Dec. 31, 2019
Dangerous Effects of Sugar on People's Health
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Your diet can determine your success in life. People who eat healthy food are more likely to have better mental and physical state. While eating junk food is easier and sometimes cheaper, healthy food help you more in the long run. Sugar consumption is one of the leading causes of obesity and other chronic illness for most people. Food manufactures like to put it in their ingredients because of several reasons.
First, it makes manufacturing and producing of food easier. Sugar is a handy additive which can be easily added to the product.
Second, from a health perspective, sugar is classified as part of carbohydrate, which are quickly digested by your body. Accordingly, when you eat sugary foods you will feel hungry very soon after, causing you to eat more and more. Food companies will be happy about that, thanks to Mr. Sugar.
Third, apart from its hazardous effects on your body, sugar is an important factor that also wastes your money.
In conclusion, I think individuals should be aware of the consequences that this food has made on their health and money. Every one of us need to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it when possible.
While eating junk food is easier and may sometimes be cheaper, a healthy food candiet will help you in the long time period.
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Food makers like to put it in their ingredients because of the following several reasons.
First, it is easier for them in twhen manufacturing and producing of food.
Sugar is a handy constitutesadditive which can be easily added to the meal.
Secondly, in healtha biological point of view, sugar is classified as part ofa carbohydrates, which are fastquickly digested in your body.
Accordingly, when you eat sugary food, you will feel hungry very soon, and you will then eat more and more.
Food companies will be happy about that, thanks forto Mr. Sugar.
Apart ofBeyond its hazardorous harmeffects on your body and your health, sugar is an important factor thathealth, sugar also influence you to waste your money also.
In conclusion, I think indivisuals should be more aware aboutof the consequences that this food has made on their health and money.
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Good job!!
Jan. 1, 2020
Thanks a lot!
People who eat healthy food are more likely to have a better mental and physical statehealth.
Food maknufacturers like to put it in their ingredients because offor several reasons.
First, it is easier for them in themakes manufacturing and producing of food easier.
Secondly, in health point of view, sugar is classified as part of carbohydrates, which are fastly digested in your body.
For the previous reason you used "first." It is better to be consistent, so use either "first" and "second", or "firstly" and "secondly."
Food companies will be happy about that, thanks for Mr. Sugarare more than happy to reap the benefits of this effect.
The other corrections are ok, but the use of Mr. Sugar is very playful, and doesn't match the tone of the rest of your essay.
Apart ofIn addition to its hazardorous harm on your body andeffects on your health, sugar is an important factor that waste your money also.
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I just corrected a few sentences to make your writing even stronger. Very nice job.
Jan. 1, 2020
Thank you so much.
Dangerous Effects of Sugar on People's Health
People who eat healthy food are more likely to have a better mental and physical state.
While eating junk food is easier and sometimes cheaper, a healthy food can help you in the long time periodrun.
Sugar is a handy constitutesingredient which can be easily added to the meal.
Secondly, infrom a health point of view, sugar is classified as part of carbohydrates, which are fastquickly digested in your body.
Food companies will be happy about that, thanks forto Mr. Sugar.
Apart ofrom its hazardorous harm on your body and your health, sugar is an important factor thatlso a waste yourof money also.
In conclusion, I think indivisduals should be more aware about the consequences that this food madehas on their health and money.
Jan. 4, 2020
Thank you for your help, Checkers.
Your eating can determine your success in life.
People who eat healthy food are more likely to have a better mental and physical state.
While eating junk food is easier and sometimes cheaper, a(eating) healthy food can/will help you in the long time periodrun.
Sugar is the prime kinoster child of food that causes trouble for most of people.
I think "poster child" is an expression that works well here. Of course, this is just an option. The other corrections are also good.
Food maknufacturers like to put it in their ingredients because ofuse it for several reason.
This is another option.
By the way, you wouldn't say "food manufacturers" if you were talking about, for example, people making food at a restaurant. In that case, you would say "chef" or "cook."
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Accordingly, when you eat sugary foods you will feel hungry very soon after, and you will then eat more and more.
I think "soon after" is more natural than "soon" here.
Food companies will be happy about that, thanks forto Mr. Sugar.
Apart ofrom its hazardorous harmeffect on your body and your health, sugar is an important factor that also wastes your money also.
In conclusion, I think indivisduals should be more aware about the consequences that this food madehas on their health and money.
Every one of us needs to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it aswhere/when possible.
