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Jack

May 29, 2022

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Childhood Memory

When I was a kid, the farmland of my village didn't belong to each individual family. It belonged to all of our villagers, who worked together as production team members.

A small river encircled the village, and only left an entrance in the center of the south side of the village.

Every year in the spring, the production team would buy some fish fry and raise them in the river.

The two main species of them were silver carp and grass carp. As far as I remember, we didn't feed them any food, we just let them grow naturally.

In the summer, the fish already grew big. Sometimes we could see them in the early morning when they opened their big mouths to take deep breath just under the surface of the water.

Sometimes, we could also see they were eating reed leaves, but saying that doesn't mean we really saw them. They ate the reeds leaves under the water, so that we could see the reeds that were shaking.

Also, in the summer, the fruits of the paper mulberry trees that along the river became ripe, which often fell down into the river, so we could see the amazing scene that the grass carp were competing to eat the fruits.

According to our production team's rules, we were not allowed to fish. If someone did, they would face a serious punishment which was deducting their labor scores that were recorded by the production team in their family accounts before.

But sometimes, we couldn't help but do it. We used a needle to make a hook, tied it to a thread, (the needle and thread were used to make clothes in the countryside) found an earthworm, and then fished for a short while secretly. We often didn't get anything, because we were very afraid of being caught.

The happiest time would be before the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it's our fishing time.

All the male adults in the village held single nets and went down into the river and worked together for fishing. They usually stood shoulder by shoulder and fished from this end to the other end of the river. Sometimes, they would use a big net that needed many people to work together to catch fish.

While the male adults were fishing, women and us kids would stand on the riverside to collect the fish they caught. Every time we saw many fish flying from the water, we would hail out loud.

Each family would be assigned three to five fish after fishing. Although that was little, that would be our grand banquet to be able to eat fish at that tough time.

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When I was a kid, the farmland ofin my village didn't belong to eachany individual family.

It belonged to all of ourthe villagers, who worked together as production team membersa team.

AThere was a small river that encircled the village, andleaving only left an entrance in the center of the south side of the villagetowards the middle of the southern end.

Every year in the spring, the production teamvillagers would buy some fish fry and raise them in the river.

The two main species of themthey bought were silver carp and grass carp.

As far as I can remember, we didn't feed them any food, we just let them grow naturally.

In the summer, the fish already grew to be quite big.

Sometimes we could see them in the early morning when they opened their big mouths to a take deep breath just under the surface of the water.

Sometimes, we could also sethey looked like they were eating reed leaves, but saying that doesn't mean we really saw them.

TAs they gate the reeds leaves d arounder the water, so thatreeds we could see the reedsat thatey were shaking.

Also, in the summer, the fruits of the paper mulberry trees that along the river became ripe, which often fell down into the river, soand we could see the amazing scene that the grass carp were competinge to eat the fruits. It was an amazing sight.

According to our production team's rules, we were not allowed to fish.

If someone did, they would face a serious punishment which was deductingconsequences and have their labor scores that were recorded previously by the production team indeducted from their family accounts before.

But sometimes, we couldn't help but do it.

We used a needle to make a hook, tied it to a thread, (the needle and thread were used to make clothes in the countryside) found an earthworm, and then fished for a short while in secretly.

We often didn't getcatch anything, because we were very afraid of being caught.

The happiest time would be before the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it's our fishing time.

All the male adults in the village held single nets and went down into the river and worked together forto fishing.

They usually stood shoulder byto shoulder and fished from thisone end tof the other end ofriver to the rivother.

Sometimes, they would use a big net that neededrequired the help of many people to work together to catch fiswith.

While the male adults were fishing, the women and us kids would stand on the riverside to collect the fish they caught.

Every time we saw many fish flying from the water, we would hailshout out loud.

Each family would be assignedgiven three to five fish after fishingwards.

Although thait was little, that would be our grand banquet to be able to eat fish atof fish that helped to sustain us during that tough time.

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Jack

May 29, 2022

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Thank you very much for correcting my journals.

Childhood Memory

When I was a kid, the farmland in my village didn't belong to any individual family. It belonged to all of the villagers who worked together as a team.

There was a small river that encircled the village, leaving only an entrance towards the middle of the southern end.

Every year in the spring, the villagers would buy some fish and raise them in the river.

The two main species they bought were silver carp and grass carp. As far as I can remember, we didn't feed them any food, we just let them grow naturally.

In the summer, the fish already grew to be quite big. Sometimes we could see them in the early morning when they opened their big mouths to take a deep breath just under the surface of the water.

Sometimes, they looked like they were eating reed leaves, but saying that doesn’t mean we really saw them. As they gathered around the reeds, we could see that the reeds were shaking.

Also, in the summer, the fruits of the paper mulberry trees along the river became ripe, which often fell into the river, and we could see the grass carp compete to eat the fruits. It was an amazing sight.

According to our production team's rules, we were not allowed to fish. If someone did, they would face serious consequences and have their labor scores that were recorded previously by the production team deducted from their family accounts.

