July 19, 2022
Chapter: 5 and 6 Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
Chapter 5 is all about theWillie Wonka's announcement to inviting five people into his Factory. After long time, Wonka made the decision to invited and have people again in the Factory, but this time with a Golden Ticket.
The Golden Ticket was the way to have your pass to visit the Factory. The little detail was that there were only five around the world. Find a ticket was a huge challenge, because Wonka's chocolate were sold everywhere in any store. However, Charlie who only got one bar a year was really hopeful to find one.
The first and second kid that found the Golden Ticket were people who could afford it. The one was a kid surprisingly fat who ate chocolate bars all the time. The second one was a girl whose father had a peanut company and made his employees work taking off the chocolate's wrapping papers . Sadly and unfairly manner to made it.
Help me with the title too, please.
Chapter:s 5 &/and 6: Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
Chapter 5 is all about theWillie Wonka's announcement tof inviting five people into his Factory.
After long time,It had been a while since Wonka had made the decision to invited and haveot people again int the Factory, but this time, doing so with a Golden Ticket.
Cohesiveness & phrasing
The Golden Ticket was the way to have your passonly way to visit the Factory.
The littlemost interesting detail was that there were only five tickets that existed around the world.
Need more clarification in this sentence that’s why I added the context
Finding a ticket was a huge challenge, because Wonka's chocolates were sold everywhere, in any store.!
However, Charlie, whom only gobought one bar a year, was really hopeful toin finding one.
The first and second kid that foupeople to find the Golden Ticket were peoplthose who could afford it.
The one was a kidfirst being a surprisingly fat mid who ate chocolate bars all the time.!
The second one recipient was a girl whose father had a peanut company and made his employees work taking off the chocolate's wrapping papers .
Great tricky sentence good job!
Sadly and unfairly manner to made itIt made the competition feel unfair and sad.
I don’t understand what you’re trying to say
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Chapters: 5 and 6 Charlie and the Chocolate Factory
Using chapter, may not agree in numbers with other words in the phrase
Chapter 5 is all about theWillie Wonka's announcement to invitinge five people into his Factory.
After a long time, Wonka made the decisiondecided to invited and have people again in the Factory, but this time with a Golden Ticket.
The phrase “made the decision to” may be unnecessarily wordy.
The Golden Ticket was the way to haveget your pass to visit the Factory.
The little detail was that there were only five aroundin the world.
Finding a ticket was a huge challenge, because Wonka's chocolate wereas sold in everywhere in any store.
However, CharlieCharlie, on the other hand, who only gotets one bar aper year, was reallvery hopeful tof finding one.
The first and second kids that found the Golden Ticket were people who could afford it.
Kid does not agree in numbers with other words in this phrase
The oOne was a kid surprisingly fat whokid who constantly ate chocolate bars all the time.
The second one was a girl whose father had a peanut company and made his employees work taking off the chocolate's wrapping papers .¶
Sadly and unfairly manner to made itIt was done in a depressing and unfair way.
I just found this particular sentence to be a little off, and so I had to paraphrase it.
July 20, 2022
Sadly and unfairly manner to made itIt was done in a depressing and unfair way.
On second thought, it is 😅 thank you! I meant to say that the way the kids got the tickets was unfair.
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Chapter: 5 and 6 Charlie and the Chocolate Factory Chapters: 5 and 6 Charlie and the Chocolate Factory Using chapter, may not agree in numbers with other words in the phrase Chapter |
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Chapter 5 is all about theWillie Wonka's announcement to inviting five people into his Factory. Chapter 5 is all about Chapter 5 is all about |
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After long time, Wonka made the decision to invited and have people again in the Factory, but this time with a Golden Ticket. After a long time, Wonka The phrase “made the decision to” may be unnecessarily wordy.
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The Golden Ticket was the way to have your pass to visit the Factory. The Golden Ticket was the way to The Golden Ticket was the |
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The little detail was that there were only five around the world. The little detail was that there were only five The Need more clarification in this sentence that’s why I added the context |
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Find a ticket was a huge challenge, because Wonka's chocolate were sold everywhere in any store. Finding a ticket was a huge challenge Finding a ticket was a huge challenge, because Wonka's chocolates were sold everywhere, in any store |
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However, Charlie who only got one bar a year was really hopeful to find one.
However, Charlie, whom only |
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The first and second kid that found the Golden Ticket were people who could afford it. The first and second kids that found the Golden Ticket were people who could afford it. Kid does not agree in numbers with other words in this phrase The first and second |
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The one was a kid surprisingly fat who ate chocolate bars all the time.
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The second one was a girl whose father had a peanut company and made his employees work taking off the chocolate's wrapping papers . The second The second one recipient was a girl whose father had a peanut company and made his employees work taking off the chocolate's wrapping papers Great tricky sentence good job! |
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Sadly and unfairly manner to made it.
I just found this particular sentence to be a little off, and so I had to paraphrase it.
I don’t understand what you’re trying to say |
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