[ATTN] My opinions about your rRecommendations - Betty Friedman 0714 THU

We would never use the phrase, "my opinion(s)," in the subject line of a memo in the US.

Dear KennyMr. Atkins,

or if you know the person well,

Dear Kenny

Hello, Hhow are you?

I a'm Betty Friedman, a member of the Board of Directors.

I readThank you for your recommendations carefully.

We don't usually write what you write in business letters in the US. We just thank them for it.

I would like to tell you my opinions about themHere's what I think.

This sentence can be omitted, too.

First, about theregarding internal communications, I like your ideas.

Your sentence is correct. This is another way to write it.

We have not had a systematic policy of weekly reports and accounts before.

Therefore, I hope we can test this new policyone soon.

Second, aboutregarding the Ssales reps/Head Office, I a'm afraid that we might not have enough of a budget for the devices in the company.

Our company wants to check if it is a possiblewhether it's possible to make a plan with the accounting team first andbefore discuss abouting alternative plans with the rest of the teams.

Lastly, aboutregarding Customer Services Department, I totally agree about the necessity that we have to makeof having a new procedure forto dealing with product complaints.

We already had the issues related to the product complaints and must not handle the issues like in the waywe did before.

This makes it very clear what you want.

In summary, I would like to follow your first and third recommendations but we need to change the second one asto an alternative plan in case the budget is not realistic.

I will keep you updated you after the next Tuesday meeting with our accounting team.

Hello, Hhow are you?

Alternate greetings could be: "Greetings." or "Good day." or simply "Hello." Sometimes, it is not necessary since you already had the salutation part [which is the "Dear Kenny Atkins," part]. In that case, you would just state your main purpose or introduction.

I am Betty Friedman, a member of the Board of Directors.

I have read your recommendations carefully.

I would like to tell you my opinions about them.

This is redundant. In formal e-mails, you would usually just be straight to the point.

First, about the internal communications, I like your ideas.

"Like" is a weak word. You may use "appreciate" or give a more elaborate compliment. Ex: I think your proposal is novel and worth discussing further.

We have not had a systematic policy of weekly reports and accounts before.

Second, about the Sales rReps/Head Office, I am afraid that we might not have enough budget for the devices in company.

Our company wants to check if it is a possible to plan with the account team first, and then discuss about alternative plans with other teams.

Our company is a collective noun which makes it singular in form.

Lastly, about the Customer Services Department, I totally agree about the necessity that we have to make a new procedure for dealing with product complaints.

We already had theseveral issues related to the product complaints and must not handle the issues like in the way before.

In summary, I would like to follow your first and third recommendations but. However, we need to changealter the second one as alternative plan in case the budget is not realisticin case it exceeds budget expectations.