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Ziez

Oct. 22, 2023

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Day five: My life in Cyprus - part two

My co-workers from different countries and at work we use English to communicate with each other. Most of my workmates who live in Cyprus speak Russian so even when we hang out we talk in our native language. If my company obliged as to work at the office I would be able to become friends with 3 local colleagues. I could get both English and Greek practice and discover many new places to hang out.
But visiting the office isn't necessary so many people prefer to work at home. I'm not a morning person I don't like to wake up early and the way to work pisses me off.
For that reason, my live communication in any language is quite limited. Once, I realized that I didn't say a word for 3 days.
I do meet with workmates but they are married and have kids so if they go out it is rare and won't be long. It's completely true that after marriage people disappear.
Once, I was in a decade mood after a hard week so when a colleague wrote in a group chat offer to go to a bar in the evening I agreed. I'm not a fan of alcohol so I thought one or two cocktails would be enough. But it appears that I started to enjoy the evening and cocktails and company. I was about suggest to drinking all night when after a few hours and two or three cocktails one of them said "Well, asking for a bill and going home?". I was disappointed but there wasn't much choice.
To be honest there is only one active and lonely female we spend most of our weekends together. Usually, we have breakfast somewhere in the city center, then some shopping or strolling around mindlessly.

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Day fFive: My life in Cyprus - pPart tTwo

My co-workers are all from different countries, and at work, we use English to communicate with each other.

Most of my workmates who live in Cyprus speak Russian, so even when we hang out we talk in our native language.

If my company obligrequired aus to work at the office, I would be able to become friends with 3 local colleagues.

I could getpractice both English and Greek practice and discover many new places to hang out.

But visiting the office isn't necessary so many people prefer to work at home.

I'm not a morning person. I don't like to wake up early and the way to workraditional work life pisses me off.

"Pisses me off" is really strong, and not professional. It's a little crass and informal. For writing about work, maybe use "really annoys me" or "gets on my nerves" instead.

For that reason, my livface-to-face communication in any language is quite limited.

Once, I realized that I dihadn't sayid a word for 3 days.

I do meet with workmates, but they are married and have kids so if they go out it is rare and wthey don't bestay long.

It's completely true twhat people say: after marriage people disappear.

Or just "After marriage people disappear."

Once, I was in a decade(bad? sad?) mood after a hard week, so when a colleague wrote in a group chat offering to go to a bar in thethat evening, I agreed.

Decade doesn't make sense here.

I'm not a fan of alcohol so I thought one or two cocktails would be enough.

But it appearI guess that I started to enjoy the evening and cocktails and company.

It appears is more for what you see / notice, not what you do.

I was about to suggest to drinking all night, when after a few hours, and two or three cocktails, one of them said "Well, should we asking for athe bill and (going / head) home?".

I was disappointed but there wasn't muchI didn't have much (of a) choice.

To be honest, there is only one active and lonely femalewoman (in my office) who enjoys going out a lot, so we spend most of our weekends together.

Female is usually kind of derogatory. Try woman instead.

Usually, we have breakfast somewhere in the city center, then some shopping or strolling around mindlessly.

Day five: My life in Cyprus - part two

My co-workers are from different countries, and at work, we use English to communicate with each other.

No need to hyphenate coworkers.
Be aware of comma usages (between two independent clauses joined by a coordinating conjunction, after a prepositional phrase, etc)

Most of my workmates who live in Cyprus speak Russian, so even when we hang out, we talk in our native language.

If my company had obliged aus to work at thein office, I would behave been able to become friends with 3three local colleagues.

unlikely situation: If ... past perfect, ... past conditional
https://libguides.hull.ac.uk/writing/numbers#:~:text=Basic%20numbers,use%20words%20rather%20than%20numerals.

I could gethave gotten both English and Greek practice and discover many new places to hang out.

ButHowever, since visiting the office isn't necessary, so many people prefer to work at home.

never start a sentence with "but"

I'm not a morning person, so I don't like to wake up early, and the way/commute to work pisses me off.