But sometimes, we couldn't help but do it. We used a needle to make a hook, tied it to a thread, (the needle and thread were used to make clothes in the countryside) found an earthworm, and then fished for a short while in secret. We often didn't catch anything, because we were very afraid of being caught.

The happiest time would be before the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it's our fishing time.

All the male adults in the village held single nets and went down into the river and worked together to fish. They usually stood shoulder to shoulder and fished from one end of the river to the other. Sometimes, they would use a big net that required the help of many people to work with.

While the male adults were fishing, the women and us kids would stand on the riverside to collect the fish they caught. Every time we saw fish flying from the water, we would shout out loud.

Each family would be given three to five fish afterwards. Although it was little, that would be our grand banquet of fish that helped to sustain us at that tough time.

Childhood Memory

When I was a kid, the farmland of my village didn't belong to each individual family.

It belonged to all of our villagers, who worked together as production team members.

A small river encircled the village, and only left an entrance in the center of the south side of the village.

Every year in the spring, the production team would buy some fish fry and raise them in the river.

The two main species of them were silver carp and grass carp.

As far as I remember, we didn't feed them any food, w. We just let them grow naturally.

InBy the summer, the fish had already grewown big.

Sometimes we could see them early in the early morning when they would opened their big mouths to take a deep breath just under the surface of the water.

Sometimes, we could also see they were eating reed leaves, but sayingeing eaten. But that doesn't mean we reactually saw them fish.

TSince they ate the reeds leaves under the water, so that we could see the reeds that were shakinge.

Also, in the summer, the fruits of the paper mulberry trees that along the river would becaome ripe, which. They often fell down into the river, so and we cwould see thean amazing scene that theof grass carp were competing to eat the fruits.

According to our production team's rules, we were not allowed to fish.

If someone did, they would face a serious punishment which was deducting their labor scores that were recorded by the production team in their family accounts before. Their family account's previously recorded labor scores would be reduced.

But sometimes, we couldn't help but do it.

We used a needle to make a hook, tied it to a thread, (the needle and thread were used to make clothes in the countryside), found an earthworm, and then fished for a short while secretly.

We often didn't get anything, because we were very afraid of being caught.

All the male adults males in the village held single nets and went down into the river and, workeding together forto fishing.

They usually stood shoulder by shoulder and fished from thisone end tof the other end ofriver to the rivother.

Sometimes, they would use a big net that needed many people to work together to catch fish.

While the male adults were fishinged, women and us kids would stand on the riverside to collect theany fish they caught.

Every time we saw many fish flying from the water, we would hailshout out loud.

Each family would be assigned three to five fish after fishing.

Although thait was little,n't much, during that wtould be ourgh time, it was a grand banquet to be able to eat fish at that tough time.

Jack's avatar
Jack

May 29, 2022

2

Thank you very much for correcting my journals.

Childhood Memory

When I was a kid, the farmland of my village didn't belong to each individual family. It belonged to all of our villagers, who worked together as production team members.

A small river encircled the village and only left an entrance in the center of the south side of the village.

Every year in the spring, the production team would buy some fish fry and raise them in the river.

The two main species of them were silver carp and grass carp. As far as I can remember, we didn't feed them any food. We just let them grow naturally.

By the summer, the fish had already grown big. Sometimes we could see them early in the morning when they would open their big mouths to take a deep breath just under the surface of the water.

Sometimes, we could also see reed leaves being eaten. But that doesn't mean we actually saw the fish. Since they ate the reeds leaves under the water, we could see the reeds shake.

Also in the summer, the fruits of the paper mulberry trees along the river would become ripe. They often fell into the river and we would see an amazing scene of grass carp competing to eat the fruits.

According to our production team's rules, we were not allowed to fish. If someone did, they would face a serious punishment. Their family account’s previous recorded labor scores would be reduced.

But sometimes, we couldn't help but do it. We used a needle to make a hook, tied it to a thread (the needle and thread were used to make clothes in the countryside), found an earthworm, and then fished for a short while secretly. We often didn't get anything, because we were very afraid of being caught.

The happiest time would be before the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it's our fishing time.

All the adults males in the village held single nets and went down into the river, working together to fish. They usually stood shoulder by shoulder and fished from one end of the river to the other. Sometimes, they would use a big net that needed many people to work together to catch fish.

While the male adults fished, women and kids would stand on the riverside to collect any fish they caught. Every time we saw many fish flying from the water, we would shout out loud.

Each family would be assigned three to five fish after fishing. Although it wasn’t much, during that tough time, it was a grand banquet to be able to eat fish.

Childhood Memory


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When I was a kid, the farmland of my village didn't belong to each individual family.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

When I was a kid, the farmland ofin my village didn't belong to eachany individual family.

It belonged to all of our villagers, who worked together as production team members.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

It belonged to all of ourthe villagers, who worked together as production team membersa team.

