Jan. 13, 2020
Bussiness trip in China
From today until January of 24, I have business trip in China.
I will visit many factories of supplier and I will talk about new products with my fellow workers and technical personnel.
I hope this year I will make a lot of good products with factories of supplier !
今日から1月24日まで中国出張です。
多くの供給先と会い新しい製品について同僚を交え技術担当者と打ち合わせをします。
今年も多くのいい製品を共有先工場と作れればと願っています。
Bussiness trip in China
From today until January of 24, I have24th, I am on a business trip in China.
I will visit many factories of my supplier and I will talk about new products with my fellow workers and technical personnel.
I hope this year I will make a lot of good products with the factories of my supplier !
Jan. 13, 2020
ありがとうございます！参考にさせて頂きます！
Bussiness trip in China
From today until January of 24, I haveI am on a business trip in China until January 24.
I will visit many factories of suppliersuppliers' factories, and I will talk about new products with my fellow workers and technical personnelians.
I hope that this year I will make a lot of good products with factories of supplier these suppliers' factories!
Jan. 13, 2020
ありがとうございます！ 参考にさせて頂きます！
Bussiness tTrip in China
Titles are capitalized
From today until January of 24, I haveI am on a business trip in China until January 24.
This sounds more natural to me.
I will visit many factories of supplierof our supplier's factories and I will talk about new products with my fellow workers and technical personnel.
This sounds more natural to me.
If there is more than one supplier, you should say "suppliers' factories"
I hope this yeare factories and I will make a lot of good products with factories of supplier together this year!
Again, this sounds more natural.
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Nice job.
The other suggested corrections are good, too. I've suggested corrections that sound more natural to me.
Jan. 13, 2020
いつもありがとうございます！本当に感謝しています！
Bussiness trip in China
From today until January of 24, I haveam on a business trip in China.
While I understand what you mean, 'to have' is not used with business trip. I think it would work better with 'to be on a business trip'.
I will visit many factories of suppliers and I will talk about new products with my fellow workers and technical personnel.
You are talking about multiple factories so I assume there are multiple suppliers. If there is only one supplier you work with then maybe you could use 'many factories of our supplier'.
I hope that this year I will make a lot of good products with the factories of suppliers !
I don't really know how to explain it but it sounds more natural to use 'that' here. Also, you need to use the here with factories to specify what you'll be working together with.
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It sounds like an exciting business trip, I hope you'll have fun!
Jan. 13, 2020
色々コメントありがとうございます！ 日本語での返事になってごめんなさい！助かりました！
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From today until January of 24, I have business trip in China. From today until January of 24, I While I understand what you mean, 'to have' is not used with business trip. I think it would work better with 'to be on a business trip'.
This sounds more natural to me.
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I will visit many factories of supplier and I will talk about new products with my fellow workers and technical personnel. I will visit many factories of suppliers and I will talk about new products with my fellow workers and technical personnel. You are talking about multiple factories so I assume there are multiple suppliers. If there is only one supplier you work with then maybe you could use 'many factories of our supplier'. I will visit many This sounds more natural to me. If there is more than one supplier, you should say "suppliers' factories" I will visit many I will visit many factories of my supplier and I will talk about new products with my fellow workers and technical personnel. |
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I hope this year I will make a lot of good products with factories of supplier ! I hope that this year I will make a lot of good products with the factories of suppliers ! I don't really know how to explain it but it sounds more natural to use 'that' here. Also, you need to use the here with factories to specify what you'll be working together with. I hope th Again, this sounds more natural. I hope that this year I will make a lot of good products with I hope this year I will make a lot of good products with the factories of my supplier |
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