dDebate on private colleges and universities

TherA heated debate has been aroused a heated debate on whether private colleges and universities are benefitcial to our education or not.

From my point of view, bBefore airing my own opinion, I do think it's necessary to analyze this thorny issue from different perspectives before airing my opinion.

"I do think" and "from my point of view" are redundant, and having two different clauses to set off the sentence is something to be avoided.

To begin with, private colleges provide an opportunity for students who cannot enter public universities andto experience 3-yearthree years of learning life.

You could also put a comma after universities and write "allowing them" instead of "and." The original however sounds like you are referring to students who both cannot go to public universities and cannot experience three years of learning.

In addition, because of the 3three-year experiences, they also get the ticket to access to the bachelor's or Mmaster's degree.1s. What's more, if the student don't want to continue their studyies, they still will acquire a specific technique by 3-year studyskills from three-year programmes that will help them get a job after graduation.

Small numbers should generally be written out, unless you need to emphasize the quantity, like in a math problem.

You need an adverb like "still" or "nonetheless" in the second sentence, because presumably this is also something that can be acquired from going to university.

Although the explanation is rationalsensible, other people may explore this issue forom another angele.

We tend to describe people are rational overall, not so much specific arguments.

fFor one thing, the private colleges and universities are operated by private groups whom aim ato achieve high profits rather than quality of education quality.

"Whom" is used when the noun that precedes it is the object, not when it is the subject.

For another thing, the teacher's quality shouldmay also be concerned because of good resourcaffected by the available benefits offered. Public universities might be chosen for the public universities forossibility of a stable income and future.

"Concerned" has more the meaning of "is relevant to," which doesn't really produce a meaningful clause here.

I'm not sure if you meant that teacher quality is affected by benefits, but that interpretation made the most sense to me.

"Chose… for stable income and future" isn't complete in itself.

In conclusion, although it's very hard to arrive at an absolute conclusion on this issue, cConsidering these factors, I will assent to the former viewpoint because the defects of private education cannot obscure the virtues., although it's very hard to arrive at an absolute conclusion. No matter how bad the teacher quality or the education, those can be solved through the government's overviewsight.

The first sentence had too many clauses that set off the main content of the sentence.

However, if we don't have these private colleges, our society will lack professional technicians.

In addition, those students who cannot continue their studyies will enlarge the unstable factor of society, which might cause various social problems