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Day 43 of My English Challenge

I haven't felt good this week. Right now I'm stressed, melancholic and my heart is broke. I'm the kind of person who can't cry, I am only able to cry when I try hard and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).
Anyways,I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, tomorrow I'm going to train chest and arms. I also need to start studying maths, I need to study at least 2 hours per day. However, I'll try to study math 3 or 4 hours. I started writing this poem in my head. It's not finished yet, but I wanted to share it. Tell me if you have any suggestions.

It doesn't matter if outside is cold
If the rain soak us
If the wind threw our umbrella up in the air
Or if the Jacaranda trees don't bloom
My love for you is fresh
Like spring

Thanks for reading!!!

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Day 43 of My English Challenge

I haven't felt good this week.

I'm the kind of person who can't cry, I am only able to cry when I try hard and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

Anyways,I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow I'm going to train chest and arms.

I also need to start studying maths, I need to study at least 2 hours per day.

However, I'll try to study math for 3 or 4 hours.

I started writing this poem in my head.

It's not finished yet, but I wanted to share it.

Tell me if you have any suggestions.

It doesn't matter if outside is cold

If the rain soaks us

If the wind threw our umbrella up in the air

Or if the Jacaranda trees don't bloom

My love for you is fresh

Like spring

Thanks for reading!!!

Feedback

Well written! I'm sorry to hear that you're stressed. If you'd like to talk about it, let me know. The poem is beautiful, by the way! I relate a lot to it. Don't push yourself too much. :)

Day 43 of My English Challenge

I haven't felt good this week.

Right now I'm stressed, melancholic and and sad because my heart is broken.

残念!お大事に!

I'm the kind of person who can't cry,. I am only able to cry when I try hard and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

Anyways, I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow I'm going to train chest and arms.

I also need to start studying maths,. I need to study at least 2 hours per day.

In the US, we just use "math."

However, I'll try to study math for 3 or 4 hours, however.

I started writing this poem in my head.

It's not finished yet, but I wanted to share it.

TPlease tell me if you have any suggestions.

It doesn't matter if outside is coldit's cold outside

If the rain soaks us

If the wind threwows our umbrellas up in the air

Or if the Jacaranda trees don't bloom

My love for you is fresh

Like sSpring

きれい!

Thanks for reading!!!

Feedback

上手に書けています。Fernanhaikuさんはいい人だと思います。やまない雨はないんですよ。落ち込んでいないで元気を出しましょう。

Day 43 of My English Challenge

I haven't felt good this week.

Right now I'm stressed, melancholic, and my heart is broken.

I'm the kind of person who can't cry,. I am only able to cry when I try hard to and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

Anyways, I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow I'm going to train my chest and arms.

I also need to start studying maths, I need to study at least 2 hours per day.

However, I'll try to study math for 3 or 4 hours.

I started writing this poem in my head.

It's not finished yet, but I wanted to share it.

Tell me if you have any suggestions.

It doesn't matter if outsideit is cold outside

If the rain soaks us

If the wind threw our umbrellas up in the air

Or if the Jacaranda trees don't bloom

My love for you is fresh

Like spring

Thanks for reading!!!

Feedback

Good job! I'm sorry that you aren't feeling well. I hope you feel better soon. I liked your poem too, it's nice. Good luck with everything you're doing!

Day 43 of My English Challenge

I haven't felt good this week.

Right now I'm stressed, melancholic and my heart is broken.

Oh no

I'm the kind of person who can't cry,. I amcan only able to cry when I try hard andor when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

This looks more natural for me

Anyways, I started exercising this week and I'll try to do iteven better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow, I'm going to train my chest and arms.

I also need to start studying maths,; I need to study at least 2 hours per day.

One note here - in English, we say either "math" if you are US/Canada or "maths" in the rest of the world. Both are correct, but in your post you first say maths and later say math, so you need to stick to your choice.

However, I'll try to study mathfor 3 or 4 hours.

Same note as above for math/maths, but in this case I would omit the word entirely for redundancy's sake since we already know you are talking about math from the previous sentence

I started writing this poem in my head.

It's not finished yet, but I wanted to share it.

Tell me if you have any suggestions.

