Day 6 Journaling

Hi,

Today, I got up early in the morning because I had to do my homework. After that, I took breakfast with my family, and we went to the cinema to watch a movie called "The Assala family". I found this movie really interesting. That's the story of a little boy who really enjoys photography and it's going to take a big place in his life and the life of his family. He became famous with an album where he put photos of himself and his family.
After watching this movie, I had lunch with my family and we went out for a walk. Now, I'm writing to you.
Thank you so much for the corrections!

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Day 6 Journaling

Hi,

Today, I got up early in the morning because I had to do my homework.

After that, I tookhad breakfast with my family, and we went to the cinema to watch a movie called "The Assala fFamily".

That'It is the story of a little boy who really enjoys photography and it's going to take a big placehow becomes important in his life and the life of his family.

I changed the wording to be more natural, but I tried to keep it true to your intention.

He became famous with an album where he putfilled with photos of himself and his family and him.

Your version was not wrong, but "filled with" is a more specific term related to photo albums. The switch to "his family and him." is a nuance thing. The change makes the focus "his family" instead of just "him", I am assuming most of the pictures are of the family and him together.

Thank you very much!

Day 6 Journaling

Hi,

Today, I got up early in the morning because I had to do my homework.

After that, I tookate breakfast with my family, and then we went to the cinema to watch a movie called "_The Assala fFamily"_.

In the US, we "eat breakfast with [someone]."

I found this movie really interesting.

ThaIt's the story of a little boy who really enjoys photography and it'so photography is going to take a big place in his life ands well as the life of his family.

He became famous with an album where he put photos of himself andwith his family.

After watching this movie, I had lunch with my family and we went out for a walk.

Now, I'm writing to you.

Thank you so much for the corrections!

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What a nice day! Good work!

Thanks for your corrections : )

Day 6 Journaling

Hi,

Today, I got up early in the morning because I had to do my homework.

After that, I tookhad breakfast with my family, and we went to the cinema to watch a movie called "The Assala family".

I found this movie really interesting.

ThaIt's the story ofabout a little boy who really enjoys photography and it's going to take a big place in his life and the life of his family.

if you want to keep the original, you can say 'It's the story of...'

He became famous withdue to an album where he put photos of himself and his family.

After watching this movie, I had lunch with my family and we went out for a walk.

Now, I'm writing to you.

Thank you so much for the corrections!

Feedback

Wonderful! :))

Thanks

Day 6 Journaling


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Hi,


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Today, I got up early in the morning because I had to do my homework.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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After that, I took breakfast with my family, and we went to the cinema to watch a movie called "The Assala family".


After that, I tookhad breakfast with my family, and we went to the cinema to watch a movie called "The Assala family".

After that, I tookate breakfast with my family, and then we went to the cinema to watch a movie called "_The Assala fFamily"_.

In the US, we "eat breakfast with [someone]."

After that, I tookhad breakfast with my family, and we went to the cinema to watch a movie called "The Assala fFamily".

I found this movie really interesting.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

That's the story of a little boy who really enjoys photography and it's going to take a big place in his life and the life of his family.


ThaIt's the story ofabout a little boy who really enjoys photography and it's going to take a big place in his life and the life of his family.

if you want to keep the original, you can say 'It's the story of...'

ThaIt's the story of a little boy who really enjoys photography and it'so photography is going to take a big place in his life ands well as the life of his family.

That'It is the story of a little boy who really enjoys photography and it's going to take a big placehow becomes important in his life and the life of his family.

I changed the wording to be more natural, but I tried to keep it true to your intention.

He became famous with an album where he put photos of himself and his family.


He became famous withdue to an album where he put photos of himself and his family.

He became famous with an album where he put photos of himself andwith his family.

He became famous with an album where he putfilled with photos of himself and his family and him.

Your version was not wrong, but "filled with" is a more specific term related to photo albums. The switch to "his family and him." is a nuance thing. The change makes the focus "his family" instead of just "him", I am assuming most of the pictures are of the family and him together.

After watching this movie, I had lunch with my family and we went out for a walk.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Now, I'm writing to you.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Thank you so much for the corrections!


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