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Death Valley is a mystical anomalous area in the valley of the Vilyui river located far in north-east Siberia, on a sparsely populated land where the Sakha people live. Sakha have always known that there are mysterious structures far in the tundra, which they called cauldrons. Hundreds and hundreds of years ago, they fell from the heaven with a roar and flame, and since then have slowly sunk into the permafrost. Some of them were the size of a big yurt, shaped like an upside-down cauldron, others much larger, with several levels going deep underground. During a hunt for fur animals, Sakha sometimes stayed overnight in them. It was much warmer inside than in the open air, the walls seemed to emit warmth, especially in multi-level structures, the deeper it was, the warmer it got. But those who spent more than one night there always got sick and died soon. In the middle of the 19th century, a Russian gold digger with a mate and a few Sakha guides roamed this area, looking to pan out sands at the small rivers flowing into Vilyuy. One evening they went out to the hilly area with sparse trees. Pointing at a small mound, the oldest guide said that they were to spend the night there. For the Russians, it looked like a kind of large bump, which are abundant in the local tundra. They usually are formed when the water accumulates under a thin layer of soil and freezes, creating a form of convex lens. But it was astonishing for them to see that its edge had risen above the ground and they could crawl under it to get inside. The whole object resembled an upside-down and slightly inclined bowl covered with soil and grass. During dinner, the guides told to the Russians some legends related to the “cauldrons”, as much as the both sides poor language skills allowed. They warned that in case of suffocation, headaches or nightmares they should get outside and sleep in the open air. But the guys slept well and started to examine their cauldron in the morning. It was made of metal, the hemispherical outer surface was rough, black, and covered with some kind of scale so strong that neither a knife nor an axe could leave any scratches on it. On the brim of the cauldron the metal was smooth, polished, silver colored. It glistened as if it had just been made, and its edge was so sharp, that the gold digger’s mate cut himself running his finger over it. They tried to break off a piece of metal from the edge of the cauldron, hoping that the metal was valuable and could be sold. Eventually they crashed the axe , but there was not a single scratch left on the shiny metal of the cauldron. During their further journey, the gold digger’s mate got sick and died, but he himself got to the town of Vilyuysk, where a government official responsible for public education in Eastern Siberia and enthusiast of exploring this region, wrote down this story from his words and made a sketch of the cauldron. There is also a sketch of multilevel "cauldron", made approximately at the same time, in the second half of the 19th century, according to the description of Sakha elders. Some Russian settler from the southern part of the region possessed an object taken by Sakha from one of the "cauldrons" and exchanged for alcohol. It was a metal object that could cut glass like butter, but it was lost later. Nowadays, or rather in the very beginning of 2000s, the Czech expedition tried to find the "cauldrons", but due to poor technical equipment and lack of funding after one season of searching abandoned this idea. Even today, this area remains completely wild and stretches for tens of thousands of square miles. Sakha people are not nomads any more, they are ruining themselves with drinking and gradually dying out. Most likely, there is no one left who knows the exact location of at least one of the "cauldrons". Apparently, this mystery will remain unsolved, as well as the mystery of the Tunguska event and many others.
Sakha have always known that there are mysterious structures far in the tundra, which they called "cauldrons".
But those who spent more than one night there always got sick and died soon after.
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Death Valley is a mystical anomalous area in the valley of the Vilyui river located far in north-east Siberia, on a sparsely populated land where the Sakha people live.
Hundreds and hundreds of years ago, they fell from the heaven with a roar and flame, and since then have slowly sunk into the permafrost.
Some of them were the size of a big yurt, shaped like an upside-down cauldron, while others were much larger, with several levels going deep underground.
During a hunt for fur animals, Sakha sometimes stayed overnight in them.
It was much warmer inside than in the open air, the walls seemed to emit warmth, and especially in multi-level structures, the deeper it was, the warmer it got.
But those who spent more than one night there always got sick and died soon.
In the middle of the 19th century, a Russian gold digger with a mate and a few Sakha guides roamed this area, looking to pan out sands at the small rivers flowing into Vilyuy.
One evening they went out to the hilly area with sparse trees.
Pointing at a small mound, the oldest guide said that they were to spend the night there.
For the Russians, it looked like a kind of large bump, which are abundant in the local tundra.
They usually are formed when the water accumulates under a thin layer of soil and freezes, creating a form of convex lens.
But it was astonishing for them to see that its edge had risen above the ground and they could crawl under it to get inside.
The whole object resembled an upside-down and slightly inclined bowl covered with soil and grass.
During dinner, the guides told to the Russians some legends related to the “"cauldrons”," to the Russians. They said as much as the both sidesir poor language skills allowed.
They warned that in case of suffocation, headaches or nightmares they should get outside and sleep in the open air.
But the guys slept well and started to examine their cauldron in the morning.
It was made of metal, t. The hemispherical outer surface was rough, black, and covered with some kind of scale so strong that neither a knife nor an axe could leave any scratches on it.
I didn't correct this but just so you know "axe" is the preferred spelling in British English and "ax" is the preferred spelling in American English. I'm American so I would write ax but if you are using British English, then this is fine.
On the brim of the cauldron, the metal was smooth, polished, silver -colored.
It glistened as if it had just been made, and its edge was so sharp, that the gold digger’s mate cut himself running his finger over it.
They tried to break off a piece of metal from the edge of the cauldron, hoping that the metal was valuable and could be sold.
Eventually they crashed the axe , but there was not a single scratch left on the shiny metal of the cauldron.
