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Our company is in the first tier of IT industry. One year ago,it was the first in local life services region. Up to one year ago, many internet giants have tried to competed with it, but no one defeated it. Most people had trusted that our company would constantly be the first in the next 5 even more years.
However, since Q1 2025 JingDong and Alibaba declared war with our company one after another. We were so busy to cope with the war. At first, JingDong didn't capture much market share, but two months later Alibaba started a much stronger attack and captured lots of market share. Up to August 2025, Alibaba and our company nearly were neck and neck.
Last week, Alibaba declared that they had the decision of grabbing the first in local life services region. Maybe there's a fiercer war waiting for us.
Our company is in the first tier of the IT industry.
Article usage.
One year ago, it was the first inleader in the local life services region.
Add a space after the comma.
“Leader in the local life services sector” is more natural
Up to one year ago, many internet giants have tried to competed with it, but no one defeated it.
Use “tried to compete”
Also, “none” is smoother than "no one"
However, since Q1 2025, JingDong and Alibaba have declared war withon our company one after another.
Add a comma after “Q1 2025.”
Use “declared war on” instead of “with.”
Present perfect (“have declared”) fits better with “since.”
We were so busy to copecoping with the war.
Use “coping with” instead of “to cope with.”
Up toBy August 2025, Alibaba and our were company nearly were neck and neck.
“By August” is more natural.
Remove “nearly” before “were” for smoother phrasing.
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The corrections are mostly about word choice, article usage, and tense consistency, not about meaning. Your ideas are already strong and clear. Good job on writing this! Keep going 🤍
You and your company are in a tight position right now. I hope your company will continue to provide the best performance with your customers.
Our company is in the firhighest tier of the IT industry.
"First" is okay, but when talking about tiers, it sounds more natural to talk about higher and lower tiers.
One year ago, it was the first in local life services region.
I'm not sure what "local life services region" means. Do you mean that it was "ranked first in the area of local life services"?
Up to onentil last year ago, many internet giants haved tried to competed with it, but no one defeated it.
Most people had trusted that our company would constantly be the first in the next 5 even more yearsyears, or even longer.
However, since Q1 2025 JingDong and Alibaba declared war with our company one after another.
We were so busy to copecoping with the war.
At first, JingDong didn't capture much market share, but two months later Alibaba started a much stronger attack and captured lots of market share.
Up to August 2025, Alibaba and our company nearly were neck and neck.
Last week, Alibaba declared that they had the decision of grabbing the first in local life services region.
Once again I'm not sure I understand what "grabbing the first in local life services region" means.
Maybe there's a fiercer war waiting for us.
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This sounds tough! Good luck!
Our company is in the first tier of the IT industry.
One year ago, it was the first in the local life services region.
Most people had trusted that our company would constantly be the first in the next 5 or even more years.
However, since Q1, 2025, JingDong and Alibaba declared war with our company one after another.
We were so busy to copecoping with the war.
Last week, Alibaba declared that they had the decision of grabbing the first in the local life services region.
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Our company is in the first tier of IT industry. Our company is in the first tier of the IT industry. Our company is in the first tier of the IT industry. Article usage. Our company is in the "First" is okay, but when talking about tiers, it sounds more natural to talk about higher and lower tiers. |
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One year ago,it was the first in local life services region. One year ago, it was the first in the local life services region. One year ago, it was the Add a space after the comma. “Leader in the local life services sector” is more natural One year ago, it was the first in local life services region. I'm not sure what "local life services region" means. Do you mean that it was "ranked first in the area of local life services"? |
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Up to one year ago, many internet giants have tried to competed with it, but no one defeated it. Up to one year ago, many internet giants Use “tried to compete” Also, “none” is smoother than "no one" U |
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Most people had trusted that our company would constantly be the first in the next 5 even more years. Most people had trusted that our company would constantly be the first in the next 5 or even more years. Most people had trusted that our company would constantly be the first in the next 5 |
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However, since Q1 2025 JingDong and Alibaba declared war with our company one after another. However, since Q1, 2025, JingDong and Alibaba declared war with our company one after another. However, since Q1 2025, JingDong and Alibaba have declared war Add a comma after “Q1 2025.” Use “declared war on” instead of “with.” Present perfect (“have declared”) fits better with “since.” This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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We were so busy to cope with the war. We were so busy We were so busy Use “coping with” instead of “to cope with.” We were so busy |
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At first, JingDong didn't capture much market share, but two months later Alibaba started a much stronger attack and captured lots of market share. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Up to August 2025, Alibaba and our company nearly were neck and neck.
“By August” is more natural. Remove “nearly” before “were” for smoother phrasing. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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Last week, Alibaba declared that they had the decision of grabbing the first in local life services region. Last week, Alibaba declared that they had the decision of grabbing the first in the local life services region. Last week, Alibaba declared that they had the decision of grabbing the first in local life services region. Once again I'm not sure I understand what "grabbing the first in local life services region" means. |
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Maybe there's a fiercer war waiting for us. This sentence has been marked as perfect! |
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