Dec. 1, 2024
Causes of screen addiction
The human spend much time on electronic advice.That has several causes of addiction.First of all,people do not happy in real life so they spend time on social media.For instance,boys have not car but they watch edit of car or play car games.Girls watch famoua person for seeing who rich life .Both of them watch instagram reels because it contains a lot of videos and all kind of topics.Furthermore,the human find to spend time something.Therefore,they contact screen.For example,they do not know how time pass so this is what they want or they play game because this continues very long time and it is fun.As the human have these reasons,they can be screen addiction.
The humanPeople spend too much time on their electronic adevice.That has severals. This is a major causes of addiction. First of all, people doare not happy in real life, so they spend time on social media. For instance,boys have not car but they males who don't own a car can watch editvideos of cars or play car games.Girls watch famoua person for seeing who rich life .Both of them Females who seek a rich lifestyle watch famous people. Both genders watch instagram reels because it contains a lot of videos andbout all kind of topics. Furthermore,the human find to spend time some people seek out enjoyment in doing thing.s. Therefore, they contact screen.For example,they do not know how time pass so this is what they want or they play game because this continues very long time and it is fun.As the human have these reasons,they can be screen addictionstare at their screens. They want to play games for long periods of time, but they don't know how much time actually passes. Because people are like this, they can become addicted to their screens.
Once again, I'll break these corrections into sizeable chunks:
1) "People spend too much time on their electronic devices." We use "people" when referring to a collective. Human(s) is used usually when we contrast ourselves to animals, describing our biological functions, or environment.
2) I consider the act of spending time on our phones as 1 big encompassing cause of addiction. It just happens to have many small factors.
3) "First of all, people are not happy in real life, so they spend time on social media. For instance, males who don't own a car can watch videos of cars or play car games. Females who seek a rich lifestyle watch famous people. Both genders watch instagram reels because it contains a lot of videos about all kind of topics." Here, it's mostly rewording these points to sound natural. In informal language, you can say "boys" and "girls", but in more formal writing "males" and "females" is preferrable.
4) The final sentences in the paragraph were my best attempt to understand what you're trying to convey. I assumed that you wanted to convey that we need to do things to entertain ourselves and that we lose track of time when we do so.
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Overall, I still understand the majority of what's being argued. The first half-ish just needs to be reworded to sound more natural. However, toward the end it becomes a bit confusing to know what's being conveyed and assumptions need to be made. I do agree thought, that we spend a lot of time staring at our phones and being on the computer. The bright, colorful screens and dopamine hits from social media make it easy to be addicted. This is exacerbated when we're dissatisfied with our lives, resulting in wanting to disconnect from reality.
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Causes of screen addiction |
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The human spend much time on electronic advice.That has several causes of addiction.First of all,people do not happy in real life so they spend time on social media.For instance,boys have not car but they watch edit of car or play car games.Girls watch famoua person for seeing who rich life .Both of them watch instagram reels because it contains a lot of videos and all kind of topics.Furthermore,the human find to spend time something.Therefore,they contact screen.For example,they do not know how time pass so this is what they want or they play game because this continues very long time and it is fun.As the human have these reasons,they can be screen addiction.
Once again, I'll break these corrections into sizeable chunks: 1) "People spend too much time on their electronic devices." We use "people" when referring to a collective. Human(s) is used usually when we contrast ourselves to animals, describing our biological functions, or environment. 2) I consider the act of spending time on our phones as 1 big encompassing cause of addiction. It just happens to have many small factors. 3) "First of all, people are not happy in real life, so they spend time on social media. For instance, males who don't own a car can watch videos of cars or play car games. Females who seek a rich lifestyle watch famous people. Both genders watch instagram reels because it contains a lot of videos about all kind of topics." Here, it's mostly rewording these points to sound natural. In informal language, you can say "boys" and "girls", but in more formal writing "males" and "females" is preferrable. 4) The final sentences in the paragraph were my best attempt to understand what you're trying to convey. I assumed that you wanted to convey that we need to do things to entertain ourselves and that we lose track of time when we do so. |
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