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Day 8 Journaling

Hi.

Today I had a really good day. I did my homework in the morning to have more time with my family during the day. After breakfast, I took a bath for 1 or 2 hours. I was near to falling asleep :):)
After that, I helped my grandfather because he don't know how to use well his computer! Then we had lunch and after, we went into the city to do the shopping. We bought a display for my grandfather and we went to a museum of stained glass. I really enjoyed my day. Now I have to do my homework so see you soon and thanks for the corrections.

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Day 8 Journaling

Hi.

Today I had a really good day.

I did my homework in the morning to have more time with my family during the day.

After breakfast, I took a bath for 1 or 2 hours.

I was nearclose to falling asleep :):)

This is more natural in the US.

After that, I helped my grandfather because he doesn't know how to use well his computer!

This sounds more natural in the US.

Then we had lunch and after, we went into the city to do thego shopping.

This sounds more natural in the US.

We bought a display for my grandfather and we went to a museum of stained glass museum.

I really enjoyed my day.

Now I have to do my homework so see you soon and thanks for the corrections.

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Good work! Another fun day!

arthur12034578990875432355's avatar
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Thanks for the correction !!! :)

nefare's avatar
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I was near toalmost faelling asleep :):).

Just my opinion that this part sounds more natural like this

After that, I helped my grandfather because he doesn't know how to use well his computer well!

Then we had lunch, and after,wards we went into the city to do theour shopping.

For me, this sounds better

Now I have to do my homework, so see you soon and thanks for the corrections.

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Great job

arthur12034578990875432355's avatar
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Thanks : )

ashlynn1257's avatar
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Hi.

Today I had a really good day.

I did my homework in the morning toso I could have more time with my family during the day.

After breakfast, I took a bath for 1 or 2 hours.

I was near toly faelling asleep :):)

After that, I helped my grandfather because he doidn't know how to use well his computer well!

Then we had lunch and after, that we went into the city to do thsome shopping.

We bought a display for my grandfather and we went to a museum of stained glass museum.

I really enjoyed my day.

Now I have to do my homework, so see you soon and thanks for the corrections.

arthur12034578990875432355's avatar
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Thanks for the correction : )

Day 8 Journaling

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Today I had a really good day.

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I did my homework in the morning to have more time with my family during the day.

I did my homework in the morning toso I could have more time with my family during the day.

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After breakfast, I took a bath for 1 or 2 hours.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I was near to falling asleep :):)

I was near toly faelling asleep :):)

I was near toalmost faelling asleep :):).

Just my opinion that this part sounds more natural like this

I was nearclose to falling asleep :):)

This is more natural in the US.

After that, I helped my grandfather because he don't know how to use well his computer!

After that, I helped my grandfather because he doidn't know how to use well his computer well!

After that, I helped my grandfather because he doesn't know how to use well his computer well!

After that, I helped my grandfather because he doesn't know how to use well his computer!

This sounds more natural in the US.

Then we had lunch and after, we went into the city to do the shopping.

Then we had lunch and after, that we went into the city to do thsome shopping.

Then we had lunch, and after,wards we went into the city to do theour shopping.

For me, this sounds better

Then we had lunch and after, we went into the city to do thego shopping.

This sounds more natural in the US.

We bought a display for my grandfather and we went to a museum of stained glass.

We bought a display for my grandfather and we went to a museum of stained glass museum.

We bought a display for my grandfather and we went to a museum of stained glass museum.

I really enjoyed my day.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Now I have to do my homework so see you soon and thanks for the corrections.

Now I have to do my homework, so see you soon and thanks for the corrections.

Now I have to do my homework, so see you soon and thanks for the corrections.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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