For that reason, my live communicationTherefore/Consequently, my live practice in any language is quite limited.

Once, I realized that I didn't say a word for 3 days.

I do meet with workmates, but they are married and have kids, so if they go out, it is rare and wouldn't be long.

Conditional tense here, not future

It's completely true that after marriage, people disappear.

Once, I was in a [decade] horrible mood after a hard week, so when a colleague wrote in a group chat offering to go to a bar in the evening, I agreed.

decade = 10 years
you cannot be in a "decade" mood, and I can't guess which adjective you were trying to use :(

I'm not a fan of alcohol, so I thought one or two cocktails would be enough.

ButNonetheless, it appearsed that I started to enjoy the evening and, the cocktails, and the company.

past tense

I was about suggest to drinking all night when after a few hours and two or three cocktails, one of them said, "Well, asking for athe bill and going home?".

to + infinitive
gerund (-ing tense) never goes with a "to"
asking for "the" bill because it's not ANY bill
no punctuation after quote

I was disappointed, but there wasn't muchany choice.

much works too but any is better

To be honest, there is only one [active] and lonely female we spend most of our weekends togetherwoman with whom I spend most of my time during the weekends.

Here the "we" is not clear because I'm not sure if you're referring to your company friends, or you and the woman
also, don't refer to women as "females"
What is an "active" female?

Usually, we have breakfast somewhere in the city center, thenfollowed by some shopping or mindless strolling around mindlessly.

parallelism

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Good job on this piece! Remember to put the commas where they are needed and also make sure the verb tenses are correct, ie. hypotheticals need to be with conditional/past conditional, if you are recounting something that has already happened, you need to use one of the past tenses

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sylvanas

Oct. 22, 2023

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I can't edit these corrections but there are two errors in my corrections:
- However, since visiting the office isn't necessary, many people prefer to work at home.
- I could have gotten both English and Greek practice and discovered many new places to hang out.

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Ziez

Oct. 23, 2023

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Thank you so much! Active female makes me laugh, it sounds like some kind of animal :D

Yeah, commas confused me even in Russian.
By decade I meant decadent, but I guess it is not a common word to describe depression or strong sadness.

Isn't it okay to use figures in the text?
This sentence - I would have been able to become friends with 3 local colleagues.

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sylvanas

Oct. 24, 2023

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It's fine to use numbers in casual text but usually any number below ten, we use the English words (two dogs, two women, etc)
Decadent means more like "degenerate" or having low morals; a person could be said to be decadent if he visits brothels every day, ie. a decadent lifestyle. For moods, strong sadness or depression: depressive, depressed, desolate, despondent
For the commas: if it's a complete sentence by itself, you need a comma. After a prepositional phrase or another type of phrasal structure, you also need to add a comma.
https://www.brandeis.edu/writing-program/resources/students/academic/style-grammar/comma-rules.html#:~:text=Writing%20Resources,-Home%20%2F%20Resources%20for&text=Use%20commas%20after%20introductory%20a,the%20meaning%20of%20the%20sentence.

Day five: My life in Cyprus - part two


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Day fFive: My life in Cyprus - pPart tTwo

My co-workers from different countries and at work we use English to communicate with each other.


My co-workers are from different countries, and at work, we use English to communicate with each other.

No need to hyphenate coworkers. Be aware of comma usages (between two independent clauses joined by a coordinating conjunction, after a prepositional phrase, etc)

My co-workers are all from different countries, and at work, we use English to communicate with each other.

Most of my workmates who live in Cyprus speak Russian so even when we hang out we talk in our native language.


Most of my workmates who live in Cyprus speak Russian, so even when we hang out, we talk in our native language.

Most of my workmates who live in Cyprus speak Russian, so even when we hang out we talk in our native language.

If my company obliged as to work at the office I would be able to become friends with 3 local colleagues.


If my company had obliged aus to work at thein office, I would behave been able to become friends with 3three local colleagues.

unlikely situation: If ... past perfect, ... past conditional https://libguides.hull.ac.uk/writing/numbers#:~:text=Basic%20numbers,use%20words%20rather%20than%20numerals.