During their further journey, the gold digger’s mate got sick and died, but he himself got to the town of Vilyuysk, w. There a government official responsible for public education in Eastern Siberia and an enthusiast of exploring this region, wrote down this story from his words and made a sketch of the cauldron.
There is also a sketch of a multilevel "cauldron", made approximately at the same time, in the second half of the 19th century, according to the description of Sakha elders.
Some Russian settler from the southern part of the region possessed an object taken by Sakha from one of the "cauldrons" and exchanged it for alcohol.
It was a metal object that could cut glass like butter, but it was lost later.
Nowadays, or rather in the very beginning of 2000s, the Czech expedition tried to find the "cauldrons", but due to poor technical equipment and lack of funding after one season of searching, they abandoned this idea.
Even today, this area remains completely wild and. It stretches for tens of thousands of square miles.
Sakha people are not nomads any more, t. They are ruining themselves with drinking and gradually dying out.
Most likely, there is no one left who knows the exact location of at least one of the "cauldrons".
Apparently, this mystery will remain unsolved, as well as the mystery of the Tunguska event and many others.
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This was very detailed and well written. My main feedback is that you should break up your sentences more to make your writing more concise and the information more digestible.
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Death Valley is a mystical anomalous area in the valley of the Vilyui river located far in north-east Siberia, on a sparsely populated land where the Sakha people live. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Sakha have always known that there are mysterious structures far in the tundra, which they called cauldrons. Sakha have always known that there are mysterious structures far in the tundra, which they call |
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Hundreds and hundreds of years ago, they fell from the heaven with a roar and flame, and since then have slowly sunk into the permafrost. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Some of them were the size of a big yurt, shaped like an upside-down cauldron, others much larger, with several levels going deep underground. Some of them were the size of a big yurt, shaped like an upside-down cauldron, while others were much larger, with several levels going deep underground. |
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During a hunt for fur animals, Sakha sometimes stayed overnight in them. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was much warmer inside than in the open air, the walls seemed to emit warmth, especially in multi-level structures, the deeper it was, the warmer it got. It was much warmer inside than in the open air, the walls seemed to emit warmth, and especially in multi-level structures, the deeper it was, the warmer it got. |
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But those who spent more than one night there always got sick and died soon. This sentence has been marked as perfect! But those who spent more than one night there always got sick and died soon after. |
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In the middle of the 19th century, a Russian gold digger with a mate and a few Sakha guides roamed this area, looking to pan out sands at the small rivers flowing into Vilyuy. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One evening they went out to the hilly area with sparse trees. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Pointing at a small mound, the oldest guide said that they were to spend the night there. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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For the Russians, it looked like a kind of large bump, which are abundant in the local tundra. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They usually are formed when the water accumulates under a thin layer of soil and freezes, creating a form of convex lens. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But it was astonishing for them to see that its edge had risen above the ground and they could crawl under it to get inside. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The whole object resembled an upside-down and slightly inclined bowl covered with soil and grass. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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During dinner, the guides told to the Russians some legends related to the “cauldrons”, as much as the both sides poor language skills allowed. During dinner, the guides told |
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They warned that in case of suffocation, headaches or nightmares they should get outside and sleep in the open air. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But the guys slept well and started to examine their cauldron in the morning. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was made of metal, the hemispherical outer surface was rough, black, and covered with some kind of scale so strong that neither a knife nor an axe could leave any scratches on it. It was made of metal I didn't correct this but just so you know "axe" is the preferred spelling in British English and "ax" is the preferred spelling in American English. I'm American so I would write ax but if you are using British English, then this is fine. |
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On the brim of the cauldron the metal was smooth, polished, silver colored. On the brim of the cauldron, the metal was smooth, polished, silver |
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It glistened as if it had just been made, and its edge was so sharp, that the gold digger’s mate cut himself running his finger over it. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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They tried to break off a piece of metal from the edge of the cauldron, hoping that the metal was valuable and could be sold. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Eventually they crashed the axe , but there was not a single scratch left on the shiny metal of the cauldron. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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During their further journey, the gold digger’s mate got sick and died, but he himself got to the town of Vilyuysk, where a government official responsible for public education in Eastern Siberia and enthusiast of exploring this region, wrote down this story from his words and made a sketch of the cauldron. During their further journey, the gold digger’s mate got sick and died, but he himself got to the town of Vilyuysk |
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There is also a sketch of multilevel "cauldron", made approximately at the same time, in the second half of the 19th century, according to the description of Sakha elders. There is also a sketch of a multilevel "cauldron", made approximately at the same time, in the second half of the 19th century, according to the description of Sakha elders. |
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Some Russian settler from the southern part of the region possessed an object taken by Sakha from one of the "cauldrons" and exchanged for alcohol. Some Russian settler from the southern part of the region possessed an object taken by Sakha from one of the "cauldrons" and exchanged it for alcohol. |
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It was a metal object that could cut glass like butter, but it was lost later. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Nowadays, or rather in the very beginning of 2000s, the Czech expedition tried to find the "cauldrons", but due to poor technical equipment and lack of funding after one season of searching abandoned this idea. Nowadays, or rather in the very beginning of 2000s, the Czech expedition tried to find the "cauldrons", but due to poor technical equipment and lack of funding after one season of searching, they abandoned this idea. |
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Even today, this area remains completely wild and stretches for tens of thousands of square miles. Even today, this area remains completely wild |
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Sakha people are not nomads any more, they are ruining themselves with drinking and gradually dying out. Sakha people are not nomads any |
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Most likely, there is no one left who knows the exact location of at least one of the "cauldrons". This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Apparently, this mystery will remain unsolved, as well as the mystery of the Tunguska event and many others. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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