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Carrot juice

In the morning, I tried to make a carrot juice. Unfortunately, while i make it, the hand blender was broken. I don't like carrot so I wanted to grind all the carrots but half of them wren't ground. I could chew all the chunks of carrot. I hated the texture and flavor.

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In theThis morning, I tried to make a carrot juice.

Unfortunately, while iI was makeing it, the hand blender was broken.

I don't like carrots so I wanted to grind (blend?) all the carrots but half of them wredidn't ground.ind (blend?)

I could chew all the chunks of carrotarrot chunks.

Carrot juice

In the morning, I tried to make a carrot juice.

"A carrot juice" is not unheard of, but in that situation, there is implicitly an omitted classifier (like "glass" or "type of"). Example: https://english.stackexchange.com/q/276491/113475 "Carrot juice" might also come more naturally to some people.

Unfortunately, while i make it,en I tried to make it, I found that the hand blender was broken.

When you use "while," the main clause should have an action that takes place during the time indicated by the "while" clause. "Was" and other forms of "be" can't be used here, because they describe ongoing states.

I don't like carrots so I wanted to grind up all the carrots, but half of them weren't ground still in large chunks.

I could chew all the chunks of carrot [in my carrot juice].

I would just say "chunks of carrot" unless you're trying to emphasize how much carrot you had to chew: "As I drank the juice, I had to chew all the chunks of carrot left."

I hated the texture and flavor.

Carrot juice

In theThis morning, I tried to make a carrot juice.

Unfortunately, while ithe hand blender was broken. / Unfortunately, when I tried to make it, the hand blender was broken.

To me, "while I make it" seems redundant, but I would use the second sentence if you wanted to keep it in.

I don't like carrots so I wanted to grind all the carrots but half of them wren't grounblend them, but half of them did not get blended.

I couldhad to chew all the chunks of carrot.

I hated the texture and flavor.

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Carrot juice


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In the morning, I tried to make a carrot juice.


In theThis morning, I tried to make a carrot juice.

In the morning, I tried to make a carrot juice.

"A carrot juice" is not unheard of, but in that situation, there is implicitly an omitted classifier (like "glass" or "type of"). Example: https://english.stackexchange.com/q/276491/113475 "Carrot juice" might also come more naturally to some people.

In theThis morning, I tried to make a carrot juice.

Unfortunately, while i make it, the hand blender was broken.


Unfortunately, while ithe hand blender was broken. / Unfortunately, when I tried to make it, the hand blender was broken.

To me, "while I make it" seems redundant, but I would use the second sentence if you wanted to keep it in.

Unfortunately, while i make it,en I tried to make it, I found that the hand blender was broken.

When you use "while," the main clause should have an action that takes place during the time indicated by the "while" clause. "Was" and other forms of "be" can't be used here, because they describe ongoing states.

Unfortunately, while iI was makeing it, the hand blender was broken.

I don't like carrot so I wanted to grind all the carrots but half of them wren't ground.


I don't like carrots so I wanted to grind all the carrots but half of them wren't grounblend them, but half of them did not get blended.

I don't like carrots so I wanted to grind up all the carrots, but half of them weren't ground still in large chunks.

I don't like carrots so I wanted to grind (blend?) all the carrots but half of them wredidn't ground.ind (blend?)

I could chew all the chunks of carrot.


I couldhad to chew all the chunks of carrot.

I could chew all the chunks of carrot [in my carrot juice].

I would just say "chunks of carrot" unless you're trying to emphasize how much carrot you had to chew: "As I drank the juice, I had to chew all the chunks of carrot left."

I could chew all the chunks of carrotarrot chunks.

I hated the texture and flavor.


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