If my company obligrequired aus to work at the office, I would be able to become friends with 3 local colleagues.

I could get both English and Greek practice and discover many new places to hang out.


I could gethave gotten both English and Greek practice and discover many new places to hang out.

I could getpractice both English and Greek practice and discover many new places to hang out.

But visiting the office isn't necessary so many people prefer to work at home.


ButHowever, since visiting the office isn't necessary, so many people prefer to work at home.

never start a sentence with "but"

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I'm not a morning person I don't like to wake up early and the way to work pisses me off.


I'm not a morning person, so I don't like to wake up early, and the way/commute to work pisses me off.

I'm not a morning person. I don't like to wake up early and the way to workraditional work life pisses me off.

"Pisses me off" is really strong, and not professional. It's a little crass and informal. For writing about work, maybe use "really annoys me" or "gets on my nerves" instead.

For that reason, my live communication in any language is quite limited.


For that reason, my live communicationTherefore/Consequently, my live practice in any language is quite limited.

For that reason, my livface-to-face communication in any language is quite limited.

Once, I realized that I didn't say a word for 3 days.


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Once, I realized that I dihadn't sayid a word for 3 days.

I do meet with workmates but they are married and have kids so if they go out it is rare and won't be long.


I do meet with workmates, but they are married and have kids, so if they go out, it is rare and wouldn't be long.

Conditional tense here, not future

I do meet with workmates, but they are married and have kids so if they go out it is rare and wthey don't bestay long.

It's completely true that after marriage people disappear.


It's completely true that after marriage, people disappear.

It's completely true twhat people say: after marriage people disappear.

Or just "After marriage people disappear."

Once, I was in a decade mood after a hard week so when a colleague wrote in a group chat offer to go to a bar in the evening I agreed.


Once, I was in a [decade] horrible mood after a hard week, so when a colleague wrote in a group chat offering to go to a bar in the evening, I agreed.

decade = 10 years you cannot be in a "decade" mood, and I can't guess which adjective you were trying to use :(

Once, I was in a decade(bad? sad?) mood after a hard week, so when a colleague wrote in a group chat offering to go to a bar in thethat evening, I agreed.

Decade doesn't make sense here.

I'm not a fan of alcohol so I thought one or two cocktails would be enough.


I'm not a fan of alcohol, so I thought one or two cocktails would be enough.

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But it appears that I started to enjoy the evening and cocktails and company.


ButNonetheless, it appearsed that I started to enjoy the evening and, the cocktails, and the company.

past tense

But it appearI guess that I started to enjoy the evening and cocktails and company.

It appears is more for what you see / notice, not what you do.

I was about suggest to drinking all night when after a few hours and two or three cocktails one of them said "Well, asking for a bill and going home?".


I was about suggest to drinking all night when after a few hours and two or three cocktails, one of them said, "Well, asking for athe bill and going home?".

to + infinitive gerund (-ing tense) never goes with a "to" asking for "the" bill because it's not ANY bill no punctuation after quote

I was about to suggest to drinking all night, when after a few hours, and two or three cocktails, one of them said "Well, should we asking for athe bill and (going / head) home?".

I was disappointed but there wasn't much choice.


I was disappointed, but there wasn't muchany choice.

much works too but any is better

I was disappointed but there wasn't muchI didn't have much (of a) choice.

To be honest there is only one active and lonely female we spend most of our weekends together.


To be honest, there is only one [active] and lonely female we spend most of our weekends togetherwoman with whom I spend most of my time during the weekends.

Here the "we" is not clear because I'm not sure if you're referring to your company friends, or you and the woman also, don't refer to women as "females" What is an "active" female?

To be honest, there is only one active and lonely femalewoman (in my office) who enjoys going out a lot, so we spend most of our weekends together.

Female is usually kind of derogatory. Try woman instead.

Usually, we have breakfast somewhere in the city center, then some shopping or strolling around mindlessly.


Usually, we have breakfast somewhere in the city center, thenfollowed by some shopping or mindless strolling around mindlessly.

parallelism

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