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neon

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hi English is hard

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hi English is kinda hard language for me i rather stay anonymous

Other possibilities:
"Hi! English is kind of a hard language for me. I would rather stay anonymous."
"Hi! English is a difficult language for me, so I would rather stay anonymous."
Advice:
The non-standard word "kinda" is said by many, but written by few. I advise you to avoid using it in your writing at this stage if you are trying to improve your English.

I think English getting easier after time passes i don't know why i am writing i think i writing just for write something now i will try to write story :

I think English is getting easier as time passes. I don't know why I am writing. I think I'm doing it just for the sake of writing itself. Now i will try to write a story :

Max and Amy are two friends they go for a walk and they see GIANT DRAGON they scare too much so they run away back to village they told this to their parents .

Max and Amy are two friends. They go for a walk and they see a giant dragon which scares them very much. So, they run away back to their village and tell their parents about it.

AMY FATHER says : AMY YOUR IMAGINATION is too big HA-HA-HA no one believes them NO ONE

Amy's father says, "Amy, your imagination is too great, ha, ha, ha!" No one believes them. No one.

Advice:
Avoid using all capital letters unless you want to to emphasise that your characters are actually shouting at each other. Even then, it's best to avoid all capital letters in a sentence.

so they decide to talk with wizard of the village and his name SCARY WIZARD .

So, they decide to talk with the village wizard, whose called Scary Wizard.

they told everything to him and wizard believes .then next day wizard max Amy go that path again(where they see the dragon) and Scary wizard scares dragon with his own MIGHTY Spells like storm thunder fire water and much more .

They tell him everything and the wizard believes them. The next day, the wizard makes Amy go along the path again, where she had seen the dragon. Scary Wizard scares the dragon with his own mighty spells using thunder, fire, water and much more.

dragon fly away and it never come back and all village lives happily

The dragon then flies away and never returns, and the villagers live happily.

the happy end

A happy ending!

i have a lot of mistakes sorry Im still trying to learn English

I have made a lot of mistakes. Sorry! I'm still trying to learn English.

Feedback

You don't need to be sorry for making mistakes! People learn better by making mistakes at the beginning of their study!
You should know that, although you did make quite a few mistakes, I could still understand your story.
My advice to you:
1. Keep your texts simple and short at this stage. Avoid writing too much text for each story you submit.
2. Please note the corrections I have made for you and try to avoid similar mistakes when you write again.
3. Avoid the use of all capital letters in a sentence.
4. Keep going. You will improve if you you practise regularly.
Let me know if I can help you further with any of the above.
Sincerely,
mjm

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neon

Oct. 5, 2021

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wow many thanks

DAY 1


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hi English is kinda hard language for me i rather stay anonymous so i don't wanna give any info about me I think English getting easier after time passes i don't know why i am writing i think i writing just for write something now i will try to write story :


Max and Amy are two friends they go for a walk and they see GIANT DRAGON they scare too much so they run away back to village they told this to their parents .


Max and Amy are two friends they go for a walk and they see GIANT DRAGON they scare too much so they run away back to village they told this to their parents .

Max and Amy are two friends. They go for a walk and they see a giant dragon which scares them very much. So, they run away back to their village and tell their parents about it.

AMY FATHER says : AMY YOUR IMAGINATION is too big HA-HA-HA no one believes them NO ONE


AMY FATHER says : AMY YOUR IMAGINATION is too big HA-HA-HA no one believes them NO ONE

Amy's father says, "Amy, your imagination is too great, ha, ha, ha!" No one believes them. No one. Advice: Avoid using all capital letters unless you want to to emphasise that your characters are actually shouting at each other. Even then, it's best to avoid all capital letters in a sentence.

so they decide to talk with wizard of the village and his name SCARY WIZARD .


so they decide to talk with wizard of the village and his name SCARY WIZARD .

So, they decide to talk with the village wizard, whose called Scary Wizard.

they told everything to him and wizard believes .then next day wizard max Amy go that phat again(where they see the dragon) and Scary wizard scares dragon with his own MIGHTY Spells like storm thunder fire water and much more .


dragon fly away and it never come back and all village lives happily


dragon fly away and it never come back and all village lives happily

The dragon then flies away and never returns, and the villagers live happily.

happy end


the end


i have a lot of mistakes sorry Im still trying to learn English


i have a lot of mistakes sorry Im still trying to learn English

I have made a lot of mistakes. Sorry! I'm still trying to learn English.

hi English is kinda hard language for me i rather stay anonymous


hi English is kinda hard language for me i rather stay anonymous

Other possibilities: "Hi! English is kind of a hard language for me. I would rather stay anonymous." "Hi! English is a difficult language for me, so I would rather stay anonymous." Advice: The non-standard word "kinda" is said by many, but written by few. I advise you to avoid using it in your writing at this stage if you are trying to improve your English.

I think English getting easier after time passes i don't know why i am writing i think i writing just for write something now i will try to write story :


I think English getting easier after time passes i don't know why i am writing i think i writing just for write something now i will try to write story :

I think English is getting easier as time passes. I don't know why I am writing. I think I'm doing it just for the sake of writing itself. Now i will try to write a story :

they told everything to him and wizard believes .then next day wizard max Amy go that path again(where they see the dragon) and Scary wizard scares dragon with his own MIGHTY Spells like storm thunder fire water and much more .


they told everything to him and wizard believes .then next day wizard max Amy go that path again(where they see the dragon) and Scary wizard scares dragon with his own MIGHTY Spells like storm thunder fire water and much more .

They tell him everything and the wizard believes them. The next day, the wizard makes Amy go along the path again, where she had seen the dragon. Scary Wizard scares the dragon with his own mighty spells using thunder, fire, water and much more.

the happy end


the happy end

A happy ending!

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hi English is hard


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