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nNear-death eExperience Near-death Experience

capitalizing titles

nA Near-dDeath eExperience A Near-Death Experience

We capitalize the first letter of important words in titles.

Once upon a timeA while ago, my family and I went into a mountain tour. A while ago, my family and I went into a mountain tour.

There's nothing wrong, but "once upon a time" makes it sound like a fairytale, so I replaced it with "a while ago."

Once upon a time / A long time ago, my family and I went inton a mountain tour. Once upon a time / A long time ago, my family and I went on a mountain tour.

Once upon a time, my family and I went inton a mountain tour. Once upon a time, my family and I went on a mountain tour.

for tours, it's usually the preposition "on" as in: went on a tour

Once upon a time, my family and I went inton a mountain tour. Once upon a time, my family and I went on a mountain tour.

That mountain iwas around 200 meters at the toptall, but luckily we did not go too far. That mountain was around 200 meters tall, but luckily we did not go too far.

That mountain iwas around 200 meters at the toptall, but luckily we did not go too far. That mountain was around 200 meters tall, but luckily we did not go too far.

That mountain is around 200 meters ato the top, but luckily we did not go too far. That mountain is around 200 meters to the top, but luckily we did not go too far.

That mountain is around 200 meters at the tophigh, but luckily we did not go toovery far. That mountain is around 200 meters high, but luckily we did not go very far.

As I remember, the sight wasbeing very great and the nature peaceful. I remember the sight being very great and the nature peaceful.

As far I remember, the sightview (or "scenery") was very great and the nature peaceful. As far I remember, the view (or "scenery") was very great and the nature peaceful.

AsFrom what I remember, the sight was very great and the nature peaceful. From what I remember, the sight was very great and the nature peaceful.

As I remember, the sight was very greatbeautiful and the nature was peaceful there. As I remember, the sight was very beautiful and nature was peaceful there.

We did normal things, as a normal family would do up there, wNothing was out of the ordinary. We took some pictures, selfies, breathand took in some fresh air (otherwise we would be dead hehe). Nothing was out of the ordinary. We took some pictures, selfies, and took in some fresh air (otherwise we would be dead hehe).

We did normal things, as a normal family would do up there, we tooktaking some pictures, & selfies, and breathing fresh air (otherwise we would be dead hehe). We did normal things, as a normal family would do up there, taking some pictures & selfies and breathing fresh air (otherwise we would be dead hehe).

We did normal things, as like a normal family would do up there, - we took some pictures, and selfies, and breathed fresh air (otherwise we would be dead hehe). We did normal things like a normal family would do up there - we took some pictures and selfies and breathed fresh air (otherwise we would be dead hehe).

haha true breath is a noun, breathe is a verb - breathed for past tense

We did normal things, as a normal family would do up there, w. We took some pictures, selfies, and breathed fresh air (otherwise we would be dead hehe). We did normal things, as a normal family would do up there. We took some pictures, selfies and breathed fresh air (otherwise we would be dead hehe).

This is better in two sentences.

Everything was just happiness,y until something (terrible) happened... Everything was just happy until something (terrible) happened...

Everything was just happinessy, until something happened... Everything was just happy, until something happened...

Everything was just pure happiness, until something happened... Everything was just pure happiness, until something happened...

usually an adjective follows "just" in this case (happiness is a noun); or alternatively: Everything was just dandy, until something happened...

We were atFrom a very high point wheon this happened, soe mountain, me and my family and I were going down the mountain from stairs that are up there, but me kiddousing the stairs there, but, being the kid that I was, I decided to go down by jumping each step, the resul. What happens next is very obvious. From a very high point on the mountain, me and my family were going down the mountain using the stairs there, but, being the kid that I was, I decided to go down by jumping each step. What happens next is very obvious.

We were at a very high point when this happened, so: my family and I were going down the mountain fromusing the stairs that awere up there, but meI, a kiddo, decided to go down by jumping each step, and the result is/was very obvious. We were at a very high point when this happened: my family and I were going down the mountain using the stairs that were up there, but I, a kiddo, decided to go down by jumping each step, and the result is/was very obvious.

We were at a very high point when this happened, so m. My family and I were gocoming downback down from the mountain fromusing stairs that awere up there, but mey kiddo decided to gocome down by jumping each step, t. The result iwas very obvious. We were at a very high point when this happened. My family and I were coming back down from the mountain using stairs that were up there, but my kiddo decided to come down by jumping each step. The result was very obvious.

going is used when you are moving away from something (in this case the ground), but you want to come back down to the ground

We were at a very high point when this happened, so m. My family and I were going down the mountain from the stairs that are up there, but mey kiddo decided to go down by jumping each step, t. The result is very obvious. We were at a very high point when this happened. My family and I were going down the mountain from the stairs that are up there, but my kiddo decided to go down by jumping each step. The result is very obvious.

I slipped down ion the next to the last step, I rolled down and I almost fell out fromff the mountain. I slipped down on the next to last step, rolled down and almost fell off the mountain.

I slipped down in the next -to the -last step, I rolled down and I almost fell out fromff (or "down) the mountain. I slipped down the next-to-last step, rolled down and almost fell off (or "down) the mountain.

the next-to-last step off (or down) the mountain

I slipped down in the nexton the second to the last step, I rolled down and I almost fell out from the mountain. I slipped on the second to the last step, rolled down and almost fell out from the mountain.

or: fell off of the mountain 😳 Also, maybe you could explain how you slipped, to connect the previous sentence. (My kiddo bumped into me and I slipped...)

I slipped down ion the next to the last step, I rolled down and I almost fell out fromff the mountain. I slipped on the next to last step, rolled down and almost fell off the mountain.

BewareWatch your steepsp... Watch your step...

BewareWatch your steepsp... Watch your step...

Beware your steeps... Beware your steps...

"steep" situation, though

Beware of your steeps ... Beware of your steps ...