A small river encircled the village, and only left an entrance in the center of the south side of the village.


A small river encircled the village, and only left an entrance in the center of the south side of the village.

AThere was a small river that encircled the village, andleaving only left an entrance in the center of the south side of the villagetowards the middle of the southern end.

Every year in the spring, the production team would buy some fish fry and raise them in the river.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Every year in the spring, the production teamvillagers would buy some fish fry and raise them in the river.

The two main species of them were silver carp and grass carp.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

The two main species of themthey bought were silver carp and grass carp.

As far as I remember, we didn't feed them any food, we just let them grow naturally.


As far as I remember, we didn't feed them any food, w. We just let them grow naturally.

As far as I can remember, we didn't feed them any food, we just let them grow naturally.

In the summer, the fish already grew big.


InBy the summer, the fish had already grewown big.

In the summer, the fish already grew to be quite big.

Sometimes we could see them in the early morning when they opened their big mouths to take deep breath just under the surface of the water.


Sometimes we could see them early in the early morning when they would opened their big mouths to take a deep breath just under the surface of the water.

Sometimes we could see them in the early morning when they opened their big mouths to a take deep breath just under the surface of the water.

Sometimes, we could also see they were eating reed leaves, but saying that doesn't mean we really saw them.


Sometimes, we could also see they were eating reed leaves, but sayingeing eaten. But that doesn't mean we reactually saw them fish.

Sometimes, we could also sethey looked like they were eating reed leaves, but saying that doesn't mean we really saw them.

They ate the reeds leaves under the water, so that we could see the reeds that were shaking.


TSince they ate the reeds leaves under the water, so that we could see the reeds that were shakinge.

TAs they gate the reeds leaves d arounder the water, so thatreeds we could see the reedsat thatey were shaking.

Also, in the summer, the fruits of the paper mulberry trees that along the river became ripe, which often fell down into the river, so we could see the amazing scene that the grass carp were competing to eat the fruits.


Also, in the summer, the fruits of the paper mulberry trees that along the river would becaome ripe, which. They often fell down into the river, so and we cwould see thean amazing scene that theof grass carp were competing to eat the fruits.

Also, in the summer, the fruits of the paper mulberry trees that along the river became ripe, which often fell down into the river, soand we could see the amazing scene that the grass carp were competinge to eat the fruits. It was an amazing sight.

According to our production team's rules, we were not allowed to fish.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

If someone did, they would face a serious punishment which was deducting their labor scores that were recorded by the production team in their family accounts before.


If someone did, they would face a serious punishment which was deducting their labor scores that were recorded by the production team in their family accounts before. Their family account's previously recorded labor scores would be reduced.

If someone did, they would face a serious punishment which was deductingconsequences and have their labor scores that were recorded previously by the production team indeducted from their family accounts before.

But sometimes, we couldn't help but do it.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We used a needle to make a hook, tied it to a thread, (the needle and thread were used to make clothes in the countryside) found an earthworm, and then fished for a short while secretly.


We used a needle to make a hook, tied it to a thread, (the needle and thread were used to make clothes in the countryside), found an earthworm, and then fished for a short while secretly.

We used a needle to make a hook, tied it to a thread, (the needle and thread were used to make clothes in the countryside) found an earthworm, and then fished for a short while in secretly.

We often didn't get anything, because we were very afraid of being caught.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

We often didn't getcatch anything, because we were very afraid of being caught.

The happiest time would be before the Mid-Autumn Festival, because it's our fishing time.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

All the male adults in the village held single nets and went down into the river and worked together for fishing.


All the male adults males in the village held single nets and went down into the river and, workeding together forto fishing.

All the male adults in the village held single nets and went down into the river and worked together forto fishing.

They usually stood shoulder by shoulder and fished from this end to the other end of the river.


They usually stood shoulder by shoulder and fished from thisone end tof the other end ofriver to the rivother.

They usually stood shoulder byto shoulder and fished from thisone end tof the other end ofriver to the rivother.

Sometimes, they would use a big net that needed many people to work together to catch fish.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Sometimes, they would use a big net that neededrequired the help of many people to work together to catch fiswith.

While the male adults were fishing, women and us kids would stand on the riverside to collect the fish they caught.


While the male adults were fishinged, women and us kids would stand on the riverside to collect theany fish they caught.

While the male adults were fishing, the women and us kids would stand on the riverside to collect the fish they caught.

Every time we saw many fish flying from the water, we would hail out loud.


Every time we saw many fish flying from the water, we would hailshout out loud.

Every time we saw many fish flying from the water, we would hailshout out loud.

Each family would be assigned three to five fish after fishing.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Each family would be assignedgiven three to five fish after fishingwards.

Although that was little, that would be our grand banquet to be able to eat fish at that tough time.


Although thait was little,n't much, during that wtould be ourgh time, it was a grand banquet to be able to eat fish at that tough time.

Although thait was little, that would be our grand banquet to be able to eat fish atof fish that helped to sustain us during that tough time.

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