Aug. 18, 2024
Clouds by the Huangpu River
I went to cycle along the Huangpu River this morning.
It was around 6:30 AM when I got to the river bank, then I rode a sharing bike up to the north.
The sun had come out, but the light was still tender. I stopped to take many pictures and videos, then continued riding my bike. The white clouds under the blue sky were magnificent.
The temperature became a bit high after an hour, so I turned around and rode back. The light got better on the way back. I took more pictures and the clouds were still beautiful.
I made a small video with these pictures and videos.
Maybe I will add some captions to it tomorrow. But not today, I'm too tired right now.
今早我沿黄浦江骑自行车去了。
到达河岸时大约是早上6:30，然后我骑着一辆共享自行车向北。
太阳已经出来了，但光线还很柔和。我停下来拍了很多照片和视频，然后继续骑我的自行车。蓝天下的白云非常美。
一小时后气温有点高了，所以我掉头往回骑。回来的路上光线好多了。我拍了更多的照片，云仍然很漂亮。
我做了一个小视频.
也许我明天会加一些字幕。今天就算了，现在好累。
Clouds by the Huangpu River
It was around 6:30 AM when I got to the river bank, then I rode a sharinged bike up to the north.
A bike that you rent from a public service would be called a 'shared bike'.
I stopped to take many pictures and videos, then continued riding my bike along the way.
This sounds like you only stopped once to take pictures during the whole trip. "... then continued riding my bike." implies that the previous action (taking photos) ended when the current action starts.
The white clouds under the blue sky were magnificent.
The temperature becameweather got a bit highot after an hour, so I turned around and rode back.
Temperature is a bit abstract, weather sounds more natural to describe your environment.
The light got better on the way back.
I made a small videohort compilation with these pictures and videos.
A 'small video' is correct, but 'short video' is a more natural way to describe the length of a video.
Using a synonym for video avoids repetition and is nicer to read.
Maybe I will add some captions to it tomorrow.
But not today, I'm too tired right now.
Clouds by the Huangpu River
I went to cycle along the Huangpu River this morning.
I don’t hear people use “cycle” a lot (I’m from America). “I went biking along…” would sound more natural here.
It was around 6:30 AM when I got to the river bank, then I rode a sharing bike up to the north.
The sun had come out, but the light was still tender.
“Tender” is not commonly used to describe light. I think “tender” could be used if you were trying to do some creative writing. In speaking, “soft” would sound more natural.
I stopped to take many pictures and videos, then continued riding my bike.
The white clouds under the blue sky were magnificent.
The temperature became a bit high after an hour, so I turned around and rode back.
The light got better on the way back.
I took more pictures and the clouds were still beautiful.
I made a small video with these pictures and videos.
Maybe I will add some captions to it tomorrow.
But not today, I'm too tired right now.
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Good job! It sounds gorgeous!
Aug. 19, 2024
Thank you for the corrections and feedback! I learned a lot from them.
Have a nice day!
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I went to cycle along the Huangpu River this morning. I went to cycle along the Huangpu River this morning. I don’t hear people use “cycle” a lot (I’m from America). “I went biking along…” would sound more natural here. |
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It was around 6:30 AM when I got to the river bank, then I rode a sharing bike up to the north. It was around 6:30 AM when I got to the river bank, then I rode a sharing bike up It was around 6:30 AM when I got to the river bank, then I rode a shar A bike that you rent from a public service would be called a 'shared bike'. |
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The sun had come out, but the light was still tender. The sun had come out, but the light was still tender. “Tender” is not commonly used to describe light. I think “tender” could be used if you were trying to do some creative writing. In speaking, “soft” would sound more natural. |
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I stopped to take many pictures and videos, then continued riding my bike. This sentence has been marked as perfect! I stopped to take many pictures and videos This sounds like you only stopped once to take pictures during the whole trip. "... then continued riding my bike." implies that the previous action (taking photos) ended when the current action starts. |
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