Dec. 12, 2023
Chapter VI
Heinrich lifted his head from a fluffy pillow with difficulty. It was pleasantly dark around him, but the rays of light sneaking past the edges of the drawn curtains sufficed for him to recognise his hotel room.
Relieved, he sank back into the soft down. His body felt as exhausted as if he had swum several kilometres the day before. His tendons burned, his muscles were tired and the blanket was so heavy on his chest and limbs that it took all his strength to feel for the necklace around his neck. When he couldn’t find it, he remembered that the ring was on his finger.
He fidgeted with the ring before lowering his hand again. The movement was so strenuous that Heinrich took a deep breath. The air in the room was cool and smelled of soap. He himself smelled of soap, no longer of blood and sweat. He was naked and his skin no longer felt sticky and salty. Nor was there any taste of blood or salt in his mouth.
While he was feeling his cut with the fingers of his left hand, he heard a church tower bell ringing a half hour. However, he didn’t know which half hour. It didn’t matter. Regardless of the time of day, he felt like he needed more sleep.
Heinrich stretched out, felt a pleasant shiver as the cool blanket brushed over his bare skin, rolled to his side and gave a start. Somebody was sitting in the armchair at the foot of the bed.
Chapter VI
Heinrich lifted his head from a fluffy pillow with difficulty.
It was pleasantly dark around him, butand the rays of light sneaking past the edges of the drawn curtains sufficed for him to recognise his hotel room.
Relieved, he sank back into the soft down.
Do you mean to say:
Relieved, he sank back into the soft down pillow.
Or
Relieved, he softly sank back into the pillow.
His body felt as exhausted as if he had swuam several kilometres the day before.
His tendons burned, his muscles were tired and the blanket was so heavy on his chest and limbs that it took all his strength to feel for the necklace around his neck.
When he couldn’t find it, he remembered that the ring was on his finger.
He fidgeted with the ring before lowering his hand again.
The movement was so strenuous that Heinrich took a deep breath.
The air in the room was cool and smelled of soap.
He himself smelled of soap, no longer of blood and sweat.
He was naked and his skin no longer felt sticky and salty.
Nor was there any taste of blood or salt in his mouth.
While he was feeling his cut with the fingers of his left hand, he heard a church tower bell ringing for a half hour.
However, he didn’t know which half hour.
It didn’t matter.
Regardless of the time of day, he felt like he needed more sleep.
Heinrich stretched out, felt a pleasant shiver as the cool blanket brushed over his bare skin, rolled to his side and gave a start.
I'm not sure if Start is the right word here. Perhaps you mean to say, "... gave a stare."
Somebody was sitting in the armchair at the foot of the bed.
Dec. 19, 2023
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Heinrich lifted his head from a fluffy pillow with difficulty. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It was pleasantly dark around him, but the rays of light sneaking past the edges of the drawn curtains sufficed for him to recognise his hotel room. It was pleasantly dark around him, |
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Relieved, he sank back into the soft down. Relieved, he sank back into the soft down. Do you mean to say: Relieved, he sank back into the soft down pillow. Or Relieved, he softly sank back into the pillow. |
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His body felt as exhausted as if he had swum several kilometres the day before. His body felt as exhausted as if he had sw |
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His tendons burned, his muscles were tired and the blanket was so heavy on his chest and limbs that it took all his strength to feel for the necklace around his neck. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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When he couldn’t find it, he remembered that the ring was on his finger. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He fidgeted with the ring before lowering his hand again. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The movement was so strenuous that Heinrich took a deep breath. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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The air in the room was cool and smelled of soap. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He himself smelled of soap, no longer of blood and sweat. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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He was naked and his skin no longer felt sticky and salty. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Nor was there any taste of blood or salt in his mouth. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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While he was feeling his cut with the fingers of his left hand, he heard a church tower bell ringing a half hour. While he was feeling his cut with the fingers of his left hand, he heard a church tower bell ringing for a half hour. |
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However, he didn’t know which half hour. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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It didn’t matter. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Regardless of the time of day, he felt like he needed more sleep. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Heinrich stretched out, felt a pleasant shiver as the cool blanket brushed over his bare skin, rolled to his side and gave a start. Heinrich stretched out, felt a pleasant shiver as the cool blanket brushed over his bare skin, rolled to his side and gave a I'm not sure if Start is the right word here. Perhaps you mean to say, "... gave a stare." |
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Somebody was sitting in the armchair at the foot of the bed. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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