Sept. 17, 2021
In the daytime period, I told my students that "if you keep me stay away from trouble, I will also keep you from trouble." However, the Chinese teacher who was having night class told me that a few students asked to go toilet in turn, which was very suspicious. Furthermore, quite a few students changed thire seats without approval. What's worse, a boy often went through the teachers' desk to throw rubbish. She regarded him was challenging her priciple.
Then I went to the classroom, stayed at the corrider to hear who was talking. I knew it was quite a bad behaviour, but I had no idea what to do. I heard that there were three obvious voice and I knew whose they were. So I went into the classroom and asked the talkers to stand up conciously. However, all the students became quiet quickly and no one answerd. I talked loud three names angrily and asked them to go to the office with me.
They all denied that they had talked. I got angrier because it sounded like I was insulting them. Otherwise, I smelled the smoke smell from a boy. I asked him that whether he also had smoked, he denied. I asked him to look at my eyes and tell me that he never did it, but he couldn't.
In the daytime period, it was him as well that he asked me not to posed my Wechat Moments all in English. It sounded like we were good friends. Everything was changing so quickly.
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In the daytime period, I told my students that "if you keep me stay away from trouble, I will also keep you from trouble."
However, the Chinese teacher who was havtaking night class told me that a few students asked to go toilet in turn, which was very suspicious.
Furthermore, quite a few students changed theire seats without approval.
What's worse, aone boy often went through the teachers' desk to throw rubbish.
I am not sure whether "through" is the best word here. Perhaps you mean "past" or maybe "over"?
She regarded thim ws behaviour as challenging her pricipleauthority.
Then I went to the classroom, but stayed atin the corrideor to hear who was talking.
I knew ithat what I was hearing was quite a bad behaviour, but I had no idea what to do.
I heard that there werecould make out three obvious voices, and I knew whose they were.
So I went into the classroom and asked the talkers to stand up conciously.
I'm not sure what you wish to express by the word "conciously". Perhaps you mean "at once". By the way, the word "conciously" is spelt "consciously".
However, all the students quickly became quiet quickly and no one answered.
I talkangrily shouted loudt three names angrily and asked themof three people and told those people to go to the office with me.
By the way, your phrase "I angrily talked loud..." should be "I angrily talked loudly..." When you are describing a verb (here the verb is "talked"), you need to use an adverb. The correct adverb here would be "loudly" not "loud". "Loud" is an adjective, and adjectives describe only nouns, not verbs.
The loud boy. (adjective describing the noun, "boy")
The boy talked loudly. (adverb describing how the boy talked, "loudly")
They all denied that they had talked.
I got angrier because it sounded like I was insulting them.
This is ok. However, it is a good idea to try to use a word other than "got". You could use "became".
Otherwise, I smelled the smoke smell from aIn addition, I could smell cigarette smoke from one of the boys.
I asked him that whether he also had smoked, but he denied this.
I asked him to look at myme in the eyes and tell me that he never did itsmoked, but he couldn't.
In the daytime period, it was him as wellalso him that he asked me not to posedt my Wechat Moments all in English.
"it was him" is informal English for "it was he", but most people use the informal form in everyday English, and that is ok.
It sounded like we were good friends.
Everything was changing so quickly.
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I understood everything you wrote.
You have used paragraphs in your text and this makes it easier for your reader to read the text. Thank you.
You have shown a good knowledge of verb tense use. Well done!
Take care with adverbs. Most adverbs have the letters "ly" at the end, e.g. loudly, politely, silently. How would you say the following in good English: "I did real good." ?
I hope that my suggestions help you. Please let me know if I can help you further.
Keep going. You are doing well!
Sincerely,
mjm
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In the daytime period, I told my students that "if you keep me stay away from trouble, I will also keep you from trouble." In the daytime period, I told my students that "if you keep me |
However, the Chinese teacher who was having night class told me that a few students asked to go toilet in turn, which was very suspicious. However, the Chinese teacher who was |
Furthermore, quite a few students changed thire seats without approval. Furthermore, quite a few students changed their |
What's worse, a boy often went through the teachers' desk to throw rubbish. What's worse, I am not sure whether "through" is the best word here. Perhaps you mean "past" or maybe "over"? |
She regarded him was challenging her priciple. She regarded thi |
Then I went to the classroom, stayed at the corrider to hear who was talking. Then I went to the classroom |
I knew it was quite a bad behaviour, but I had no idea what to do. I knew |
I heard that there were three obvious voice and I knew whose they were. I |
So I went into the classroom and asked the talkers to stand up conciously. So I went into the classroom and asked the talkers to stand up conciously. I'm not sure what you wish to express by the word "conciously". Perhaps you mean "at once". By the way, the word "conciously" is spelt "consciously". |
However, all the students became quiet quickly and no one answerd. However, all the students quickly became quiet |
I talked loud three names angrily and asked them to go to the office with me. I By the way, your phrase "I angrily talked loud..." should be "I angrily talked loudly..." When you are describing a verb (here the verb is "talked"), you need to use an adverb. The correct adverb here would be "loudly" not "loud". "Loud" is an adjective, and adjectives describe only nouns, not verbs. The loud boy. (adjective describing the noun, "boy") The boy talked loudly. (adverb describing how the boy talked, "loudly") |
They all denied that they had talked. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
I got angrier because it sounded like I was insulting them. I got angrier because it sounded like I was insulting them. This is ok. However, it is a good idea to try to use a word other than "got". You could use "became". |
Otherwise, I smelled the smoke smell from a boy.
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I asked him that whether he also had smoked, he denied. I asked him |
I asked him to look at my eyes and tell me that he never did it, but he couldn't. I asked him to look |
In the daytime period, it was him as well that he asked me not to posed my Wechat Moments all in English. In the daytime period, it was "it was him" is informal English for "it was he", but most people use the informal form in everyday English, and that is ok. |
It sounded like we were good friends. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
Everything was changing so quickly. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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