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Day 3 of My English Challenge

I would like to write a novel, I have many ideas but I would like to start with something easy. One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes and he writes his experience, and the why he started to smoke, with poetry. The story would be entirely written with poetry, something like The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri. The following poem, that I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and I just translated it by myself into English. It's a tanka of summer:

I count comets
Four, five, six and seven stars
Then I close my eyes
And I ask the same wish
That you find happiness
Wherever you are.

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Day 3 of My English Challenge

I would like to write a novel, I have many ideas but I would like to start with something easy.

One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes and h. He writes about his experiences, and the why he started to smoke, with using poetry.

The sentence is a run on sentence and should be broken into at least two sentences. Experience needs to pluralized as I am sure he has more than 1. Using 'with poetry' sounds ackward

The entire story would be entirely written with poetry, something like The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri.

Just sounds better moving entirely ahead of story.

The following poem, that I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and I just translated it by myself into English.

'by myself' is repetitive and does not need to be used,

It's a tanka ofor summer:

If you say 'of summer', you make it sound like the poem is made out of summer, which would be impossible

I count comets

Four, five, six and seven stars

Then I close my eyes

And I ask the same wish

That you find happiness

Wherever you are.

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Muy bien.

Day 3 of My English Challenge

I would like to write a novel, so I have many ideas but I would like to start with something easy.

Using a conjunction like "so" makes the sentence flow better.

A novel - yay!

One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes andso he writes about his experience, and thebout why he started to smoke, with poetry.

That's a way cool idea.

The story would be entirely written with poetry, something like The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri.

The following poem, thatwhich I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and I just translated it by myself into English.

It's a tanka of summer:

I count comets

Four, five, six and seven stars

Then I close my eyes

And I ask the same wish

That you find happiness

Wherever you are.

Feedback

oh, that's beautiful! Thank you for sharing it with us! I always enjoy your poetry.

Day 3 of My English Challenge

I would like to write a novel,. I have many ideas, but I would like to start with something easy.

Punctuation is one of the most subjective aspects of language. To me, this feels most correct, but your original sentence wasn't particularly wrong, either.

One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes and he about writes his experiences, and the why he started to smoke, with poetry.

The story would be entirely written with poetry, something like The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri.

The following poem, that I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and I just translated it by myself into English.

It's a tanka of summer:

I count comets

Four, five, six and seven stars

Then I close my eyes

And I ask the same wish

That you find happiness

Wherever you are.

Feedback

Good writing! Your idea for a novel sounds fascinating!

I would like to write a novel,. I have many ideas but I would like to start with something easy.

One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes and h. He writes his experience, and the reason why he started to smoke, within poetry.

The story would be entirely written within poetry, something like The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri.

The following poem, is a tanka poem that I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and. I just translated it by myself into English.

I count comets

Four, five, six and seven stars

Then I close my eyes

And I ask the same wish

That you find happiness

Wherever you are.

Feedback

Good job! Your idea sounds great.

Day 3 of My English Challenge


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I would like to write a novel, I have many ideas but I would like to start with something easy.


I would like to write a novel,. I have many ideas but I would like to start with something easy.

I would like to write a novel,. I have many ideas, but I would like to start with something easy.

Punctuation is one of the most subjective aspects of language. To me, this feels most correct, but your original sentence wasn't particularly wrong, either.

I would like to write a novel, so I have many ideas but I would like to start with something easy.

Using a conjunction like "so" makes the sentence flow better. A novel - yay!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes and he writes his experience, and the why he started to smoke, with poetry.


One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes and h. He writes his experience, and the reason why he started to smoke, within poetry.

One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes and he about writes his experiences, and the why he started to smoke, with poetry.

One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes andso he writes about his experience, and thebout why he started to smoke, with poetry.

That's a way cool idea.

One of these ideas is about a boy who wants to overcome his addiction to cigarettes and h. He writes about his experiences, and the why he started to smoke, with using poetry.

The sentence is a run on sentence and should be broken into at least two sentences. Experience needs to pluralized as I am sure he has more than 1. Using 'with poetry' sounds ackward

The story would be entirely written with poetry, something like The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri.


The story would be entirely written within poetry, something like The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri.

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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The entire story would be entirely written with poetry, something like The Divine Comedy by Dante Alighieri.

Just sounds better moving entirely ahead of story.

The following poem, that I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and I just translated it by myself into English.


The following poem, is a tanka poem that I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and. I just translated it by myself into English.

The following poem, that I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and I just translated it by myself into English.

The following poem, thatwhich I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and I just translated it by myself into English.

The following poem, that I wrote in Spanish a long time ago, it's a tanka poem and I just translated it by myself into English.

'by myself' is repetitive and does not need to be used,

It's a tanka of summer:


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It's a tanka ofor summer:

If you say 'of summer', you make it sound like the poem is made out of summer, which would be impossible

I count comets


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Four, five, six and seven stars


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Then I close my eyes


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And I ask the same wish


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That you find happiness


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Wherever you are.


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