Dec. 4, 2024
Day 26
Due to the increase of the greenhouse effect, the average temperature has been increased and the Arctic ice has been melted, which have been caused the rising of sea level. Therefore, polar bears are facing with the risk of extinction because they have been lost their habitat. Moreover, because of the rising of sea level, it is predicted that several coastal countries might be submerged. Several natural disasters such as storms, droughts, floods, etc. appear more and more because of the greenhouse effect and the climate change, which cause damages to property and life. And also due to the climate change, the ecosystems of many creatures on the land and under the sea have been collapsed.
Vì sự gia tăng của hiệu ứng nhà kính, nhiệt độ bình quân tăng và băng Bắc Cực tan ra mực nước biển đang dâng cao. Vì vậy gấu Bắc Cực vì bị mất đi nơi sinh sống mà đang đối mặt với nguy cơ tuyệt chủng. Không những thế sau này vì mặt nước biển dâng cao dự đoán là các quốc gia ven biển có bị nhấn chìm. Vì hiệu ứng nhà kính bão, hạn hán, lũ lụt,... thiên tai do biến đổi khí hậu cực đoan xuất hiện nhiều nên đang gây ra thiệt hại về tài sản và tính mạng. Và do biến đổi khí hậu hệ sinh thái của sinh vật trên đất liền và dưới biển đang bị sụp đổ.
Due to the increase of the greenhouse effect, the average temperature has been increased and the Arctic ice has been melted, which have beens caused the rising of sea level.
Therefore, polar bears are facinged with the risk of extinction because they have been lost their habitat.
"facing extinction" also works.
Moreover, because of the rising of sea level, it is predicted that several coastal countries might be submerged.
SeveralThere will be an increase in many kinds of natural disasters, such as storms, droughts, and floods, etc.
Usually we don't use "such as..." and "...etc" together.
appear more and more because ofThis is due to the greenhouse effect and the climate change, which causes damages to property and life.
I'm guessing that this is a follow on to the previous sentence.
And also due to the climate change, the ecosystems of many creatures on the land and under the sea have been collapsed.
Dec. 5, 2024
Thank you for your correction.
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I reasonably think the reader can infer that the impact is a result from climate change, so I don't think it's necessary to state "due to climate change", though it's not wrong in terms of syntax. Added the "both" and "entirely" to add more impact to the sentence.
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Great job! Pretty minor corrections. Most of them centered around tense and rewording things to sound a bit more natural.
Climate change is an issue that we as humans must acknowledge. Unfortunately, I don't think our governments are dealing with it with the sense of urgency that they should. It's sad that something we've done to the planet is affecting the ecosystems of the innocent creatures that inhabit our beautiful planet.
Dec. 5, 2024
Thank you for your correction.
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Day 26 |
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Due to the increase of the greenhouse effect, the average temperature has been increased and the Arctic ice has been melted, which have been caused the rising of sea level. Due to the increase of the greenhouse effect, Due to the increase of the greenhouse effect, the average temperature has |
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Therefore, polar bears are facing with the risk of extinction because they have been lost their habitat.
Therefore, polar bears are fac "facing extinction" also works. |
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Moreover, because of the rising of sea level, it is predicted that several coastal countries might be submerged. Moreover, because of the rising Moreover, because of the rising |
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Several natural disasters such as storms, droughts, floods, etc.
Usually we don't use "such as..." and "...etc" together. |
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appear more and more because of the greenhouse effect and the climate change, which cause damages to property and life. appear more
I'm guessing that this is a follow on to the previous sentence. |
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And also due to the climate change, the ecosystems of many creatures on the land and under the sea have been collapsed. A I reasonably think the reader can infer that the impact is a result from climate change, so I don't think it's necessary to state "due to climate change", though it's not wrong in terms of syntax. Added the "both" and "entirely" to add more impact to the sentence. And also due to the climate change, the ecosystems of many creatures on the land and under the sea have |
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