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Coming of aAge cCeremony

Title words should be capitalized.

In the town where I work, we havethere is a coming of age ceremony on August 15th.

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No need to say "the ceremony" again, as it was said in the previous sentence.

Besides congratulatory messages from the mayor and other town officials, video messages from their teachers are screened, making the attendees excited.. This excites the honorees!

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Unlike previous years, this year, we will show slides of the pictures that were taken when they were in junior high, will be shown along with some background music.

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Coming of aAge cCeremony

We usually capitalize the first letter of important words in a title.

In the town where I work, we have a cComing of aAge cCeremony on August 15th.

New adults who have becometurned 20 years old after graduating from junior highs in the town will attend the ceremony.

Besides congratulatory messages from the mayor and other town officials, video messages from their teachers are screened,will be broadcast making the attendees excited in anticipation.

Unlike previous years, this year, we will show slides'll have a slide show with background music of the pictures taken when they were in junior high, with some background music.

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Unlike previous years, this year we'll have a slide show. It'll have pictures taken of the students when they were in junior high. It'll also have background music.

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This sounds more natural in the US.