Challengeing myself with Ieltsan IELTS writing task 2 (18/07/2024)

I do not need an IeltsELTS certificate for work, but Ihave decided to challenge myself and you know what?.

I found out that, it was very hard and it took me 2 hours to complete this essay.

To be honest, even if I wriote this essay in my native language, I willould not definitely do ito it very well.

LMost large businesses have big budgets for marketing and promotion and as a result, many people gravitate towards buyingtend to their products.

What problems, if any, does this cause?

Nowadays, many big businesses have big funds for marketing and promotion and as a result, their customers gravitatend to buying their products.

In this essay, I will discuss what problems cause thatthis causes and what could be done to encourage people to buy more local products.

On the one hand, many big businesses have big funds for marketing and promotion, which causes some problems.COMMENT: This is redundant. (You have already mentioned this. Delete or revise.)

FirstlyBecause so much is pumped into advertisements, the quality of theimany consumer products is often reduced, which means that people using their products will be damaged usually and they will depress. In short, people end up paying for the advertisements rather than the products themselves.

Secondly, a lot ofin some economies local companies will bare faced with declining revenue, whichs. This causes many small companies to be less competitive and might be closed and the local economy would be delayedfrequently hampers the growth of local economies.

When people gravitate toward purchasing the products ofmade by many big businesses, the local products are atrun the risk of being forgotten, that. This not only affects thehas an adverse effect on local economyies, but it also causerodes loss of local cultural identityies.

SUGGESTION: Offer a concrete example. (The essay is a bit too abstract. It needs a concrete example.)

On the other hand, to protect the local products, what local companies need is to build their brand images efficiently.

Secondly, the government needs to pay attention tos should foster policies to support theing small local companies, such as tax reduction, finance and organizing fairs about local products.

CIn conclusion, many people gravitate to buying the products of big companies that affect not only the. This not only adversely impacts local economyies but also the quality of many products and cultural identityies.

Therefore, it is essential to collaborateion between the governments, businesses, and consumers in needed to protect and promote local brands.

By doing thatIn this way, we can ensure the sustainability and growth of local economies and preserve cultural identityies.

I found out that, it was very hard and took me 2 hours to complete thise essay.

To be honest, if I wriote this essay in my native language, I will not definitely do itwould not do well.

In this essay, I will discuss what problems cause thatthat causes and what could be done to encourage people to buy local products.

Firstly, the quality of their products is reduced, which means that people using their products will be damagedunhappy usually and they will depressislike the products.

Secondly, a lot of local companies will be faced with declining revenue, which causes many small companiesthem to be less competitive and they might be closed and. Because of this, the local economy would be delayedset back.

When people gravitate toward purchasing the products of many big businesses, the local products are at risk of being forgotten, t. That not only affects the economy but it also causes loss of cultural identity.

Firstly, They can use social media to spread the messages behind their products.

For instance, if your product is chopsticks you can spread the message “chopsticks are made from natural bamboo stalks,. They are good for health and environmental protection”.

Secondly, the government needs to pay attention to policies tohat support the small local companies, such as tax reduction, finance and organizing fairs aboutfairs supporting local products.

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CIn conclusion, many people gravitate to buying the products of big companies that, which affect s not only the economy but also the quality of product and cultural identity.