2021
December 6th, 2021
I wrote yesterday that I went to Shimogamo Shrine. I checked Twitter and found out that one of my followers also went to the shrine with her husband. When I was about to ride my bike home, she seemed to see me.
<p>昨日、下鴨神社へ行ったことについて書きました。ツイッターを見ていたら、フォロワーの一人も旦那さんと下鴨神社へ行ったようでした。私がバイクで帰ろうとしたときに、彼女は私を見ていたようです</p>
December 6th, 2021
I wrote yesterday that I went to Shimogamo Shrine.
I checked Twitter and found out(Today/Later on) I saw on Twitter that one of my followers also went to the shrine with her husband.
The correction the other person offered, while grammatically correct, makes the sentence imply that you checked Twitter _in direct relation to your visit_.
You didn't use any time indicators (today/later on) but they help to make the sentence more casual.
Beyond that, my correction more implies that you saw this incidentally and not went looking for it.
WApparently, she saw me when I was about to ride my bike home, she seemed to see (back) home.
The other correction you received is also correct, so I'm offering a different style.
"Apparently" works very well to denote new information. The back (in parentheses) is not necessary, but it makes the sentence have a slightly better feel to me.
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Coincidences are fun! Again, grammar and style are things you could improve. I highly recommend trying to check a synonym dictionary (also known as thesaurus) for some words, just to get a few more options or to affirm your choice of words.
Dec. 6, 2021
Thank you!
I checked Twitter, and found out that one of my followers also went to the shrine with her husband.
WIt seems she saw me when I was about to ride my bike home, she seemed to see me.
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I wrote yesterday that I went to Shimogamo Shrine. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I checked Twitter and found out that one of my followers also went to the shrine with her husband. I checked Twitter, and found out that one of my followers also went to the shrine with her husband.
The correction the other person offered, while grammatically correct, makes the sentence imply that you checked Twitter _in direct relation to your visit_. You didn't use any time indicators (today/later on) but they help to make the sentence more casual. Beyond that, my correction more implies that you saw this incidentally and not went looking for it. |
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When I was about to ride my bike home, she seemed to see me.
The other correction you received is also correct, so I'm offering a different style. "Apparently" works very well to denote new information. The back (in parentheses) is not necessary, but it makes the sentence have a slightly better feel to me. |
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