It doesn't matter if outside is coldit's cold outside

If the rain soaks us

If the wind threwows our umbrella up in the air

Or if the Jacaranda trees don't bloom

My love for you is fresh

Like spring

Thanks for reading!!!

Feedback

Great job. I think it's very healthy to maintain a creative activity, such as poetry. I hope you feel better soon!

Day 43 of My English Challenge

I haven't felt good this week.

Right now I'm stressed, and melancholic and m. My heart is broke.n


I'm the kind of person who can't cry,. I am only able to cry when I try hard and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

It technically doesn’t look incorrect, but stylistically looks better with a period! :)

Anyways, I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow I'm going to train chest and arms.

Same here with a period over a comma! It helps it feel like the sentence doesn’t run on too long

I also need to start studying maths, I need to study at least 2 hours per day.

However, I'll try to study math for 3 or 4 hours.

I started writing this poem in my head.

It's not finished yet, but I wanted to share it.

Tell me if you have any suggestions.

It doesn't matter if outside is cold

If the rain soaks us

If the wind threw our umbrella up in the air

Or if the Jacaranda trees don't bloom

My love for you is fresh

Like spring

Thanks for reading!!!

Feedback

I love the poem!! :D Hope your stress eases soon 💚

Day 43 of My English Challenge


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I haven't felt good this week.


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Right now I'm stressed, melancholic and my heart is broke.


Right now I'm stressed, and melancholic and m. My heart is broke.n

Right now I'm stressed, melancholic and my heart is broken.

Oh no

Right now I'm stressed, melancholic, and my heart is broken.

Right now I'm stressed, melancholic and and sad because my heart is broken.

残念!お大事に!

I'm the kind of person who can't cry, I am only able to cry when I try hard and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).


I'm the kind of person who can't cry,. I am only able to cry when I try hard and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

It technically doesn’t look incorrect, but stylistically looks better with a period! :)

I'm the kind of person who can't cry,. I amcan only able to cry when I try hard andor when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

This looks more natural for me

I'm the kind of person who can't cry,. I am only able to cry when I try hard to and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

I'm the kind of person who can't cry,. I am only able to cry when I try hard and when I watch sad movies (hahaha).

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Anyways,I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, tomorrow I'm going to train chest and arms.


Anyways, I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow I'm going to train chest and arms.

Same here with a period over a comma! It helps it feel like the sentence doesn’t run on too long

Anyways, I started exercising this week and I'll try to do iteven better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow, I'm going to train my chest and arms.

Anyways, I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow I'm going to train my chest and arms.

Anyways, I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow I'm going to train chest and arms.

Anyways,I started exercising this week and I'll try to do it better tomorrow, t. Tomorrow I'm going to train chest and arms.

I also need to start studying maths, I need to study at least 2 hours per day.


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I also need to start studying maths,; I need to study at least 2 hours per day.

One note here - in English, we say either "math" if you are US/Canada or "maths" in the rest of the world. Both are correct, but in your post you first say maths and later say math, so you need to stick to your choice.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

I also need to start studying maths,. I need to study at least 2 hours per day.

In the US, we just use "math."

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However, I'll try to study math 3 or 4 hours.


However, I'll try to study math for 3 or 4 hours.

However, I'll try to study mathfor 3 or 4 hours.

Same note as above for math/maths, but in this case I would omit the word entirely for redundancy's sake since we already know you are talking about math from the previous sentence

However, I'll try to study math for 3 or 4 hours.

However, I'll try to study math for 3 or 4 hours, however.

However, I'll try to study math for 3 or 4 hours.

I started writing this poem in my head.


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It's not finished yet, but I wanted to share it.


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Tell me if you have any suggestions.


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TPlease tell me if you have any suggestions.

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It doesn't matter if outside is cold


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It doesn't matter if outside is coldit's cold outside

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If the rain soak us


If the rain soaks us

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If the rain soaks us

If the wind threw our umbrella up in the air


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If the wind threwows our umbrella up in the air

If the wind threw our umbrellas up in the air

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Or if the Jacaranda trees don't bloom


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My love for you is fresh


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Like spring


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Like sSpring

きれい!

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Thanks for reading!!!


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