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olivier_chen

May 23, 2022

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Business Writing - 20220523

(I'm a freelance illustrator, and this is a mail replying to my customer)

Thanks for your message.

May I please understand how many pages you'll need for your book? And how old are the tartget audience will be as well? I'll use a proper style according to different audiences.

I will provide the quote based on the volume of the illustrations and the delivery estimates for your reference as soon as I can understand some basic requirements to help get started with the project.

Should you have any questions or concerns, please also feel free to let me know again. Thanks so much!

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(I'm a freelance illustrator, and this is a n email replying to my/a customer)

May ICan you please understandlet me know how many pages you'll need for your book?

And how old arelso it would be good to know the age of the tartget audience will be as well?.

I'll use a proper style according to differenn appropriate style catered to the target audiences.

I will provide theyou with a quote based on the volume of the illustrations and the delivery estimates for your reference as soon as I can understand some basic requirements tohat will help me get started with the project.

It works but it is a very long sentence!

Should you have any questions or concerns, please also feel free to let me know again/feel free to get in contact.

Thanks so much!

Many Thanks

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Well done :) good luck with the project.

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olivier_chen

June 15, 2022

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Many thanks! :-)) 🙏 ☺️

Thanks for your message.

And how old areis the tartget audience will be as well?

"Are" and "will be" are both the same verb, you only need one or the other.

I'll use a proper style according to differentdifferent style depending on the audiences.

What you wrote works and is understandable, but this is a little simpler.

I will provide the quote based on the volume of the illustrations and the delivery estimates for your reference as soon as I can understand some basic requirements to help get started with the project.of the project. The quote will be based on the volume of the illustrations and the delivery deadlines.

This is a longish sentence and is probably better broken into two, or at least separated a bit by commas.

Should you have any questions or concerns, please also feel free to let me know again.

"feel free to let me know" is a commonly used phrase in English. You don't need the "also" and "again".

Thanks so much!

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Your grammar is solid, and most of my corrections are only stylistic suggestions. In my opinion, simpler is better.

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olivier_chen

June 15, 2022

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Thanks a lot for the suggestion!! :-)))

Business Writing - 20220523


(I'm a freelance illustrator, and this is a mail replying to my customer)


(I'm a freelance illustrator, and this is a n email replying to my/a customer)

Thanks for your message.


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

May I please understand how many pages you'll need for your book?


May ICan you please understandlet me know how many pages you'll need for your book?

And how old are the tartget audience will be as well?


And how old areis the tartget audience will be as well?

"Are" and "will be" are both the same verb, you only need one or the other.

And how old arelso it would be good to know the age of the tartget audience will be as well?.

I'll use a proper style according to different audiences.


I'll use a proper style according to differentdifferent style depending on the audiences.

What you wrote works and is understandable, but this is a little simpler.

I'll use a proper style according to differenn appropriate style catered to the target audiences.

I will provide the quote based on the volume of the illustrations and the delivery estimates for your reference as soon as I can understand some basic requirements to help get started with the project.


I will provide the quote based on the volume of the illustrations and the delivery estimates for your reference as soon as I can understand some basic requirements to help get started with the project.of the project. The quote will be based on the volume of the illustrations and the delivery deadlines.

This is a longish sentence and is probably better broken into two, or at least separated a bit by commas.

I will provide theyou with a quote based on the volume of the illustrations and the delivery estimates for your reference as soon as I can understand some basic requirements tohat will help me get started with the project.

It works but it is a very long sentence!

Should you have any questions or concerns, please also feel free to let me know again.


Should you have any questions or concerns, please also feel free to let me know again.

"feel free to let me know" is a commonly used phrase in English. You don't need the "also" and "again".

Should you have any questions or concerns, please also feel free to let me know again/feel free to get in contact.

Thanks so much!


This sentence has been marked as perfect!

Thanks so much!

Many Thanks

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