June 1, 2022
Chicken Fighting
The games I played in the old days.
When I was young, I didn't have any toys because I lived in the countryside where life conditions were very poor.
But I still played many games with other children. All the games are really simple, and the game materials can be easily found in our daily life. Here are some games.
斗鸡(dòu jī) chicken fighting
Children can play this game anywhere, especially in the winter. It will warm you as you play it.
This game is only played between two children. Standing with one leg, using your hands lifting the other leg up to your thigh and keeping it there. You could only move by hopping.
When you fight with someone, use the knee of your lifted leg to knock on the other until they fall down. While you are fighting, you need to hop to change your location and find the best chance and angle to fight them.
I have at least three tips for chicken fighting. One is putting your knee above theirs and pressing them down hard. The second is placing your knee under theirs and lifting them hard. The third one is that when they’re going to jump up and strike you heavily, just know this in advance and avoid them flexibly. These three tips can all lead them to fall down because they will lose their center of gravity.
That is all for today and I will introduce the next one soon.
The games I played in the old days.
This is correct, but because there is no verb in the main clause ('The games...in the old days'), it's a sentence fragment.
When I was young, I didn't have any toys because I lived in the countryside where life conditions were very poor.
But I still played many games with other children.
All the games awere really simple, and the game materials canould be easily found in our daily life.
Tense shifting
Here are some games.
斗鸡(dòu jī) chicken fighting
Children can play this game anywhere, especially in the winter.
It will warm you as you play it.
This is grammatically correct, but the meaning is a little ambiguous, or does not sounds quite 'natural' - do you mean the game will warm you from the exercise?
This game is only played between two children.
Standing withon one leg, usingyou use your hands to lifting the other leg up to your thigh and keeping it there.
You couldan only move by hopping.
Present tense here because you're describing the rules of the game in general terms.
When you fight with someone, use the knee of your lifted leg to knock on the other until they fall down.
Grammatically correct, but the meaning is ambiguous - 'to knock the other person'?
While you are fighting, you need to hop to change your location and find the best chance and angle to fight them.
I have at least three tips for chicken fighting.
One is putting your knee above theirs and pressing ithem down hard.
The second is placing your knee under theirs and lifting ithem hard.
'it', because the pronoun is referring to either your knee or theirs - not to 'them' (the person)
The third one is that when they’re going to jump up and strike you heavily, just know this in advance and avoid them flexibly.
These three tips can all lead them to fall down because they will lose their center of gravity.
That is all for today and I will introduce the next one soon.
'one' is a bit ambiguous - the next tip, or the next game?
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This is great work! The corrections are all quite small things. I was interested in this game, it sounds fun but difficult :)
June 2, 2022
All the games awere really simple, and the game materials canould be easily found in our daily life.
I use the present tense because I think it is a fact. Even today, the game is still simple and the game materials are easily found.
June 2, 2022
It will warm you as you play it.
Yes. So how do you reword it?
June 2, 2022
When you fight with someone, use the knee of your lifted leg to knock on the other until they fall down.
Use the lifted knee to knock your opponent fall down.
June 2, 2022
That is all for today and I will introduce the next one soon.
The next game.
June 2, 2022
Thank you very much for correcting my journals.
The games I played in the old days.
When I was young, I didn't have any toys because I lived in the countryside where life conditions were very poor.
But I still played many games with other children. All the games are really simple, and the game materials can be easily found in our daily life. Here are some games.
斗鸡(dòu jī) chicken fighting
Children can play this game anywhere, especially in the winter. Playing It makes you feel warm.
This game is only played between two children. Standing on one leg, you use your hands to lift the other leg up to your thigh and keep it there. You can only move by hopping.
When you fight with someone, use the knee of your lifted leg to knock the other until they fall down. While you are fighting, you need to hop to change your location and find the best chance and angle to fight them.
I have at least three tips for chicken fighting. One is putting your knee above theirs and pressing it down hard. The second is placing your knee under theirs and lifting it hard. The third one is that when they’re going to jump up and strike you heavily, just know this in advance and avoid them flexibly. These three tips can all lead them to fall down because they will lose their center of gravity.