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I hope to eat less sugar in the new year!
Your eating habits can determine your success in life.
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People who eat healthy food are more likely to have a better mental and physical state.
While eating junk food is easier and sometimes cheaper, a healthy food can help you (more) in the long time periodrun.
Sugar is the prime kind of food that causes troubleconsumption is one of the leading causes of obesity and other chronic illnesses for most of people.
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Food maknufacturers like to put it in their ingredients because of several reasons.
First, it is easier for them in twhen manufacturing and producing of food.
Sugar is a handy constitutesingredient which can be easily added to the mealproduct.
Accordingly, when you eat sugary foods you will feel hungry very soon and you will then, causing you to eat more and more.
Food companies will be happy about that, thanks forto Mr. Sugar.
In conclusion, I think indivisduals should be more aware about the consequences that this food madegas on their health and money.
Every one of us needs to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it aswhen possible.
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I totally agree. Sugar causes many problems. What do you think about sugar-free products? I wonder if it is healthier than regular products?
Keep up the great work. I recommend downloading an auto-corrector. It will help you fix any typing mistakes (typos).
Jan. 1, 2020
Thank you for your corrections, Masemune. I think sugar-free products is good replacement of the regular one. The issue is they are usually more expensive, but I think our bodies deserve the best. If you care about body when you're young, your body will care about you as you getting old!
Jan. 1, 2020
I think that is so true! I am actually thinking about starting a low carb diet so I can lose some weight. I want to lose 3kgs in 3 months. I think it should be possible
Dangerous Effects of Sugar on People's Health
Your eatingdiet can determine your success in life.
'Eating' is also correct, but judging from the rest of your essay, 'diet' better reflects the register you're aiming for. 'Nutrition' may also be suitable.
People who eat healthy food are more likely to have a better mental and physical state.
While eating junk food is easier and sometimes cheaper, a healthy food can help you in the long time periodrun.
Sugar is the primemain kind of food that causes trouble for most of people.
Food maknufacturers like to put it in their ingredients because of several reasons.
First, it is easier for them in twhen manufacturing and producing ofthe food.
Sugar is a handy constitutesingredient which can be easily added to the mealproduct.
Secondly, infrom a health point of viewerspective, sugar is classified as part ofa carbohydrates, which are fastis quickly digested inby your body.
Accordingly, when you eat sugary food you will feel hungry very soon and you will then eat more and more.
Food companies will be happy about that, thanks forto Mr. Sugar.
Nice humor!
Apart ofrom its hazardorous harmeffect on your body and your health, sugar is an important factor that also wastes your money also.
hazard = bad for you, harm = bad for you. Hazardous harm = something bad for you which is bad for you.
In conclusion, I think indivisduals should be more aware about the consequences that this food madehas on their health and money.
Every one of us needs to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it aswhen possible.
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I like your essay, and I agree! Sugar is dangerous. Hopefully people will see the science, soon.
Jan. 1, 2020
Great thanks for your corrections and comments. Yeah, sugar is a very dangerous enemy for our body.
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Your eating can determine your success in life. Your 'Eating' is also correct, but judging from the rest of your essay, 'diet' better reflects the register you're aiming for. 'Nutrition' may also be suitable. Your eating habits can determine your success in life. another way to say it This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Every one of us need to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it as possible. Every one of us needs to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it Every one of us needs to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it Every one of us needs to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it |
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Accordingly, when you eat sugary foods you will feel hungry very soon after, causing you to eat more and more. |
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Your diet can determine your success in life. |
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People who eat healthy food are more likely to have better mental and physical state. |
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While eating junk food is easier and sometimes cheaper, healthy food help you more in the long run. |
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Sugar consumption is one of the leading causes of obesity and other chronic illness for most people. |
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Food manufactures like to put it in their ingredients because of several reasons. |
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First, it makes manufacturing and producing of food easier. |
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Sugar is a handy additive which can be easily added to the product. |
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Second, from a health perspective, sugar is classified as part of carbohydrate, which are quickly digested by your body. |
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Food companies will be happy about that, thanks to Mr. Sugar. |
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Third, apart from its hazardous effects on your body, sugar is an important factor that also wastes your money. |
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In conclusion, I think individuals should be aware of the consequences that this food has made on their health and money. |
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Every one of us need to treat it as an enemy and try to fight it when possible. |
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[Corrected Version]Your diet can determine your success in life. |
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