Jan. 16, 2026
On The Verge of Death
A few weeks ago, me and my family were having a splendid sunday evening: After attending an organ concert, we went to dine in an Italian restaurant I had found online several days before. It had thousands of excellent reviews and was located in the very heart of Moscow. At first, everything was just perfect: We had ordered our meals and were more than satisfied with both the prices and the food quality. It was rather cold outside, so we also got some fruit tea to warm us up. As I was finishing my third cup of this delicious beverage, I noticed some small glass fragments at the bottom of the cup. Yes, some glass fragments! In my third cup! I instantly felt my stomach growling and, becoming aghast, looked at the glass teapot and noticed that one part of it was missing. Now, I understand that the drink must have been so scalding that that part could just imperceptibly break and fall inside the teapot. The most terrifying fact was that I did not know the amount of glass I had consumed, if any. I can not describe that ineffable feeling of fear and apprehenshion one his covered with in such situations. Everything went well eventually, and I didn't have a single symptom of any intestinal problems. The whole story is so absurd and unprobable that I was not even sure about posting it here. I think I will never forget this evening.
On The Verge of Death
A few weeks ago, me and my family were having a splendid sSunday evening:.
as you probably know, to be proper grammar it should be "my family and I," but almost no one talks like that outside of formal context, written papers etc
After attending an organ concert, we went to dine in an Italian restaurant I had found online several days before.
It had thousands of excellent reviews and was located in the very heart of Moscow.
At first, everything was just perfect:.
Testing those colons, eh? It's kinda tricky... but one thing is for sure: the phrase or clause after the colon has to be strongly related to or exemplify the previous sentence, often sharing the same subject. In fact, here you could say: "At first, everything was just perfect: both the prices and the food quality." (<--- shares the same subject of "everything," exemplifies what "everything" is), whereas in your sentence the subject becomes "we" instead. The sentence you have after the colon is just too independent from this one to be connected with a colon.
We had ordered our meals and were more than satisfied with both the prices and the food quality.
It was rather cold outside, so we also got some fruit tea to warm us up.
As I was finishing my third cup of this delicious beverage, I noticed some small glass fragments at the bottom of the cup.
Yes, some glass fragments!
In my third cup!
I instantly felt my stomach growling and, becoming aghast, looked at the glass teapot and noticed that one part of it was missing.
Now, I understand that the drink must have been so scalding that that part could just imperceptibly break and fall inside the teapot.
The most terrifying facpart was that I did not know the amount of glass I had consumed, if any.
The meaning gets across, but "fact" feels inaccurate and a little off here
I can not describe that ineffable feeling of fear and apprehenshion one his covered withnsumed by in such situations.
wouldn't use "covered" here, it has the feeling of a superficial layer of something on top of you, not something you feel internally
You can use it with external emotional type things that happen TO you like "covered with love" or something like "I was covered by a false sense of security" seems okay...)
Everything went well eventually, and I didn't have a single symptom of any intestinal problems.
The whole story is so absurd and unprobable that I was not even sure about posting it here.
I think I will never forget this evening.
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That is truly mysterious... I'm glad the teacup assassin didn't get you...
Jan. 16, 2026
Ooh, were you trying to avoid saying "part" so many times back-to-back? You could replace "so scalding that that part" with "so scalding that a piece"
Jan. 17, 2026
As always, thank you for your detailed and extremely helpful explanations, gaezer! I hope I am off his radar now...
On The Verge of Death
A few weeks ago, me and my family and I were having a splendid sSunday evening:
After attending an organ concert, we went to dine in an Italian restaurant I had found online several days before.
It had thousands of excellent reviews and was located in the very heart of Moscow.
At first, everything was just perfect:
We had ordered our meals and were more than satisfied with both the prices and the food quality.
It was rather cold outside, so we also got some fruit tea to warm us up.
As I was finishing my third cup of this delicious beverage, I noticed some small glass fragments at the bottom of the cup.
Yes, some glass fragments!
In my third cup!
I instantly felt my stomach growling and, becoming aghast, looked at the glass teapot and noticed that one part of it was missing.
Now, I understand that the drink must have been so scalding that that part could just imperceptibly break and fall inside the teapot.
The most terrifying fact was that I did not know the amount of glass I had consumed, if any.
I can not describe that ineffable feeling of fear and apprehenshion one his covered with in such situations.
Everything went well eventually, and I didn't have a single symptom of any intestinal problems.
The whole story is so absurd and unprobable that I was not even sure about posting it here.
I think I will never forget this evening.
Jan. 17, 2026
Thanks!
On The Verge of Death
A few weeks ago, me and my family were having a splendid sSunday evening:.
The colon at the end isn't really necessary here. A period will suffice. The colon usually implies that some sort of list will follow.
After attending an organ concert, we went to dine inat an Italian restaurant I had found online several days before.
It had thousands of excellent reviews and was located in the very heart of Moscow.
At first, everything was just perfect:.
Period instead of colon.
We had ordered our meals and were more than satisfied with both the prices and the food quality.
It was rather cold outside, so we also got some fruit tea to warm us up.
As I was finishing my third cup of this delicious beverage, I noticed some small glass fragments at the bottom of the cup.
Yes, some glass fragments!
In my third cup!
I instantly felt my stomach growling and, becoming aghast, looked at the glass teapot and noticed that one part of it was missing.
Now, I understand that the drink must have been so scalding that that part could just imperceptibly break and fall inside the teapot.
The most terrifying fact was that I did not know the amount of glass I had consumed, if any.
I can not describe that ineffable feeling of fear and apprehenshion that one his covernsumed with in such situations.
The whole story is so absurd and unimprobable that I was not even sure about posting it here.
I think I will never forget this evening.
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Wow, this was a really well told and scary story. Especially the way you revealed the problem: "As I was finishing my third cup of this delicious beverage, I noticed some small glass fragments at the bottom of the cup." Terrifying! Great writing!
Jan. 17, 2026
Your corrections are very helpful, ddvz, thank you!
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