July 28, 2023
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I met a Malaysian yesterday on an app called Tandem, this app is for those who want to exchange their languages with foreigners, and I found it useful to me. Back to the guy I met, he is the same age as me, and he's interested in Taiwanese culture, we didn't talk too much, but I can feel that he's really into our culture, and he has known numerous knowledge about Taiwan, I was surprised. Just like most of the graduates,he's working,earning his own money. In contrast with him, I am still fighting for what I want, still having the financial support from my parents, it's not a bad thing for what I'm doing because I'm on the path I chose, but I have the problem of self-discipline, I should find a solution to make me able to concentrate on what is necessary, and always keep in mind that everything has concequence, try not to waste any more time, or the success might be ruined by my own hands.
我昨天在Tandem上遇到了一個馬來西亞人，這個軟體是讓需要語言交換的人使用，我認為它對我很有用。回到我認識的那個人，他跟我同歲，而且他很喜歡台灣文化，我們沒有聊太多內容，但是可以感覺的到他針的對這個文化很感興趣，他已經知道許多跟台灣有關的知識了，我很訝異。就像大多數的畢業生一樣，他已經在工作了，有能力賺自己的錢養活自己。反觀，我還在為了我的夢想奮鬥，還在讓我的父母養我，這不是一件壞事，因為這是我自己選擇的道路，但是我對於自律有點問題，我應該要尋找解決方法讓我能夠專注在必要的事情上，以及記住所有事情都有前因後果，不要再浪費時間了，免得讓成功毀在自己手裡。
Daily diary in English 230728English Diary - 28/07/23
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Great job! Just a few corrections!
Daily dDiary in English 230728
Important words in a title need a capital letter.
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Don't join two complete sentences with a comma. I've put a colon as the next sentence clarifies what tandem is.
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Good work.
Use a few more full stops and a few less commas. :)
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I met a Malaysian yesterday on an app called Tandem, this app is for those who want to exchange their languages with foreigners, and I found it useful to me. I met a Malaysian yesterday on an app called Tandem Don't join two complete sentences with a comma. I've put a colon as the next sentence clarifies what tandem is. I met a Malaysian man yesterday on an app called Tandem, |
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Back to the guy I met, he is the same age as me, and he's interested in Taiwanese culture, we didn't talk too much, but I can feel that he's really into our culture, and he has known numerous knowledge about Taiwan, I was surprised. Back to the guy I met You could say he "knows numerous things about Taiwan". "knowledge" is not countable so you cannot put it with numerous.
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Just like most of the graduates,he's working,earning his own money.
Don't use "of the" here. I think it sounds better without the "just" as well. Just like most |
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In contrast with him, I am still fighting for what I want, still having the financial support from my parents, it's not a bad thing for what I'm doing because I'm on the path I chose, but I have the problem of self-discipline, I should find a solution to make me able to concentrate on what is necessary, and always keep in mind that everything has concequence, try not to waste any more time, or the success might be ruined by my own hands. In contrast That was a very long sentence as written. Cut it into several sentences. You can say something has "a consequence" but usually we use the plural "consequences". In contrast |
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