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heatedcanine

March 9, 2024

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Criminals Return to the Crime Scene

Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the accident point of the trail run course even though he stopped practicing now.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toe to fall.
It was the edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-up surface.
I thought I was running in nature, not on the artificially paved road.
I was practicing running on the rough surface of the nature-made road, instead of the artificial flat road.
So it was ironic that I turned out to be fallen by something artificial.
Hahaha


犯人は現場に戻るのが犯罪心理である。

同様に、ころんでひざを打った者は、今走るのをやめているにも関わらず、トレイルランコースの転倒現場に戻ってきた。

僕がつまずいて転んだのは木の根っこではなかった。
人工芝が敷いてある端で5㎝程度の段差が出来ている端につまずいたのだった。
僕は人工的につくられた道ではなくて、自然の中を走っているつもりだった。
舗装された平坦な道ではなく、天然の凹凸のある道を走る練習をしているつもりだった。

だから、自然の凹凸ではない人工物につまずくとは皮肉なものだとおもった。(笑)

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Just as Criminals Return to the Crime Scene

Likewise, the knee hitterone who fell returned to the accident point ofsite of the fall, on theat trail run course, even though he has stopped practicing now.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toafter all that my left toe tripped over causing me to fall.

It was the edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-upawn, which step protruded 5 cm from the surface.

I thought I was running ion nature, not on thean artificially paved road.

I was practicing running on the rough and uneven surfaces of mother nature-made road, instead of the artificialman-made flat road.

So, it was ironic that I turned out to be fallen byfell because of something artificial.

Hahaha

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Great job!!

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heatedcanine

March 10, 2024

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Criminals Return to the Crime Scene

Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the accident point of the trail run course even though he had stopped practicing now.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toe which caused me to fall.

It was the edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-up surface.

I thought I was running in nature, not on the artificially paved road.

I was practicing running on the rough surface of the nature-made road, instead of thenot an artificial flat road.

So it was ironic that I turned out to be fallen by something artificial.

Hahaha

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I hope you recover quickly !

Criminals Return to the Crime Scene

Likewise, the knee hitterrunners who fall and hit their knee returned to the accident point of the trail run course even though he stopped practicing nowplace where they fell.

We don't normally say "knee hitter" in English (I've never heard it before), but I think "runners who fall and hit their knee" or "someone who falls and hits their knee" seems better.
I think "even though he stopped practicing now" seems unnecessary to add and makes the sentence less clear and concise.

It was not the root of a tree that Icaused me to hit my left toe toand fall.

It was the edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-up surfaceawn, which had a 5 cm tall step.

I thought I was running in nature, not on thean artificially paved road.

I thought I was practicing running on the rough surface of the nature-madea naturally uneven road, instead of the artificial flata flat paved road.

So I thought it was ironic that I turned out to be fallen byripped over something artificial.

Hahaha

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Nice writing! I hope your toe heals soon.

Just As Criminals Return to the Crime Scene

this way it flows better into the following sentence.

Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the accident point of the trail run course even though he has stopped practicing now.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toe tohit and made me fall.

It was the edge of an artificial loan'sturf with a 5 -cm stepped-up surface.

I thought I was running in nature, not on thean artificially paved road.

I was practicing running on the rough surface of thea nature-madeally uneven road, instead of the artificial flata flat, paved road.

So it was ironic that I sturnmbled out to be fallen byn something artificial.

Hahaha

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A nice follow-up to your previous post!

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heatedcanine

March 9, 2024

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Thank you for your corrections and feedback!

Criminals Return to the Crime Scene

Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the scene of the accident point ofon the trail run course even though he (has) stopped practicing now.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toe on, causing me to fall.

It was the 5 cm raised edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-up surface(?).

“Loan” must be a typo. What do you mean?

I thought I was running in nature, not on the artificiallya paved road.

“Artificially” isn’t necessary since paving is always artificial.

I thought I was practicing running on the rough surface of thea nature-made road, instead of thean artificial flat road.

I wonder if you might mean a trail or path instead of a “road.” Roads are usually meant for vehicles of some sort.

So it was ironic that I turned out to bhave [fallen over | been tripped by] something artificial.

Criminals Return to the Crime Scene


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Just As Criminals Return to the Crime Scene

this way it flows better into the following sentence.

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Just as Criminals Return to the Crime Scene

Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the accident point of the trail run course even though he stopped practicing now.


Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the scene of the accident point ofon the trail run course even though he (has) stopped practicing now.

Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the accident point of the trail run course even though he has stopped practicing now.

Likewise, the knee hitterrunners who fall and hit their knee returned to the accident point of the trail run course even though he stopped practicing nowplace where they fell.

We don't normally say "knee hitter" in English (I've never heard it before), but I think "runners who fall and hit their knee" or "someone who falls and hits their knee" seems better. I think "even though he stopped practicing now" seems unnecessary to add and makes the sentence less clear and concise.

Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the accident point of the trail run course even though he had stopped practicing now.

Likewise, the knee hitterone who fell returned to the accident point ofsite of the fall, on theat trail run course, even though he has stopped practicing now.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toe to fall.


It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toe on, causing me to fall.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toe tohit and made me fall.

It was not the root of a tree that Icaused me to hit my left toe toand fall.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toe which caused me to fall.

It was not the root of a tree that I hit my left toafter all that my left toe tripped over causing me to fall.

It was the edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-up surface.


It was the 5 cm raised edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-up surface(?).

“Loan” must be a typo. What do you mean?

It was the edge of an artificial loan'sturf with a 5 -cm stepped-up surface.

It was the edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-up surfaceawn, which had a 5 cm tall step.

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It was the edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped-upawn, which step protruded 5 cm from the surface.

I thought I was running in nature, not on the artificially paved road.


I thought I was running in nature, not on the artificiallya paved road.

“Artificially” isn’t necessary since paving is always artificial.

I thought I was running in nature, not on thean artificially paved road.

I thought I was running in nature, not on thean artificially paved road.

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I thought I was running ion nature, not on thean artificially paved road.

Hahaha


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This sentence has been marked as perfect!

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I was practicing running on the rough surface of the nature-made road, instead of the artificial flat road.


I thought I was practicing running on the rough surface of thea nature-made road, instead of thean artificial flat road.

I wonder if you might mean a trail or path instead of a “road.” Roads are usually meant for vehicles of some sort.

I was practicing running on the rough surface of thea nature-madeally uneven road, instead of the artificial flata flat, paved road.

I thought I was practicing running on the rough surface of the nature-madea naturally uneven road, instead of the artificial flata flat paved road.

I was practicing running on the rough surface of the nature-made road, instead of thenot an artificial flat road.

I was practicing running on the rough and uneven surfaces of mother nature-made road, instead of the artificialman-made flat road.

So it was ironic that I turned out to be fallen by something artificial.


So it was ironic that I turned out to bhave [fallen over | been tripped by] something artificial.

So it was ironic that I sturnmbled out to be fallen byn something artificial.

So I thought it was ironic that I turned out to be fallen byripped over something artificial.

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So, it was ironic that I turned out to be fallen byfell because of something artificial.

Likewise, the knee hitter returned to the point of the trail run course even though he stopped practicing now.


It was not the root of a tree I hit my left toe and fell.


It was the edge of an artificial loan's 5 cm stepped surface.


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