That is all for today and I will introduce the next game soon.
June 2, 2022
Thank you very much.
The games I played in the old days.
When I was young, I didn't have any toys because I lived in the countryside where life conditions were very poor.
But I still played many games with other children. All the games are really simple, and the game materials can be easily found in our daily life. Here are some games.
斗鸡(dòu jī) chicken fighting
Children can play this game anywhere, especially in the winter. Playing It makes you feel warm.
This game is only played between two children. Standing on one leg, you use your hands to lift the other leg up to your thigh and keep it there. You can only move by hopping.
When you fight with someone, use the knee of your lifted leg to knock the other until they fall down. While you are fighting, you need to hop to change your location and find the best chance and angle to fight them.
I have at least three tips for chicken fighting. One is putting your knee above theirs and pressing it down hard. The second is placing your knee under theirs and lifting it hard. The third one is that when they’re going to jump up and strike you heavily, just know this in advance and avoid them flexibly. These three tips can all lead them to fall down because they will lose their center of gravity.
That is all for today and I will introduce the next game soon.
June 2, 2022
Thank you very much.
The games I played in the old days.
When I was young, I didn't have any toys because I lived in the countryside where life conditions were very poor. But I still played many games with other children.
All the games were really simple, and the game materials could be easily found in our daily life.
Here are some games. 斗鸡(dòu jī) chicken fighting
Children can play this game anywhere, especially in the winter.
Playing It makes you feel warm.
This game is only played between two children. Standing on one leg, you use your hands to lift the other leg up to your thigh and keep it there. You can only move by hopping.
When you fight with someone, use the knee of your lifted leg to knock the other until they fall down.
While you are fighting, you need to hop to change your location and find the best chance and angle to fight them.
I have at least three tips for chicken fighting. One is putting your knee above theirs and pressing it down hard. The second is placing your knee under theirs and lifting it hard. The third one is that when they're going to jump up and strike you heavily, just know this in advance and avoid them flexibly.
These three tips can all lead them to fall down because they will lose their center of gravity.
That is all for today and I will introduce the next game soon.
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The games I played in the old days. The games I played in the old days. This is correct, but because there is no verb in the main clause ('The games...in the old days'), it's a sentence fragment. |
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When I was young, I didn't have any toys because I lived in the countryside where life conditions were very poor. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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But I still played many games with other children. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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All the games are really simple, and the game materials can be easily found in our daily life. All the games Tense shifting |
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Here are some games. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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斗鸡(dòu jī) chicken fighting This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Children can play this game anywhere, especially in the winter. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It will warm you as you play it. It will warm you as you play it. This is grammatically correct, but the meaning is a little ambiguous, or does not sounds quite 'natural' - do you mean the game will warm you from the exercise? |
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This game is only played between two children. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Standing with one leg, using your hands lifting the other leg up to your thigh and keeping it there. Standing |
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You could only move by hopping. You c Present tense here because you're describing the rules of the game in general terms. |
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When you fight with someone, use the knee of your lifted leg to knock on the other until they fall down. When you fight with someone, use the knee of your lifted leg to knock on the other until they fall down. Grammatically correct, but the meaning is ambiguous - 'to knock the other person'? |
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While you are fighting, you need to hop to change your location and find the best chance and angle to fight them. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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I have at least three tips for chicken fighting. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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One is putting your knee above theirs and pressing them down hard. One is putting your knee above theirs and pressing it |
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The second is placing your knee under theirs and lifting them hard. The second is placing your knee under theirs and lifting it 'it', because the pronoun is referring to either your knee or theirs - not to 'them' (the person) |
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The third one is that when they’re going to jump up and strike you heavily, just know this in advance and avoid them flexibly. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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These three tips can all lead them to fall down because they will lose their center of gravity. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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That is all for today and I will introduce the next one soon. That is all for today and I will introduce the next one soon. 'one' is a bit ambiguous - the next tip, or the next game? |
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